Tokyo Life Starting with Love Tips

However, the writing and pace are too slow. There are too many descriptions and too little narration. The background situation, including psychological description and analytical description, needs to be described, but it must be detailed and comprehensive, otherwise it will appear to be weak. The novel is more about plot. The characters of this book are actually quite attractive, but the above problems cannot be ignored. What does the author think?

Due to the success of love games, most light novels have become follow-up works, keywords, high school students, study well, private high schools, young ladies. Indeed, it is very easy for follow-up works to achieve good results, so I feel that this book is like a hero in troubled times, giving people a different sense, which is an advantage. But the pace is too slow, and the plot in Chapter 80 advances too slowly. But the chapters updated in the past few days are much better. The author's writing style and plot design have improved at a speed that is visible to the naked eye. Therefore, a book should not only be judged by its popularity, but also judged by readers' comments.

The author's first book The plot with multiple female protagonists is too blunt and even has no feeling at all. The whole plot has no highlights, and the special abilities have no highlights.

It's hard to understand, why today's Nikkei has to add a yandere who is unreasonable and makes the protagonist weak. Is it possible that Nikki's character design is fixed? Others appear at the beginning anyway, and they get together early and leave early if they can't accept it, but the protagonist has always been smooth sailing, and you suddenly have a female supporting character who constantly attacks the male protagonist. One-third of the recent updates are about yandere. How can you not dare to offend her if you are rich and powerful? Why is this? !

It's okay in itself, the beginning is great. But after the girlfriend line appeared in the middle, I thought it would be developed in depth, but suddenly a yandere young lady appeared. At this point, the protagonist is a scumbag, and the girlfriend's role has a very weak sense of existence. Finally, it's over, it's over. The writing style is okay, but the quality of the writing cannot be said, but the logic of the story is not perfect.

I like the style of your book very much, but your ending made me think ten years later... It was the first time I tried such an ending and I vomited blood.

①More than a hundred chapters are still good ②The plot advancement is not slow ③There is little interaction between female characters The most important point is that there are too few updates🤓

There is a lot of nonsense. Every time I encounter something, I first interpret it mentally or make some comments, and then quote a famous saying while explaining it. What impressed me the most was the chapter about how iced soda should taste good. It explains that ice contains more carbon dioxide and stimulates the brain more. Then what is the protagonist busy with? The soda is no longer iced and doesn't taste good, but he still drinks it in order not to waste it. This chapter can be written twice.

It looks good

Compared with the current wife's character, she is peaceful and serene, and has a haggard and weak feeling that a single mother with no debt should have. Let's regard it as the character of the wife who has solved the trouble with the help of the protagonist. Artist: mono Illustration id:85430828

， I have to say it's too pretentious (referring to the author), and I feel this way in the two chapters before and after (88 and 89). Just be firm when you need to be, don't be coy. Uncomfortable. While talking about his heroic ambition, he is also all kinds of hypocritical.        ， Who can remain indifferent? Not to mention whether you can help or not, even if you are a ruthless person and just want to protect yourself wisely, what does it matter if you help call the police. What do you think? (It takes ten minutes to walk, and it took 6 minutes for urgent matters. Is there anything worth saying? Is it a short time?) Let's not talk about this for now, after all, it affects all aspects. But this thought is speechless, (original text: It feels like it is not good to turn a blind eye). Do you really have this kind of thought? ? ? Although the result is correct, these are just the inner thoughts of the protagonist, but there is something wrong with the idea. Some things are wrong, even if they are insignificant, they should not appear. It has to make you feel sick, right? Some people may say that I am hypocritical, but this is an idea that is inconsistent with my three views.

It's normal for this daily novel to have inner drama, but there are too many. Every time I meet a woman, I have to repeatedly talk about what the hero is doing 😅. The character image is not enriched by the inner drama, but it seems a bit long-winded. In many chapters, almost half of the content is inner drama, which is a bit excessive. Also, the plot really should be advanced a little bit.

Aomi Kawa Nanase is sunny, cheerful and innocent.

It looked pretty good at the beginning, but at the end, he suddenly appeared in a vegetative state for ten years. It was really...

Although the ending is a little weird, but... Let's finish it off🎉

This episode with Kurokawa really disgusted me. It felt like the protagonist suddenly changed to a different person. I'm here to read the novel, not to be disgusted

The third child was recommended by Love Options.

The proliferation of daily plots and detailed descriptions is not a problem in itself, at least the writing can make people want to read on. However, the overall progress is not compatible. With this way of writing, more updates will be a reasonable compensation.

Are there any novels similar to Taile?

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I burst into tears. The last book I had to keep on getting was G.

I have never seen such a light novel

Hahaha, the author's idea of ​​ten years later is really easy

Can you say it's a waste of time? The emotional lines with the neighbor and Qingmei are well described in the article, followed by the cousin line (you are living a good life, you can marry your cousin?) And the student line are also OK, but the yandere line is a bit unsatisfactory. Of course, this does not mean that the author's writing skills are not good, it can only be said that the author did not really have an outline at the beginning of the article, which led to a bad ending?

Ordinary life is written into novels. In this fast-paced era, passion is missing after all. Like chicken ribs, tasteless to eat and a pity to throw away

You really can't handle this, buddy.

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I stayed up late dancing and watching for a while and I almost got a chokehold 🥵😭😡😳