Asking About Immortality in the Wilderness Chronicles

I can be considered an old book friend of Sui Feng, from the previous book Asking Questions to this book Immortality. Generally speaking, the writing power and writing style of the book Chang Sheng are much better. But there are still some problems. The overall layout is good, with foreshadowing and suspense, rather than a straightforward narrative. It is definitely much better than a short story. But as far as the plot is concerned, there is not enough innovation, it is a bit bland and cliché. The most recent chapter is just like this. The protagonist just appears at the end. Most writings may be like this, but it might be better to make something new (of course I haven't thought about where to make something new here)! The only thing that makes me feel poisonous is the hostility. Although the protagonist's mentality will change somewhat when he comes to such a wild world, Suifeng's way of writing it feels a bit stiff. Then there is the Blue and White Sea of ​​​​Consciousness. I just feel that the opening is a bit too big, but when I think that it is caused by the mysterious seal pattern, it is barely acceptable and reasonable. Then the problem lies in this mysterious seal tattoo, which is also the protagonist's biggest golden finger. It depends on how Sui Feng writes in the future. It is worth looking forward to this secret. After all, this follows the protagonist II, why does it appear, and what is its function? Full of mystery and suspense! Going back to the plot, perhaps Sui Feng is not good at describing emotions, and the writing is very stiff, which makes people feel like they are worthless. For Vanilla, being the heroine is definitely not enough, but being a confidant is still okay. So when describing Sui Feng, I suggest that the wording should be concise and not use some vague words, so that it can be described clearly. Of course, Vanilla's own monologue can be admired more! (Personal suggestion) If I write about the heroine in the future, I personally hope that the heroine has some background, and it would be best if she comes from the same story. As for the heroine, it's better not to be poisonous or torture her to death. Uemoto asked if the heroine can handle it well. If she can't control it enough, she can become invisible😄! Returning to the overall view, the recent plot was too bland and had no important points. At the Fairy Mansion of the Red Dust, I read the comments from book friends. Indeed, it was better to go down to the sea and find that there was no sense of summons. It feels a little abrupt. After all, this island has been discovered for a long time. What has not been explored? In summary, from an overall perspective, it gives people a very good impression and will not cause dyslexia. This is a major advantage. Even book friends who have not read the original work can watch it directly. Secondly, the characters, the protagonist is still standing and has a physical form. But there is one thing, although there is no big problem, but I will mention it here by the way. The protagonist is new to the Tieniu tribe and has no problem getting to know the Tieniu tribe. He accompanied him all the way to Jade Dragon City. He was too enthusiastic later on. The protagonist aims to cultivate immortality, and although worldliness is indispensable, he will definitely not have too many interactions with the Tieniu tribe in the end. At most, the protagonist will help the Tieniu tribe if something goes wrong in the future. Too much ink will be a bit misleading. Of course, this is just my opinion. What special arrangements Sui Feng has will depend on his own performance. Third, for Shuangdian, these chapters have laid the groundwork, but it doesn't feel like enough. Since entering the Jade Dragon Army, there has been no explosion of Shuangdian, and the feeling is very dull. Shuangdian still needs to be continued, thrown out bit by bit, and it feels good! The above is all just idle talk. Suggestions are welcome. Turn left when trolls post!

The plot in the original work in which the God-King threatens the protagonist with the heroine is enough to make people speechless. Nowadays, fans are still copying the routine of the original work, except that it has been changed to the God-King threatening the protagonist with a child. It seems that the writer can only play within the framework of the original work, and can never escape the shadow of the original work, even copying such disgusting routines.

The biggest poisonous point of this book is that it doesn't know the plot. In the original book, Ji Ning was plotted against you, and you will be plotted against him as well. After Wu Jianmen's plot, he will probably expose his clone and threaten his son, and then he will probably be plotted by Old Man Yuan later. You have no plot or something. The plot of the original book is acceptable, but this is a fan. Fans arrange this kind of plot for ghosts, so it is better to read the original book.

This vanilla is just plain disgusting. It advances the plot just to advance the plot. It's so blunt that you can't swallow it. Consider this book your pinnacle. It's well written. Don't write it next time.

Update time description: The new book issue will contain one chapter at 12 noon and one chapter at 18:00 every day. If there are special circumstances, they will be specifically explained in the last updated chapter. During the new book period, it needs to be continuously updated, and it also needs promotion time. Old friends, please be patient for a while. The manuscripts saved in the new book period will be updated after they are put on the shelves. After all, Sui Feng is a part-timer and cannot compare to full-time masters, but he will definitely update diligently! I hope you guys can support me more! Sui Feng's greetings!

You really have no right to say that your grades are poor. There are several major bad points. Book friends will comment on you, but you either don't care, or you are too lazy to change them... Going your own way will only attract readers who have similar ideas to you. If it's not bad, it's a ghost.

I really feel speechless. I have to forcefully arrange all kinds of violent conflicts. I can obviously practice well, but because of this and that, I am always in life and death crisis. I just vomit blood. You will die if you practice hard for a while. You are obviously very qualified and with the help of the cyan mist, you can take off after practicing honestly for a while. You have to forcefully arrange various brainless plots. Abandoned, abandoned, poisoned to death🤢

Come on, author, don't give up. Keep up the quality. As time goes by, your grades will go up if you get a few more recommendations.

A rare Manghuangji fan 👍

This kind of novel is just for fun. It has to talk about romance and love, and it is written as a romantic drama. If you don't rush to the street, it is unreasonable.

It's a pity that there is another woman here. Oh, I feel so angry.

I can't stand it anymore. It was written in the same old way many years ago. The whole world has trouble with the protagonist. He kills the young and then the old. He has to be stuck in saving people. I can't bear it anymore.

At the beginning of the novel, we have to write about the environment of the primitive wilderness. Can we not write the routines of civilized society into the primitive environment? I haven't even read ten chapters and I can't stand it anymore. I just scream when I have nothing to do. I meet a girl who plays coquettishly with you when everything is fine. This is in the wilderness. Such people will have died long ago.

First of all, the author writes quite patiently. However, the problem is also quite obvious. The basic training logic is obviously wrong, and the plot is simple, making it a bit unbearable after the middle period. The protagonist has only been practicing for a few years, but his strength is comparable to that of an immortal (this realm is equivalent to the immortal military lord who swallows the stars). His realm is that he can reach the 10th level of Tongtian Bridge. This is simply impossible, and the training process and preparation lack rationality. The same goes for magical powers and secret arts. It is very difficult for others to learn even one, but the protagonist can easily learn a lot of them. The more you read it, the more unreasonable things accumulate, and the more embarrassing they become.

The latest chapter is a bit disgusting. The author just wants to restrict the protagonist and prevent the protagonist from progressing too fast and letting the protagonist waste 70 years in vain. If you are afraid that the protagonist's cultivation level is too high at the beginning of the plot, then it is better to set it 10 years ago, and insist on making it 70 years ago. Now you find that you can't handle it, so you can only limit it.

A halo of wisdom, go to Jade Dragon City, you will offend people if you enter, 66666

To be honest, this novel ranks among the top three fan novels I have read. The quality is so good, but it is a pity that there is only the Three Realms chapter. It would be a pity not to write the following content.

I have read it several times. After reading about ten chapters each time, I thought about the poison that the protagonist wasted 70 years on, and gave up again. This kind of poison is a huge poison in the novel world. I used to see this kind of routine too much, but now I can't stand it anymore.

What a great book. The best one I've read so far is the Manghuang Ji fanfic. I don't want to brag about it. It's mainly because the author has a good attitude. From the comments, the author has a good attitude. I've read hundreds of thousands of words. It's very creative. You can read it even if you haven't watched Manghuang Ji. I've only watched the anime and manga. . . It's also been a while since I've updated

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It's very interesting, a rare fic, and it feels like it retains the original flavor but also has a new plot. It's a lot of hard work for me to get a monthly ticket, so I must stick to it! ! Great 🤓🤓🤓, first time posting, haha

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Many people want to read the protagonist of the original work. I can only say that after reading a dozen or twenty fanfics, you will be disgusted with the plot of the original work. Because you have read too many, such as Zhetian fanfics, the plots of each book are similar. After reading a few books, you will no longer have a feeling for the original plot. This kind of borrowing the world view of the original work to write a novel Books with our own content are the expectations of old fan readers like us. I have no feeling for the plot of the original work. Now, old fan readers don't read fan fiction because they like the original characters. When I first started reading, I was still looking forward to it. After reading more, I realized that what I liked was not the characters, but the world view of the great gods.

You have used the world of fan fiction to create an original novel. It is very well written. It is much better than those novels in which the protagonists grow up together. To add a generalization, it evolves into "fan world fiction" rather than fan fiction.

The author is awesome. At this level, I can write something original in the next book. Come on, the writing will become smoother and smoother.

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Title of this book: In order to save Ji Ning's wife! Author: To make up for the regrets of the past! Book Friends: Pig's feet are already awesome, no, they are awesome! Me: Damn it, will Ji Ning die if I don't write about it? You are so awesome that you directly turned Ji Ning's wife from the original novel into a living being!

After reading about ten chapters... There are too many inner dramas and daily conversations that have nothing to do with the main plot. The sense of rhythm needs to be strengthened. The male protagonist's character/background settings sometimes conflict with the plot. Looking for further improvements…