Konoha's Frozen Vortex

You should just write that the Uzumaki clan has been destroyed, and then the protagonist goes to work as a dog for Konoha, saying that he wants to change the future and protect the Uzumaki clan, but the result is basically writing about the protagonist's behavior in Konoha! For the Uzumaki clan, basically everything is dealt with in one go.

Some of them are incomprehensible. The protagonist clearly knows the Uzumaki clan's restraint on the tailed beast seal and the adaptability of the Jinchūriki. Other ninja villages will definitely plan, and the future will be the annihilation of the clan! ! ! As a result, the protagonist voluntarily gave up when Hashirama separated the tailed beasts. He could have grasped a nuclear weapon as a safeguard! In addition, it can be said that the protagonist did not try to strengthen the Uzumaki clan at all, but only half-popularized the zombies to seal them away. Strength is the last word!

Whether this book is about the development of Uzumaki or the development of Konoha, the focus must be clearly defined. Knowing that Uzumaki Village is in danger of annihilation, and personal strength cannot guarantee that he will reach the Kage level in a short time, how much role can personal strength play in this war? The strength of Uzumaki is not weak to begin with, so it is better to think about how to improve the overall strength of Uzumaki Village! There are so many chapters, except for one chapter about sealing off a corpse to add a trump card for some tribesmen to die together, there is no description of the development of Uzumaki Village and how to increase the strength of Uzumaki Village. When we divided the tailed beasts earlier, there was a time to increase the strength of the village, but in the end, it was taken care of in one sentence. Just write some simple daily things.

To be honest, almost all of my comments section said that this book was not well written, but I didn't delete it because I felt that what they said all had their own truths, and some of them could even give me feedback and help in writing this book. But some people, if you don't like it like other passers-by, you can just leave. I don't care, but please don't affect the reading environment of other readers! ! Why only delete a few comments? Because those comments are not good enough to criticize this book, and even me, the one who is being criticized, can't stand it anymore, so I have to delete it, it's that simple. Finally, let's talk about a story I saw in the documentary: A director who was filming a documentary about the Tokyo Olympics saw people outside the venue still loudly protesting against the hosting of the Olympics on the night of the opening ceremony. But he turned around again and found more supporters gathered outside the venue, looking at the venue and listening to the sounds of the opening ceremony inside the venue (although this is not recommended during the epidemic). So he finally said this - "They are all supporters, and in fact, only some of the opponents are. But just like on the Internet, the opponents have a louder voice, and the supporters do not speak out, just like on the Internet. "

In fact, I have to do it reluctantly, and I can understand it without the tailed beast, but during the war... I don't understand the operation of a leader of a country going to a neighboring country to be a soldier. What's the point besides drawing hatred and letting yourself die quickly? I don't quite understand a person running to help Konoha fight the war. Does your country agree? Tobirama's story mentioned above is so good. Have you never thought about how to solve the problem if something goes wrong during the war? A daimyo suddenly goes to the battlefield and dies in the battle. The most important thing is that this daimyo is not from his own country. What kind of spirit is this?

I don't want to watch the single heroine. She is not normal at all. She has the power to make a woman laugh.

A common problem with Qidian fan fiction is that it is verbose. . They don't know what the readers want at all, and even the author doesn't know why he wants to write a fanfic? What is the purpose of writing fan fiction? Isn't it just assuming how awesome you are and getting pleasure from it? Do readers want to see your slow growth? The author may want to describe the protagonist's growth path, but have you ever thought about your growth path being as exciting as the original novel? Is your path to growth logical? You must know that the more you describe, the less logical your growth path will be, because no one will believe that your growth path is correct. . . So excellent fan fiction requires no explanation, no logic, and no reason for me to be better than you.

Chapter 11 and 12 are too poisonous. I really can't figure out why Madara and Black Zetsu don't kill the protagonist. The best and best outcome is that Madara's Sharingan looks through the memories and becomes Madara's puppet. Then Madara's reincarnation eye directly leads to the single-handedly destroying the world in the finale. I'll look for another book. If there is really no book, come back.

Does Sarutobi Hiruzen need to be black? Are you still using black? According to the setting in the manga, the Uzumaki clan was exterminated after the death of the Second Hokage. Except for Kushina, the Nine-Tailed Jinchuuriki, who was brought back to Konoha, no one from the Uzumaki clan came to Konoha. In the manga, the Nagato family would rather flee to a place where wars are ongoing. In the Country of Rain, the Konoha family would rather flee to the Kingdom of Yu, which is further away, and suffer all the humiliation, than come to the Country of Fire. Isn't this clear enough? The countries that destroyed the whirlpool didn't make much money, but Konoha made a lot of money. Can the three generations be able to clean it up?

It is always better to have nuclear than not to have nuclear And it is unrealistic for the protagonist to have the idea of ​​saving Uzumaki despite never having the idea of ​​inheriting Uzumaki at the beginning In the ninja world, if you are strong and do not form a force, you cannot solve the problem of Uzumaki

Alas, the more I look at it, the less interesting it becomes.

My mind is full of doubts. Your title says it is a whirlpool, but what does it have to do with a whirlpool? I just wrote a little bit and a few strokes about it. What is popular about the sealing of zombies? On the contrary, Konoha wrote a lot about it, so it said Riddler get out of Gotham. Goodbye.

Being an enemy of Konoha is dangerous, being an ally of Konoha is deadly, and licking a dog will really lead to a bad death.

Didn't the new branch of the Uzumaki clan have been living on the island for generations since they separated from the Senju clan? Why was the Uzumaki Village built during the Warring States Period? Doesn't the Council of Elders know that the corpses have been exterminated? Without several generations of research, it would be a joke to seal off the dead gods and ghosts. 😰

Author, in Naruto, Taijutsu is the main combat ability from beginning to end. Even in the finale where Sasuke and Naruto fight each other, they can already kill most of the Jonin with just their taijutsu, right? We can't hold on to ninjutsu all the time.

The split-tailed beast is a bit poisonous! Why not use it?

What he writes is that he is simply a vassal of Konoha. Uzumaki is on good terms with the Senju, not Konoha.

Author, I have only read a few chapters of this book. The protagonist should have more chakra at the end. After all, the spiritual energy in the original book is related to emotions, time and experience, right? So the protagonist should still have some experience before he traveled over, right? In addition, the Uzumaki clan's own powerful life energy cannot be low, right? There is also strong spiritual energy, and based on Sakura's situation, her ability to control chakra should also be very strong, right?

Just one question, why don't you want a tailed beast? The protagonist is also a dog licker, he is afraid of this and that

First of all, thank you very much for your comments. It shows that some people still like this book. I am very happy. Regarding this issue, I will explain in detail what I thought when I wrote it. But I want to explain in advance that this part of the plot will not change. The time for the Whirlpool Kingdom to obtain the tailed beast will be later. And if you can't accept this part of the plot, then I think there will be parts of the plot that will be even more unacceptable to you. So let me explain in advance, and apologize in advance, that this book cannot satisfy all readers. If the score of this book is not good because of this reason, I will admit it. Back to the topic, why didn't the protagonist ask Hashirama for a tailed beast? It's very simple. Besides Hashirama, does anyone else agree? Uchiha and Hinata will object, and Sarutobi and other families will also object for the benefit of Konoha, because there is no benefit to be gained from the Tailed Beasts of the Country of Uzumaki. In their eyes, the Country of Uzumaki just needs to be an ally of Konoha and half of the protector. Tobirama will also object for the same reason. As for whether Hashirama will insist on his own way, I believe you will understand after looking at the result of Hashirama's proposal to let Madara become Hokage. Hashirama's idea from the beginning to the end of letting the Kingdom of Uzumaki obtain the Tailed Beast is due to his stupid and stubborn personality. He will not insist on his own way after being blocked by others. So no matter what, whether the protagonist wants a tailed beast or not, the choice does not lie with the Uzumaki. Konoha itself will not give it to the Uzumaki tailed beast. I didn't express this point of view clearly in this book. I took it for granted and wrote it too obscurely. This is a problem of my writing level, I admit it. This is my whole view on this. If you have other ideas, you are welcome to discuss them together. I hope you have some ideas that can make my eyes shine. Then I will copy the book and review the outline, haha. Finally, writing this book is all based on hobby. It will be faster if the grades are good, and slower if the grades are not good. If this book is not to your liking, I hope you can find a book that suits you! It is true that there are some problems in this book, and I have discovered them, but the level is here, and I have written it to the end. It is unrealistic for me to spend time and energy to overhaul the previous article, so I can only apologize. Finally, to the book friends who like this book, thank you for your support. This is my motivation to continue writing. There are a thousand Hamlets in the hearts of a thousand people. I can't satisfy all readers, so I can only write the fan world that I want to show to everyone!

We should collect the Uzumaki, Senju, Uchiha, Hinata, Kaguya, five tribes to build a village, and then provide for intermarriage among the five tribes.

How could someone write such a poisonous novel? It's so poisonous, so poisonous.

This novel is... Amazing, I can't read it.

I haven't read this book, I only read the comments, but I don't think I have the desire to read the book. The page says about developing the country of vortex, how to develop it? Comments about Timoba, no tailed beasts, etc. I think a novel about hegemony and development is unreadable.

The front is fine, but the back is broken

What's written is so weird. I won't say anything about it and just watch it. The more I write, the worse it gets. It's already 2202 and there are still people who insist on putting ice escape on Minazuki. The manga clearly states that Minazuki is a jounin of Konoha and the leader of Uchiha Itachi. You don't do your homework. There is nothing written in the second set. It's getting more and more annoying.

The talent of the protagonist is too high. The top masters in the Naruto world are not as good as him. He memorized them all in a week and sat down to talk with Uchiha Madara. Not everyone is qualified to be appreciated by the class. Please can you write an IQ online and a clear logic. As expected, the three golden chapters are only at the beginning. The rest are too exaggerated.

Without a system, it's difficult to become stronger in the world of Naruto

The other works are all creative but not logical. This book's logic and writing are fine, but its creativity is average and stable. In this case, we have to rely on writing, but obviously the author's writing is still poor (Fingertip Universe) . Putting aside other minor issues, there is no problem with the main part, but it lacks imagination and creativity.

It's poisonous. I praise Sarutobi at the beginning, and even met Madara who had just resurrected his Sharingan on the road. It's so poisonous. I can't stand it anymore. Goodbye.