The Story of Immortality of the Liu Family in Peach Blossom Mountain

Nice article, but many aspects were not handled well. First, the various arts of cultivation are not difficult for the protagonist, and he can learn whatever he wants. Second, opportunities are given openly, and luck is all in the protagonist's hands. What luck is, it is luck that is achieved by multi-faceted bonuses. Third, after reading more than 300 chapters, the protagonist's team has never lost. You think the other teams are fools. Fourth, many aspects are purely descriptive, and this needs to be changed. Fifth, the protagonist breaks through very quickly in the early stage. This is a bit deliberate. The Yuanying family can't cultivate it even if they train it with all their strength. How can your Qi training family cultivate it? The sky-level skills also require a lot of resources for breakthrough. Sixth, regarding sects, forces that like to expand outward will be fully suppressed by other sects, just like Qin and the Six Kingdoms. The rating is five points, I give it three points.

The writing of this family story is relatively empty and ordinary, but overall it is good. Whenever there is an opportunity, I will tell my family or friends because I feel that I can't die fast enough. I also lick women when I see them. There are too many scenes about women. Cultivation should be cautious. It is impossible to hand over everything. If you are caught by the enemy and search for souls, don't you know everything? Cultivation of immortality shouldn't include too many emotional dramas. If you just stay in seclusion for a few years, isn't it focused on cultivation? There is also sharing spiritual meals and spiritual objects with people when meeting people. This is also a resource for cultivating immortals. Can resources for cultivating immortals be wasted like this?

It's not a family flow, it's okay if the family is a vassal of the sect. Later, the protagonists will join the sect. We watch the rise of the family, not the story of the old sect. The titles of the author's books all refer to family members, and they are selling sheep's heads as dog meat.

To test the spiritual roots, the sect must come to test them. Those with good spiritual roots have been accepted into the sect. How can we develop a family? Everyone in the family knows their spiritual roots clearly. Also, if you want to break through the golden elixir and become a sect elder, how can you develop your family? I'm afraid that the sect will quietly destroy you before you reach the level of Nascent Soul or above. It's better to write about the sect directly.

I am a lover of online literature and have read many novels about cultivating immortals. However, I do not agree with the protagonist's journey of cultivating immortals. So, I came up with the idea of ​​writing a novel about cultivating immortals. What is the greatest motivation for cultivating immortality? Just immortality? I feel that if it is just to live alone for a long time. Cultivation of immortality is not worth pursuing. Just like many people pursue money and power, not only to strengthen themselves, but also to live a better life for their families. Just like me, the biggest motivation for writing this novel is to create better learning conditions for my daughter! Therefore, I hope that all book friends can provide more valuable opinions! Thank you all!

I feel that the author is still young, has too little experience, and the characters are stereotyped, so he cannot write a profound and sinister article about ordinary people. Many places seem awkward. I hope I think more about it when I write it, otherwise it will be like writing a diary, which is dry and has no sense of substitution.

This book lacks too much. It was written wrong from the beginning. At the beginning, you told everyone in advance that the planet has the highest transformation god on this planet. Why is it not ascending? It is a planet. When you first started practicing Qi, you mentioned transformation. You should maintain a sense of awe for higher realms. And you should not talk about transformation. If you can reach the golden elixir, you should say that you don't know. You are too amazing. You know the planet from the beginning? ? ?

Originally, the writing was okay in all aspects, but as a result, you, the author, wrote endlessly about the romance. You don't know if it's too much or not enough, you are not cultivating immortality. If Liu Changxu hadn't been the protagonist, he would have been killed long ago for being such a slut, indecisive, and lacking in courage. Normally, such a character is just a salty fish The more poisonous you write, the more poisonous you become. See for yourself whether the writing is reasonable. You might as well write urban romances, why bother writing about cultivating immortals? ? Even inner demons have to show up from time to time, and women have to please from time to time, including the master's family and so on. Don't please too many people, you can't control everything, and he is still the protagonist.

It's really disgusting. I keep saying that I have a wife and can't be tempted, while driving forcefully.

How can you get good reviews if you turn a fairy tale into a harem novel?

It's true🐶💩, there are so many resources.

Overall good, but there are a few minor issues. First: The protagonist and the family should be equal, and one should not dedicate too much or take too much care of the family. Second: Cultivating immortality and various arts feels a bit too easy. Third: Cultivation of immortals must be done by the weak and the strong, and the strong have more. Fourth: In the back of this novel, the entire family is probably immortal, which feels a bit false. My personal feeling, just for reference.

It doesn't have much poison, it just feels like drinking boiled water, which is bland.

Borrowing precious treasures to push the book, "I will clean up the Tibetan Scripture Pavilion at the beginning, and I will complete the incomplete skills." Mortal flow, Gou Dao flow, IQ will not decrease if IQ is online, the protagonist's magical power refers to ancient magic: a wonderful pen creates a dragon, scattering beans to form an army, dividing the ground to form a river, etc. Interested Taoist friends can take a look. If you are bothering me, please contact me. [Asking mortals to recommend each other's authors]

The protagonist has practiced the art to become a god and still works hard for the sect. This is a sect story, not a family story. The author is trying to sell the story like a sheep's head. Waste my subscription

Spiritual Mountains, Spiritual Lands, Spiritual Objects These are well written Most of the plots are pretty good But the protagonist is too perverted The Foundation Establishment Monk has the God-Transformation Technique The Foundation Establishment hoist severely injures the Golden Elixir Instant Kill the Foundation Establishment Perfection The Golden Elixir is the third level in the early stage The step taken is too big. I can still bear it at the beginning. Fighting requires victory, defeat, planning, happiness, ups and downs, and is exciting

He cultivates immortality but also takes concubines, which is another harem novel

After seeing the introduction to Battle of Heaven and Earth, you should know what kind of book this is.

I looked at the character list and found that except for the main character, who is male, the rest of the supporting characters are all female. This book has obvious ingredients. Can I still read it?

Immortal Road to Heaven and Sea, Mortal Flow, No Female Protagonist, Long Story, Slow Tempo

It's okay, I just like to hang my wife in my crotch, my son in my belt, and my family on my shoulders.

Open a harem and write more emotional dramas

What are you writing about? The first chapter gives people a headache just reading it. Where are you editing the textbook?

Tall buildings rise from the ground. How can you know the sky until you grow old? I wish the author a great success in making this book a success. Polite borrowing: Meeting is fate, guest, do you want to come and see me, "Nirvana Immortal Tribe", group portraits, big background Family cultivation, power plot, delicate writing, emotions of each character Online, non-routine, original story, if you think it is still interesting, please comment and support.

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