Tokyo Onmyoji Story

Too much about the Riddler actually reduces the reading sense of the novel. Just like the chapter about Shuten, the protagonist is basically in a passive state throughout the whole process. Others are talking about the Riddler. Although the final treatment makes Shuten die, it is difficult for the reader to feel happy. After watching the whole process, the reader will only have doubts about what I read.

The highlight of my personal experience is the rare emotional drama between a cold and a hot man. It is not a story where one is cold and the other is hot. It is really difficult to write about two hedgehogs falling in love. It mainly requires plot foreshadowing (coincidences, the suspension bridge effect in times of adversity) and psychological rendering (the psychology of going from strangers to friends to lovers) so that it does not appear abrupt, just like Harmono Yatsuki. Recently, I like to read these carefully prepared emotional dramas, the process of psychological changes, and the plots that promote the bursting of emotions. If you have similar novels, you can recommend them to me in the comment area.

After reading dozens of chapters of psychological description, hey, is this a novel? This is the author's own pleasure. . .

This book is reboot, reboot, reboot! Important things have been mentioned three times, the work has been written about it, single chapters have been published, and the author's words have also been written. This book is a reboot! Don't ask why many things are the same as the previous one, because it's originally a revised version. You can always see it if I post it here again, right?

The author has prepared many chapters for the transformation of the protagonist, but I have to say that the preparation is not good, it is a bit blunt, and the content of self-pleasure is higher than the plot. It's not that the author can't express some things, but these things cannot transcend the plot. You are writing a novel, not directly expressing emotions! ! ! This is a novel, and your plot is the most important thing. From the part about removing spirits to Mio persuading the protagonist to give up his practice, it is obviously more reasonable for an elder and more experienced Onmyoji to teach the protagonist. The character of Mio has not been as mature as the protagonist in the plot so far. She is too self-centered. Why can you point fingers at others? Don't say anything without saying it directly. Your actions speak for themselves. Can such a person who thinks he is superior but actually has no matching abilities really make people transform? Moreover, within a few missions and a dozen chapters, the protagonist's fundamental change in mentality was too rapid. If the protagonist has had similar ideas before, he should make more advances. The existing preparation is completely insufficient.

The author writes very carefully, maybe because I am not suitable for this kind of "riddler" and all kinds of specious writing methods. I seemed to be struggling, and I had less and less desire to continue reading. But I still hope the author will work hard.

Come on, but at the same time, I hope that the author will not be too influenced by the readers. The author is a kind of job that needs to be able to endure loneliness. Some authors are late bloomers, except of course if they have no money now, they will starve to death.

Author, are you describing a subjective and idealistic worldview? I think the behavior of the characters in this book is not a logical evolution, but more like the behavior of ancient Tantric followers, and what they do seems to be ritual imitation. Your story shows your belief in morality and your relative view of the world, so I can't figure it out. Author, you have to wait until the story is finished to come up with a puzzle chapter to explain it properly.

How can I put it this way? It makes me feel so awkward.

Come on, big brother who writes code!

Come on, author! I think this rhythm is very good. It is not easy to find a novel that is comfortable to read in Qidian. ps: This kind of novel is too easy to be hacked. Several of my favorite novels have been hacked 😭, so be careful.

Have you ever thought about the reason? Scholars must be ambitious and have a long way to go. If they cannot stand up for themselves, they will always be swayed by public opinion. It is very likely that they will not please both sides. Let's encourage each other. . . .

I skipped the Riddler part... It was really boring. The Riddler part

The author can really persevere

We are almost at the same level as before the restart. It does look better after the restart.

Personal opinion: The writing style is quite good, but it is not enough for what the author wants to write. At present, the author may want to write the character's growth clearly, and write it very slowly. However, until the latest chapter that I have read now, the whole story still lacks a climax. 1. In the three or four incidents, various psychological activities of people are basically described in detail. It is really difficult to say how good they are at creating monsters. There are too many character descriptions that obscure the plot, and the final resolution is not powerful enough. 2. Character issues. I personally have no feelings about the characters of the male and female protagonists, because there are too many psychological descriptions. To shape the characters through psychological descriptions instead of plots and behaviors will make the characters unreal and the content very boring. It is best to express your heart through various actions. For example, in the toad incident, after the male protagonist watches the female protagonist go down, he can use "hands suspended in mid-air" to express his desire to stop her, "walking back and forth on the shore" to express uneasiness, "repeatedly looking at the river" to express concern, "wagging fingers" to express hesitation, etc. 3. Plot setting. The monk died too early, and he was gone without being established in my heart, so the psychological activities of the protagonist he guided were boring. Of course, this is not a big problem, after all, he died too early. Then, if I wanted to write a long story, I dug the hole too early and the characters weren't established yet. I wrote a long paragraph and it felt a bit messy. To sum it up: the characters created through long psychological descriptions are too weak, covering up the plot and unable to support the climax of the story. In this case, it starts to dig holes again and distracts the reader's attention. Although it is covered up with writing, this article is slow and boring after reading it for a long time.

Without ambition, it cannot advance the plot. Even if those ambitions are ridiculous, it is better than having none at all.

The author of this book is a young man, and he does not pay much attention to writing about monsters and monsters. He mainly wants to explore the heart of the male protagonist through some events, and also wants to describe love through daily life, so please don't be confused by the introduction. In fact, it is a love philosophy novel covered in a demonic novel.

It's really well written

You're secretly writing a new book, and you didn't even tell me? Subao

The disadvantage is that the writing style is a bit too bland and not refreshing at all. Judging from the current writing style, it cannot attract readers. After all, nowadays, reading is a fast-paced way to enjoy the secretion of dopamine. Therefore, I hope the author can appropriately strengthen the rhythm and the twists and contrasts of the plot.

It's really interesting, especially after the content before the reboot, and then as the setting unfolds, it becomes more and more interesting.

I've only read the first 5 chapters but I really like the writing style.