Misty Notes

The subject matter is good, but the writing style needs to be improved. There are a lot of redundant descriptions in this book, such as the two descriptions of the monster's appearance in Chapter 2, and the description of the Night Crow Motorcycle in Chapters 1 and 4. The semantics are repetitive, of little use, and give readers a bad impression. There are also many places that seem to be just for fun, without reflecting the causes and consequences at all. The details are not described in place, and the environment is poorly shaped, making it difficult to give readers a good sense of involvement. The above are only some of my personal one-sided views. Please believe that I only made the comments in order to make the author write better. The above comments.

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