Douluo Dalu: The Lightsaber Douluo

I think it's very poisonous. The protagonist's sword is so blunt that it can't break the defense of anyone at the same level. One even stabbed someone else, only bleeding from the corner of his mouth, no wounds at all? Isn't this too fake?

The picture is the protagonist's lightsaber

I don't know how to put it, I think it's very poisonous. It's all just for the sake of showing off. It started so well, but the Spirit Hall ended up being left alone. I can't write anything apart from the original work. I don't want to read it. I suggest you don't read it either. It's really poisonous.

Come on, write the sword master in my heart, don't have too many secondary settings and other plots, stick to the main line

The author should consider improving his writing style, now it looks like a running account. The sense of immersion is not strong.

Although it's a bit awkward, but, well, the idea is quite good. At least it's not poisonous. The author is also making progress

To be honest, there is nothing wrong with you writing Dabai novels, let alone the fanfics you write, right? But you are writing about a novice, can you feel more comfortable? You're unhappy. There's nothing in this writing that makes people see the strategy. You didn't write any strategy, so what did you write? You say there is innovation, but there is no innovation at all. What you can see here, I can see everything next door. If you write like this, you can only enjoy yourself in the end, and then cut it off.

It's so poisonous. In the early stage, Tang Hao came to see the protagonist. Later, the protagonist was worried about Tang San. What a dog. And this plot...

You don't know why your writing skills are so bad, but in terms of ordinary works, your writing is okay, but you have forgotten that although fan fiction is easy to write, the fatal problem is that it is too plot-heavy. If there is no plot, your writing is nothing. My opinion is that you should write It is clear from this Douluo Dalu novel that the limitations of writing martial arts are too great, and absorbing high-end soul rings is too fake. You should pay close attention to the writing and color of the novels you read, just like an artifact, it will only be an artifact, and you must devour other artifacts if you want to advance. For example, the highest realm of Tao is nothingness, which means that everything exists and everything exists. If he didn't get the martial spirit, his limitations would be unlimited.

Let me give you a preview, this is the cover design of the next book, what do you think 😃