Learning Magic at Hogwarts

27 Freshmen? There are only 7 new students in Slytherin! If you don't add a 1 in front of it, you will make people laugh to death. There are more than 100 people in the school's seven grades in total, and the collapse of Hogwarts is due to your writing 😅

The protagonist is very complex, written as if he is quite capable, but in fact he dares not do anything. When Filch targets him, he will only have cold eyes and no way to deal with it. Peeves also bullies him, with cold eyes and no action. All I can say to the author is stop writing this kind of rubbish. It's such a waste.

The problem that is easy to fall into when writing Harry Potter-themed fan fiction is that the plot is too routine, and there is nothing exciting about it. I have read more than fifty chapters so far, and the protagonist has hardly done any interesting behavior. He is just constantly interacting with others. Goldfinger and other things have appeared, but they have little promotion effect on the protagonist and the plot. As an online fan fiction, it is too bland.

Oh, Dean, are there so few comments because Muggles can't read this book? This is so disappointing.

Is it that the male protagonist can't have his own schedule? He's always with Eve in the beginning.

Author, looking directly at the basilisk is immediate death. The petrification was caused by indirectly seeing the basilisk glasses.

It's written like a cloud, why the hell have all the details been changed? A snake with eyelids? Crossing the Black Lake is crossing the river? Filch is a Muggle? Will the basilisk's direct gaze only turn it to stone? What the hell is this?

I didn't believe it after reading the book review, but after reading dozens of chapters, it was indeed baffling! The plot is mysterious and the characters are sophisticated! abandon early

It was pretty good to write before Eve came along. Ever since she appeared, I felt a bit strange. The protagonist seems to be instantly charmed. On the train, Cedric greets the protagonist, Cedric first. It was also a cold attitude with another girl. Then when I arrived at Eve, I took the initiative to say hello and introduce myself. Even when they arrive at the dormitory, the protagonist finally introduces himself. The suddenness was very serious. Then when I arrived at Hogwarts, I did everything with Eve . There are obviously roommates, and the relationship between two of them is okay, but the protagonist is not with the same sex. Instead, he hangs out with Eve every day. The two met on the train, and their relationship is not deep. I'm not talking about anything else, I'm talking about the sense of dissonance, you know, the sense of dissonance. Then from Eve's side, she established a dominant relationship with her roommate, and two girls followed her. As a result, she asked the two girls to go first and be with the protagonist. The first time can be understood as wooing, but the result is the same every time, and they are inseparable every day. It can be said that both people are already in a leadership position when eating, but what about other times. Like the protagonist inviting her to the library to do homework or something. It's the two eleven-year-old children in the HP novel who are suspected of dating. If this was a high school and college novel written by a female protagonist, and the female protagonist hangs out with the male protagonist every day and is misunderstood to be together, you wouldn't feel much about it. But these are two children, they are only eleven or twelve years old and have just entered school. It feels very uncomfortable to write a plot like this. Finally, let's talk about the character Eve. She has a serious feeling of being pendant in front of the protagonist. The kind that the protagonist is with her every day and can't live without. But what is her role? The protagonist teaches her how to do her homework. It was to pull her away from danger when Peeves was causing trouble. It was Eve's provocation that caused Gryffindor's dissatisfaction with Slytherin. The two houses almost fought over the reason of "Quidditch". In the end, Eve's nod led to the inexplicable accusation of "targeting Gryffindor".

The writing of this book is very good, I have followed it, but the biggest problem is that it is a fanfic. The author gives people the feeling that he has never read the original work. Many common sense settings are wrong or the second setting is really awkward.