The Distorted World of Cultivation

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{"TopicId":"655215323930427392","TopicName":"Cthulhu Cultivation System"} Since the author is willing to read it, I am also willing to write more. The previous article greatly praised the author's innovative style and foundational writing style, so this article will start to test the author's ability to withstand pressure through scolding. I hope Gray Fisherman doesn't mind and can delete the post. First of all, after I raise a question, I will provide solutions and reference plans to avoid some people's "you can you up". However, because I don't know the author's outline and ideas, and because this article is short, I cannot complain too much about the plot of this article. I can only briefly state the points that I am very dissatisfied with. First, the background of the White Dragon Scripture really made me dissatisfied to the point of explosion. I guess the author wanted the White Dragon Scripture to be a foreshadowing for meeting the father of the deformed girl in the future. It is very likely that a big shot came back to look for his daughter. After discovering the distortion, he was furious and then killed the whole family. After forcing the protagonist to describe it, he raised the protagonist as his own son or turned him into a black man. Although this idea is old-fashioned, it is still usable.  However! The protagonist's practice skills are very important, and the setting of this background is really shabby. The setting of this technique can be regarded as the author's first mechanical deus ex machina in the whole text. The effect of this deus ex machina is very poor. If I were to set it (thinking randomly), I would probably set it as a girl desperately trying to save the protagonist and let the protagonist kill herself. The protagonist tried his best to chop off the immortal head but failed. Discovering a breath of demonic energy rising to the sky, the protagonist rushes with the belief that he must die, and purifies many aberrant organizations, but is still defeated. At this time, a white dragon-like statue that is entangled in flesh and blood outside the territory and can only pose a crazy, stiff and crazy smile reveals itself, tears dripping from the corners of its eyes, passes through the world barrier, and returns everything to dust. The protagonist received the White Dragon Scripture wrapped in tears, and the white dragon was completely dragged to a fleshy mouth by the tentacles and smashed to pieces. In this way, the background is extremely inclusive. You can add things and settings to the scriptures at will in the future. At the same time, the plot can also be regarded as the rebels of the old era risking their lives to pass on the fire and the last glimmer of hope to the protagonist. The exploration of the ruins of the old era also has a more beautiful space and reasonable golden fingers, paving the way for the next deus ex machina. Second, there is an extremely serious drama problem. From the first chapter to the twelfth chapter, the writing tone is relatively stable, but after the twelfth chapter, it begins to fluctuate greatly. The most prominent problem is that the plot of Feng Erniang is very, very abrupt. We can now try to separate out the plot of Feng Erniang. After I tried it and showed it to a friend, his first impression was the same as mine. It was like a martial arts novel. From the name to the reason for the action to the shaping of the appearance, it was very similar to the martial arts in the 1990s. It's not that it's not good, but the influence of so many years has led to the subject matter and description being completely copied. Over and over again, the image of a person becomes a template. A charming and arrogant female boss who likes to pretend to be an ordinary inn proprietor will appear in all the flooded Internet articles. However, the positioning of this work is definitely not one of the flooded Internet articles. What's more, the popularity of "Lord of Mysteries" has proved that the current readers' level is not what "Douluo Dalu" satisfied more than ten years ago. As I said before, after I raise the problem, I usually provide a reference plan. Among this kind of problem, I think the one who handles this kind of problem best in the Internet is Squid. He can be regarded as one of the strongest in character creation. "The Lord of Mystery" is his peak work. He is kind and poor but does not abandon the bottom line, but has no sense of motherhood; Miss Gold Coin is so rich that she takes off but is gentle and pleasant, and she is simple but not stupid at all. Bai Tian is getting closer and closer to the image of a perfect heroine; every speech she makes when licking the dog mirror is a unique and just right lick; the little sun in the land abandoned by the gods is taciturn and simple but does not lose hope; and the British gentleman style Amon is sinister and cunning but does not make people feel disgusted at all. Are there any images among these that are used in disgusting ways? When the writing entered a deeper stage, as Alexandre Dumas said, "The actions of each of them were no longer under my control. When I imagined the scene, each of them moved vividly. When I finished writing the ending of "The Three Musketeers," even I started crying." Third, and what I think is the most serious problem, is the sense of delicacy and fragmentation. The novelty of the subject matter requires a lot of changes in writing style, and the shaping of the sense of delicacy requires reference to history. The process of famine relief can be delicate and delicate. This is not the arrogant and cool Long Ao Tianwen, but let's take "The Secret" as a model. The important reason why I highly recommend this book is that the economic system, social culture and even the government structure behind it have no sense of collapse at all. For example, in too many novels, one medium-grade spiritual stone is exchanged for 100 low-grade ones, 100 high-grade spiritual stones are exchanged for medium-grade ones, and 100 extremely high-grade spiritual stones are replaced for high-grade ones. Then, when they are not enough, they introduce vitality liquid, then some vitality crystals, vitality bottles, and then the protagonist spends billions. The economic system has completely collapsed. The various sects have almost no decrees on major disasters within their jurisdiction. The government structure cannot be established through joint sects. The social and cultural differences are almost the same as the different cultivation methods. If the climax of the first major chapter of this game is the famine in the Southern Territory, it would be a masterpiece. It can completely shape a tragic process. Then, in the plot of the first chapter, the white dragon's struggling tears attracted not only a skill, but also an unintentional glance from the corrupted ancient gods. However, the aura of disaster brought by this gaze continued to roll along with the actions of the protagonist. In addition, the great famine completely destroyed the Southern Territory. Even if the local governor and the protagonist realize that all their efforts can not change any outcome. You see, this sense of oppression by the ancient gods and the helplessness of human beings in this kind of world can be produced. Of course, my idea is also very weak and elementary level, after all, it takes less time. Similarly, the plot driving force of the protagonist is generated in the first stage. In this way, a lot of pen and ink can be spent to write words to expand the social background setting. Drawing on the tragic situation and measures during the disaster relief process in the late Ming Dynasty will not make readers feel weak and stripped of reality. It can also increase the author's update frequency and word count. It simply kills multiple birds with one stone. The Grammar genre is a very difficult subject to control. With so many authors over the years, "Mystery" can be regarded as a super fanfic of the Grammatical genre in online literature, and the gap in this book is still visible to the naked eye. Of course, the above are all my personal opinions, and I hope you will forgive me. Due to space limitations, there are still quite a lot of things and shortcomings that are difficult to describe, so this article will be written here for the time being. I hope that everyone who is committed to cultivating immortals can gain something. Thank you again for the author's generosity and everyone's discussion, thank you!

Damn, I invested in another eunuch

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I found it on Zhihu. I only read a few chapters posted by the author on Zhihu. The writing is very good, and the first three chapters are particularly attractive. The setting is also very good, but the plot after killing the mother and sister no longer focuses on the mystery and unknown of Cthulhu, but more of a cultivation novel. I think the combination of cultivation and Cthulhu should be the outer layer of cultivation. The mystery, weirdness and unknown of Cthulhu are the core. The immature opinions of a ten-year online article reader.

A bit scary but still pretty cool

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