Pokémon Descend: Exploring the World with Pokémon Dark Rising

Many people say that the part of the plot where the protagonist self-destructs is very poisonous, but they have not said where the real poisonous point lies. My personal point of view is that when the author lets the mother appear for the first time, the protagonist directly reveals his secret to the mother. There is no preparation for the role of the mother before this. From the reader's perspective, the emotions are not in place. The author's own emotions may be in place for the mother's role, but the readers cannot understand it, so there will be a feeling of confessing one's secrets to a stranger, and this is where the poisonous point arises. Although the plot is logical, the emotional logic is also part of the plot logic. The author should not be like doing a math problem. Once he knows the answer, he only writes the answer instead of the process. In that case, he can only get 2 points out of 10. It is recommended that the author who writes a book for the first time should revise his manuscript and refine the text of the article. Water word count is not a colloquial way of writing an article. Authors who have the ability to use word count to retain readers have a very strong writing skills. The author's current writing style is indeed visibly immature. Don't develop the habit of colloquial writing. Try to optimize the description of the situation. The dialogue between the characters should be concise and the characters' personalities should be fully reflected. The ineffective words should be refined as much as possible. Writing on an online platform is a job that can easily make people impetuous. I hope the author can seriously improve himself first. It is very difficult to make money and improve at the same time. If you are not talented enough, it is easy to write your own book.

I came from the red halberd comment section and took a look at it first. There are not many to watch now, especially this one that is a little more peaceful, and even less. I don't like to fight and kill. It is originally a cute and warm Pokémon game, but it has to be given a dark style, and it is called reality. Which real-life game and animation is aimed at people under 20 years old? However, the author's update makes it difficult to relax. Let's take care of ourselves first, hoping not to die 🌹

In the previous chapter, the protagonist was not in a hurry to fall in love, and in the next chapter, the relationship between boyfriend and girlfriend was established... In order to make the protagonist independent, a woman was forced into the story. I didn't see any interaction or ambiguity between them, so I thought it was strange. In fact, it was okay without a female protagonist.

The protagonist is too lazy, the level of the elf is not as high as Xiao Yuan, and there are magical candies that he doesn't use, so they are all given to others, which makes him very poisonous.

In the later stage, even the battle was sketched out. It really didn't work. Moreover, the hook was so big and the protagonist was still so weak. His parents did not allow the protagonist to travel. It neither travels nor fights. So this elf novel is really lonely.

It's too long-winded. It should be more detailed. It's a regular routine to get golden fingers through time travel, so I'll write two chapters. What a lot of worldviews explain bala bala, the protagonist's mentality changes, and what bala bala did in the past life. Why do you get a golden finger to force you to pull Balabala? Why is it so troublesome to do something that can be done in just a few words? It has been three months since I came to this world, and I have gradually become proficient in using the mysterious APP that was on my phone when I woke up from time travel. With this power, he is training the first elf he has acquired so far, Galar Meowth. My writing style is not as good as that of an elementary school student. If you write it this way, why do you need so many words? A bit dissuaded

I beg for your support for the new book. Dear readers, some of you who have money will support me financially, and some of you will support me personally. Don't miss it if you pass by.

Don't watch it anymore. Goodbye. It was fine in the early stage. But later on, after I exposed my golden finger, I really used my own resources to help others upgrade. Don't you understand that your own strength is the last word? Give it up.

Telling my mother about the golden finger is poisonous to me.

There is a question, why do some people always think that the Gosan family is very precious? You know, no matter in the games and animations, the Gosan family is cultivated by the alliance in large quantities, and they are also the initial Pokémon that exist in the wild in large numbers. Neither precious nor rare. Their strength is usually very suitable for newcomers. In anime and games, the regions are different, and the Pokémon released for newcomers are different, but generally speaking, they are more suitable for newcomers and do not need to be rare or not.