Yinshanlu

The author's text arrangement is really good, but the plot arrangement is not so good. And the author seems to be a bit conceited when writing the book? I really want to see the scene where the trolls directly spray the author to the point of breaking his defense.

The classic fairy tale in the style of a Chinese fairy tale is still about fighting monsters and upgrading. The protagonist is a swordsman who also works for the court (Shanyin County Lieutenant → Cizhou Li Xing). The writing style is simple, the descriptions are detailed, the emotions are passionate, and the narratives are full of arguments, which is quite a bit of the essence of "Sword Comes". The protagonist Su Che was driving a 49-year-old classic car when he traveled through time, and was beaten into pieces by a young hero who was a hero. He hurriedly asked his family to go through various channels to buy an official position. He only took a noisy little book boy with him through Guobei County to serve as Shanyin County Lieutenant. There are many spirits (ghosts) in Guobei, and there are immortals (demon) in Shanyin. These two randomly selected places happen to be not at peace. Su Che had a sword box for attacking monsters and stayed overnight in a Zen temple to kill wooden monsters. The subordinate official smiled and showed off his power, investigated the case of missing money from the treasury, and got close to the charming Qingqiu fox demon who was good at fortune-telling. Suddenly, the scholar was discovered by Su Che. He was a disciple sent by Bailudong of the Confucian Academy to protect (monitor) him, so there was a showdown. The book boy saw that Su Che was colluding with the demon, and he had the consciousness to sacrifice himself in order to kill the protagonist and save the common people. But the villain died because he talked too much, and Suche kept talking for a long time before the fox demon came to his rescue. On the other hand, Su Che was pulled into the Zhongshan Club in advance. This is a place where frustrated people and avengers gather, a stage for a group of young conspirators. The organizer, Zhongyuan, holds meetings every thirty-sixth day to gather people (demon and ghosts) to exchange information. There were not many attendees, and they came from all walks of life. They used code names to hide their identities, but Su Che had already figured them out. Some people in the meeting thought that Suche was a waste and tried to seize his belongings. Zhongyuan gifted them ancient treasures and supreme supernatural powers, and they were suspected of having a very extraordinary identity. The first three chapters are quite golden. The narration is clear and smooth, and the dialogue is short and powerful. The story told in just 10,000 words is complete from beginning to end, with a meaningful aftertaste and leaving an extended thread. But then the quality suddenly dropped, as if a ghostwriter had been hired, and there were surprisingly many typos. The two plots of Zhong Shanhui and Shutong were even more unclear, which directly led to the abandonment of the book.

There were too many jokes, and it was extremely blunt. There was no knowing smile, only embarrassment. I was just a little immersed in it, and it suddenly became dramatic, so I gave up.

In the final analysis, what I like is not the gambler, but the lonely hero. Gamblers are those who make desperate attempts to survive, and heroes are those who persevere for their ideals. Mr. Su has gone through rich families, wine and meat, and bones in the world. He has bucked the trend and never changed his original intention. He has gone from being a dandy to being the leader today. I like his courage to be the first for the world and his enthusiasm to create peace for all generations. I also like his courage to risk his life and his calmness in strategizing. Along the way, we visited Shanyin, Guobei, Zhongshanhui, the Yin and Yang Realm, the Huai River, and Tianan County! Killing dragons in the river, shooting eagles in the clouds, and waving hair on the mat. Love cannot be moved, suffering cannot be broken. So with the sword in the hands and the sword in the heart, I got to this point, Liuhe Qinglong. In the final analysis, it was not fate that made Master Su, but Mr. Su made Liuhe Qinglong. "After entering the realm, the Jie Yuan practitioner and the self-nature Jie Yuan gradually understand the self-nature. But the self-nature is a chaotic thing, and the composition of human beings is complex and contradictory. There are cowards who think they are heroes, and there are heroes who think they are cowards. Until the critical moment, even I don't know my true color." (This passage is actually very appropriate. I feel that the author and the hip puller have a close relationship, so I quote it.) Mr. Su's true color is magical in suffering, just like Du Fu. In his eyes, he not only sees the big shots who are stirring up troubles, but also the common people in this troubled world, so he is still angry and wants to bring peace to all generations! Mr. Su is becoming more and more three-dimensional, and he is getting closer and closer to the hero in my imagination. I draw my sword and look around. If there is no torch from now on, I will be the only light! The elegant demeanor of Abi from Taiyun often echoes, even if there are thousands of people there, so I gradually have a Mr. Su in a flowing blue shirt in my mind, a Su Che who is easy to breathe and the wind is cold in the west, and the whole house is dressed in clothes that are better than snow. At this time, the matter is at stake, and the interests of the future are at stake. Regardless of victory or defeat, all that is left to the world is a lonely figure. The heaven and earth have righteousness and are endowed with manifolds. Below are the rivers and mountains, and above are the sun and stars. To people, they are said to be vast and overwhelming, and they can be seen only when the time is short, and the pictures are drawn one by one. I wish Mr. Su a bright future and his efforts will not be wasted!

The writing is not fluent, the writing is artificial, sticky and mysterious. The names of the main and supporting characters are feminine and dark.

It was okay in the early stage, but in the middle stage, a man-monster suddenly appeared and made me sick. It was too sudden.

This book seems to be a series in my lifetime. I really should have 1.8 Million words before killing it.

It's the first time I've seen someone who reads like this. It feels like it was written by several people together, and it's inconsistent.

A very serious slow-paced traditional fantasy, written by a newcomer for the first time. If you are interested, you can read it. The title of the book is "Inquiry into the Immortals". You are welcome to give me your valuable opinions.

It's amazing. I thought that the transformation of the Invincible Heavenly Man in the East was the ultimate state. I didn't expect there was anyone stronger than him. Dare I ask what kind of hero he is?

Damn it, it's very well written and reads very smoothly. Whose vest is this?

When I saw that the update was discontinued at the end of January and picked up in August, it was absolutely amazing, the update was discontinued in July!

Read the first ten chapters. It is full of bad points and poisonous points, the plot is confusing, and the logic is not smooth. First of all, when you go to work in a land where demons are rampant, you are still just a first-level useless person, and your family doesn't send any experts to protect you? The key is that the protagonist is favored and the family spends a huge price to save their lives. . . Secondly, that book boy is really poisonous. . . Thirdly, a Shangxian County has not had a county magistrate for many years Fourthly, a Shangxian County, the essence of the county, the city god was killed by a demon (how scary are the demons here?), But the court did not react at all. Fifthly, in such a terrifying place, the protagonist was actually sent to serve here? This. . . How much does the family hate the protagonist? Only ten chapters, full of loopholes

The system is poorly written and nondescript, the plot is even more confusing, the protagonist has no opinion and just goes with the flow, and the writing is even more stinky when he sees the rebellion. . . The protagonist also had a double break with that prince, and even vomited out the food he had eaten the night before. It was so disgusting.

The author has obviously been writing towards the climax in the last few chapters. I enjoyed reading it quite a lot, but I have some inner thoughts that I want to share. But there is a problem. I don't know if it's because there are too many criticisms from those who don't know the so-called comments. The things written after the update have laid a lot of foreshadowing to be honest, and the traces of fixed routines such as pretending to slap people in the face and opening the mini map are also getting worse. Personally, I think that if you really want to write a popular book, writing a new book early is one way to do it. This book can become a masterpiece in your life if you just revise it. There is no need to change your original intention of writing a book just because of unsatisfactory commercial results.         ，，， You see, the author of Lord of the Stars also changed his vest to reach the top ten. There is really no need to care about the opinions of the novices in the comment area and write in a commercial template. Of course, this is just my personal opinion. Just letting the author see your work can still trigger some desire for communication among readers like me who think they are sensible.

Sunflower Road, dignified transformation 😁

This book boy almost got me drunk at the beginning. I'm really sorry you guys can't keep reading.

To be honest, it's all booked now. I have a few questions. What's going on with the classical fairy tales nowadays? Why does cultivating an immortal always have to be entangled with the power changes of secular dynasties? Then, since you have worshiped the leader of the Taoist Sect, entered the high wall, and are still wading in the muddy waters of this world, why don't you go to the mountain gate to see what the Taoist Immortal is? And then there is the Qingdi Baoyuan, a treasure that has no fight at all, and is trying to seize the opportunity. It can be accepted by the genius of the fifth-grade sect if it is not even the sixth grade, so how about practicing? Isn't it good to go back to the mountain gate early to seek immortality? Let's go back to what makes me most irritated. Your goal in cultivating immortality is to achieve great immortality or great freedom. If you don't agree with me, you will become a vixen princess. Dragon Girl, what are you going to do? Without a woman, this immortal cannot cultivate. Is it just like the current trend of TV dramas? No matter what the background is, it's love. It's true that I vomited a little bit. Nearly 200 chapters have started. The male protagonist seems to be a supporting character. The master proves immortality, the devil from outside the territory attacks, and the Yin and Yang world copy seems to be incompatible with the protagonist. The outsider The male protagonist does not have any hatred of the country and the family. He only has a heart for Taoism and the pursuit of immortality. It is a fairy-like article, and the writing is also good. Don't be unable to continue writing because you can't find the direction of the plot.

The front is very good, but after we leave Shanyin, things start to get worse and then continue, with a hammer and a stick, and one thing is not finished yet, and I don't know where to go, it's not clear. It belongs to the type that is tasteless to eat and a pity to throw away. Based on the gap between the level of the front and the back, we can conclude that this book is a game written on a whim. Whether or not it is written according to the author's mood, there may be a risk of discontinuing the eunuch, and the risk is extremely high. The chapter on Shanyin County is worth reading, and I hope future readers will read it with caution.

The writing style is okay and you can read it, but it is a little bit poisonous, there are ghosts and monsters, but the sword cultivation system you designed is too low, right? I didn't understand the meaning of the whole picture. I don't understand the meaning of that picture you wrote? Are you telling me a short story? A story of revenge after a man was raped And the servant, you have been living in that world for a few months. There is a class distinction between the servant and the master. Even if you are a modern person and don't feel that way in your heart, how did the little book boy survive until now? I still say that this is an important foreshadowing of your design, because I really don't understand your article. You keep saying that the little book boy is annoying and unobtrusive, but the protagonist never wants to punish the servant So you described such a disgusting male supporting character, what do you want to do? I can't understand it at all. After all, servants of wealthy families will always only look for smart people, not stupid people. The master can be kind and stupid, but the servants absolutely cannot. I don't know what you want to write.

Ancient novels about ghosts and ghosts have too many jokes and are bad, such as the part about the old woman playing the drums. When you first come to work, you won't feel embarrassed saying some inexplicable and strange things. Moreover, the plot connection is rather abrupt, such as being pulled into the Zhongshan Society. Just revenge and resentment is too far-fetched. The most important thing is the character of the protagonist. A person who reflects on his own mistakes in the middle of the night talks about some inexplicable and vulgar jokes all day long, and dares to boast that he can solve a case in seven days when he is not good at criminal investigation. I don't understand how the good reviews in the reviews come about, but if there is an opportunity to make money, please point me to one!

I feel like this book has the same problem as that Emperor's Diary. It's good to practice martial arts and Taoism, kill monsters and corrupt officials. It feels very strange to have to add something about politics, philosophy, struggle for hegemony, and world affairs. Everyone has grown up, and even if a true master preaches, it is not so easy to be convinced. Especially because the author still makes such a hodgepodge of things.

Judging from this update, I will enter the palace in a month or two at most.

If you write well, just make meme. If you have a good brain, you can make meme in the city. What kind of meme can you use in the ancient alien world? The audience for another meme is really small. If you think it is funny, use a metaphor to describe something, but others will think you are stupid. You are proud of what you read on the Internet. The purpose of saying it everywhere is that I know better than you.

I've read a lot of chapters and I'm quite fascinated. I don't know what the protagonist is pursuing or what his motivation is. As if separated from the little fox, he doesn't care much about cultivation, nor is he obsessed with swordsmanship, nor is he interested in power, nor is he lustful. He doesn't like to show off and slap people in the face, nor does he like to kill people. It doesn't matter whether he saves others or not. A little bit of everything, but nothing seems to matter. I felt like the main character was quite distracted, and I was completely confused.

Gay books. It's disgusting, there are a bunch of filial sons trying to whitewash their innocence. Pooh

In this book, I saw the word "pretentious". The protagonist is very pretentious and aloof. The author is too pretentious in his writing.

As expected of pig blood, the first chapter is so cute

I don't have any strength but I'm still running around. I always refuse to return the elixir to Cardinal Ding. I got a few volumes of advanced skills and don't practice them. I just pretend to be a sword repairer all day long. This novel is 80% nonsense. It has a messy twist. It feels like a fairy tale at the beginning. The world view is that after the prehistoric period, the five emperors died. It's just that this novel has not grasped the focus. I just hit Buxu at the lower level of the elixir. Those The appearance of the big shot didn't feel oppressive at all. The part about the palace made people want to abandon the article. The two subordinates didn't express anything because the protagonist was skinned, and they were not given a chance to practice. They even went to the mortal world to see a doctor. They were really drunk. The method of dealing with Bailu Cave was very lame. It was annoying to always emphasize the reincarnation of the Qing Emperor. The author found it interesting to grow food in the Qing Emperor Baoyuan? Just planting some elixirs, making elixirs, a lot of cultivation resources, and running around in the mortal world all the time. As a reader, I feel that the story is not exciting enough.

This book is dead. The author found someone to pick it up and then went to start a new book.