Legend of Xuancang

This is the first time I see this kind of opening, it feels very novel, and I can't help but want to read more chapters

This is the first time Lao Mao writes a book, and there are many shortcomings. Lao Mao will carefully review the suggestions and criticisms from all book friends, and if time permits, they will be corrected one by one. In short, Laomao will work hard, so please be more patient.

Dear book friends, there are more and more characters in this book, and the map is getting bigger and bigger. My mind is almost confused just thinking about the names these days. Now collect the names of various places, people, exercises, plants, monsters, and formations. The quantity required is large! ! Contributions welcome

First of all, this time travel makes no sense. In my previous life, I was a little monk. Nothing high-minded. The skills are weak and the heroine is a servant. Personally, I feel it is not in line with the character of an ancient monk. If it were possible for modern people to marry two servants. After reading the first chapter, I came to watch the water. It's really not as good as the people on Earth traveling through time with something like a dark blue hanging. What a waste of subject matter. I really like this kind of family creation. But you. . Time travel is useless.

After watching it for so long, let me tell you my feelings. It's a good idea, but there are a lot of bugs. For example, the protagonist is too smooth, just the part where he meets two robbers in the Qi Refining stage. I was speechless at that time. The two monks in the late Qi Refining stage have no means at all, and they are stupid. I really don't know how they cultivated to this level. Moreover, many places are unreasonable. There are also problems with the world view design. Moreover, after grabbing the storage bag, I opened it directly. What if there is a trap? After thousands of years of development, there will always be some people with great brains. For example, if you put a poisonous elixir in the elixir that others can't detect, it will always be too smooth. The supporting characters are brainless, and the development of the family and the experience of the protagonist are like a running account. I just tell you this, losing the fun of cultivation itself and the hardships and hardships in the process of building a family. And the planning of everything is a little bit perfectionist, as if he is a person born to build a family, and never makes mistakes. That's all I have to say, but considering that this is the first time for the author to write a book, I will express my thoughts. However, it seems that this book has not been updated for three days. I hope you will stick to it or if the next book is about family building, you can implement "caution" instead of clicking through every family meeting like a running account. If you are not careful about writing contacts, you can read "The Road to the Immortal Master". I hope the author can think about it carefully. I think you can write a good book, come on!

It's still pretty good, but it feels a little bit off. It's just a golden elixir and Yuanying monk who feels that when he speaks, he should try not to say "we...", Otherwise it will feel too low. After all, this is still a classical fairy tale 😎

If you want to have a family, you have to have more children. Otherwise, what kind of family is it?

After reading them all, I have just one suggestion. If you don't want to change the family's location, you can use spells to expand the area of ​​the island or connect the surrounding islands. It's okay to raise your spiritual vein level. You can also talk about the adventures of the children and grandchildren and the feedback they give to the family. And the development of talents in all aspects.

After reading it, I think it's pretty good, but it's too smooth. The protagonist's family has an 180% success rate in building a foundation, which is a bit outrageous. In hundreds of years, what area can the family dominate? Please support it by putting it on the shelves.

The character descriptions are not rich enough, and many situations lack description. For example, my previous cultivation experience, I haven't seen foundation building yet, I have simply upgraded, and I have simply learned the exercises. Others are too watery, but you are too dry. This is my personal opinion. Very inappropriate.

No, in a novel about cultivating immortals, wouldn't the protagonist be able to live without refining elixir? And it's completely lost. Originally, the second-level formation master had such a good foundation, so he didn't continue to learn, and he had to learn alchemy. It's completely unnecessary.

Has the author gone into the factory to screw with Rose? Take me with you.

I just watched it, let me tell you a few things, because this is a family creation stream, don't do anything that can't build a foundation, and the protagonist doesn't lose his virginity, so when does the family start it? Second, since the protagonist was at the ninth level of Qi training in his previous life, he has many insights and it is understandable that he should quickly return to his original state. But it broke through very quickly afterwards, and it was unreasonable if there was no obvious golden finger. Good guy, he's faster than other people's Tianlinggen!

It's outrageous. A few foundation building can kill the monsters in the early and middle stages of the third level. Even if they are injured, the foundation building can't kill them. It's better not to be killed by the third level monsters in the middle stage of foundation building.

Brother author, can you write well without punctuation? Don't you care so much about the quality of the novel?

It's okay to be able to read it. After all, there are very few books that can be read.

If Mao hasn't updated it yet, he will definitely stop writing. And even if he gives up on novels, he won't be able to write anymore.

You have too few sons. You should find some more heroines to have 10 or something. This will be a good story about the family ancestors.

Comment from a bookworm of more than ten years: This book is quite solidly written, with few bright spots and more straightforward narratives. What is commendable is that it has a reasonable structure and self-consistent logic. This is already better than most novels. I believe that the author will get better and better if he persists.

Come on (ง •̀_•́)งThere are few novels about building your own family

The author doesn't insist. If you keep at it, this family cultivating immortality series can get more than 10,000 orders. I also want to read it with more than 1 million words. I came here today and saw that it has not been updated. It's a pity.

Come on, author, I have been keeping it, I almost thought it was gone😔

Horses and grass are not fat at night, I think the protagonist can organize his family to do pirate robbery in the Star Luo Sea

What a pity! That's it for eunuchs. I recommend The Immortal Shepherd, a book like this one about raising children and building a family, and also about farming. I hope all book friends will also recommend Ha Yousa's good book.