During Those Years When I Was a Magician in Daliang

Since the protagonist himself has chosen to practice Buddhism, shouldn't he be pure in heart and have as few desires as Buddhism advocates cultivating the mind? Or maybe I have some misunderstanding about Buddhism. The protagonist drives a car when he sees a beautiful woman, he talks a lot, and he is not serious. Even if the protagonist succeeds in practicing Taoism, 90% of it must be attributed to the power of Goldfinger. Anyway, I think the author's writing is extremely dramatic. The protagonist should practice Taoism well and don't look like an LSP. This is like some novels in which the protagonist is the world's top killer. But this world's top killer is very easy to get emotional, has naive ideas and does things without thinking. When he meets a beautiful woman, he trusts her heart and soul. Come on, these descriptions are the qualities of being the world's top killer? ! So I recommend you go and see what kind of character the protagonist in the movie "John Wick" is like. So what I have said is that the protagonist has no professional qualities at all. To practice Taoism, you must look like a Taoist. I don't know how much inner drama you have all day long.

I looked up the history and found that there was no chronology in the history. Every page was written crookedly with the words benevolence, justice and morality. I couldn't sleep, so I read carefully for half the night, and then I saw the words between the words. There were two words written all over the book, which is cannibalism!

The author wrote that there were not many women on the street, which is obviously unreasonable. Even in the Ming, Qing, and Song dynasties, when women's status was not high, there were many women on the street. Not to mention the Han and Tang Dynasties, there was no difference. If it was a rural area, women were just like laborers. They worked in the fields with their husbands morning and night. They didn't have enough to eat and they couldn't show their faces. Isn't it funny? In a world with monsters, women can also practice. The worst status of women is almost the same as in the Han and Tang Dynasties.

I haven't read it yet, so I'm blindly guessing that those two words mean cannibalism.

I would like to add that the author is good, but he is working in the wrong direction. Your book is similar to "Lan Ke Qi Yuan", but there is no plot to reveal his sage in front of others (magic tricks do not count). Lan Ke can become famous by virtue of the protagonist's every move, and the writing style is fresh, natural and full of charm, so even if it borrows from There are a lot of fairy tales, but also new ideas. Your choice of the profession of magician is good, but if it is limited to entertaining people (so far, when magic appears, it is all about entertaining people), it goes against your original intention. The protagonist must get more benefits from the identity of the magician and be more attractive. Just a personal opinion, don't blame me.

Well, the writing is good, the story is quite attractive, but the main character is not good. Apart from being pretentious, the inner activities are too dramatic. You can do whatever you want. What else can you do besides making the readers feel funny and unbearable? You are a Taoist. There are so many inner activities.

To be honest, the story is a good one, but the main character is really uninteresting and even a bit annoying.

The title is "Juggler", but it turns out that all the rest is about solving crimes. It's better to say that I'm playing Conan.

Taking the suspense route is the way to write an upgraded novel. If you don't explain the elements that need to be explained as soon as possible, and reveal them bit by bit in a secretive way, it will become more and more awkward.

Wouldn't it be more beneficial to focus your writing a little more on your tricks and exercises? There is so much content in the investigation that it becomes boring.

This book just tells the story, the protagonist has no sense of existence, and the author does not write from the protagonist's perspective.

The Taoist system of the protagonist in the back is also too weak. It is just the fireball technique, wind blade, etc. In ordinary immortal novels. It is no different from the fireball technique, wind blade and so on in the magic system. They are just ordinary cool novels for the convenience of getting things. There is no freshness. I thought I would make a fuss about magic, but it turned out to be just a cheat.

To be honest, it's well written. . Don't change the outline easily. . Don't delete or modify things casually. . Suggestions from readers can be used as a reference, and the specifics must be written according to your own ideas. If you write a book with the sole purpose of catering to readers, 9 out of 10 books will be thrown away. Come on?

The setting is very interesting, but the author has to read and revise it before posting it. By the way, does it have an outline? It still lacks some "flavor" even now.

After reading two chapters, I felt the beginning was weird. That Juren was a poor scholar before, and he probably had never traveled far, but he was able to meet famous prostitutes in the capital and get some good things from his master. Taoist priests are similar. Those who have this kind of experience are almost half of the protagonists. In the end, he is responsible for giving benefits to the protagonist. One harvest is too great. If there is only one thing, it would be better to say more. And the protagonist has no special performance, mainly relying on luck, and the Taoist priest was forcibly recruited, and the court's methods are so harsh, they actually let the protagonist take the secret of practice without asking him to hand it over.

Alas... It's a eunuch. There are indeed many problems, but it is not without merit. I can only say that the author should work hard and hope that the next book will present better content, if there is one.

Come on＾0＾~, but don't delete things casually 😭

Write according to your own ideas. Don't worry too much about the feelings of some people. Otherwise, if you modify it here and there, you will end up looking different in the end, or even collapse in the middle and late stages or even become a eunuch. Write slowly according to your own ideas and rhythm, come on^0^~

I hope that all Chinese young people will get rid of the air conditioning and just move up, without having to listen to the words of those who give up on themselves. Those who can do things, those who can make sounds, have a little heat and a little light, just like a firefly, they can also shine a little in the dark without waiting for the torch. There will be no torch from now on: I am the only light. If there is a torch and the sun rises, we will naturally disappear with sincerity. Not only will there be no injustice, but we will also praise the torch or the sun with joy; because it shines on mankind, including me. I also hope that Chinese young people will just move up and ignore these sneers and hidden arrows. ——Lu Xun

The book is pretty good, it's on the suspense side. After reading the first fifty chapters, I found some problems. The surrounding supporting characters are a bit subdued. Another is that the immortality of Xianxia is not reflected too much. The same goes for Goldfinger, whose effectiveness is not reflected through the protagonist... To put it simply, the plot is good, the writing is also good, but the protagonist's performance is lacking. In terms of reasoning, it doesn't fit into the Xianxia classification (in my personal opinion). It might be better to go the suspense route.