Yun Daojun

The book is good, but since you are a writer, you should learn more about the basic knowledge of Taoism. Be careful when coding and don't make typos all the time. Too many flaws will make people want to abandon the book. Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

It looks good. He can slay demons and become the only ancient immortal. He has his own unique Tiangang and Earth Evil spells. There must be no female protagonist. Those who seek immortality, come on! ! ! !

Everything else was fine, only the Dragon Palace part was unpleasant to watch. If you don't want to be associated with the Dragon Girl, don't stand up and don't accept gifts. They all told me to choose a son-in-law. Then the protagonist broke the formation, the Dragon Girl fell in love with the protagonist, and the protagonist accepted the gift and used it. Then he said that he didn't have this intention. Is the protagonist careless?

While talking about the thin spiritual energy, the monsters and monsters I encountered became more powerful than the last! !

I saw this book before, but I gave it up after reading the reviews. I haven't read it recently, so I took a look and found it to be pretty good. Forgive me for my blindness, I didn't realize that this book was a good book. Follow the author!

Don't always think about handsomeness when others see the protagonist. It's very dramatic, like a pretty boy.

Never have a female protagonist, immortality is destined to be lonely

Comments kill people! ! , If I hadn't looked at it first and found out it was Beni Liang Cao, otherwise I would have given up!

The biggest problem with this book is that every plot seems familiar. Praying for a child in the temple is actually the result of evil monks doing evil, then it is the inner demons on the wall, and now it is the river god getting married. So I strongly suspect this is a robot writing.

This is a very good novel that I have read recently. It is my first investment and follow-up investment. I am very optimistic about you. Come on.

Is the author here? I would like to ask if the appearance of the protagonist is very handsome. Does the author have to be very handsome? I have a terrible idea. Tencent is vigorously promoting Xiaoxianrou, and the novel is like this. The background is brainwashing

After reading Chapter 55, I couldn't stand it any longer 😅. The two major conflicts were very sudden, especially the part about Qing Gangzi. There was no foreshadowing at all. The conflict was forcibly created, and the point of the conflict was not clear. Alas, the subject matter itself is quite good.

Using ancient Chinese place names and not following China's map directions to write the map is simply torture for people who know a little bit about maps 😥

There are many immortal cultivators in Liaozhai City, and the worldly atmosphere is too strong. Almost all of them do things for mortals. Look at the legends of mortals cultivating immortals, fighting with people, monsters, and heaven. There is almost no trace of mortals in the legends of mortals cultivating immortals. This is like a fairy. After all, there is a difference between immortals and mortals.

I hope there is a female protagonist, otherwise it will be a lot less fun

The writing is smooth, but I feel that the protagonist's character is a girl who is accustomed to dressing up as a boy. The girl next door... She should change her gender and directly become a female channel to become an immortal.

After it was released, the plot was as light as water...!

Dear author, I like your writing style very much. It is very fairy-like and reminds me of Tai Hao a lot. But I would like to make two suggestions. First, your conflict gives people a very abrupt feeling. Although there are unpredictable events, it cannot be so sudden. There are omens for everything that happens. When writing conflicts, you can first write some environmental background to highlight it, just like the BGM of a horror story to remind readers that an accident is about to happen. Second, when writing female characters in Xianxia, the most important thing is to create a good first impression. In fact, it is a big deal Many readers don't pay much attention to the female characters in male novels, so just don't be too distant. For a good first impression, it is best not to have too much interaction with the protagonist in the first scene, leave a lot of white space, and don't overly emphasize how good-looking she is as a girl. Create an atmosphere that makes readers think about it. For example, she stood by the window looking at the drizzle all over the city, tapping on the window sill, humming an unknown ditty, throwing the purse out the window into his arms, "doing a good deed every day", and turning around to leave. The number of words can also be improved, and if it is not outstanding, it can be downplayed so that it will not appear abrupt. If you really like DaDa's writing style, you can stick to it. There are not many fairy-like novels

I have been following it to the latest chapter and will share some of my feelings. First of all, there is no systematic introduction to the main sects and power systems in this world, and it is impossible to locate the protagonist's current cultivation level and later development direction. Secondly, the plot as a whole is a bit scattered. There is no main line to support the plot. It is basically completing some side plots as you go, and the plot is not novel or interesting enough. The dialogue is a bit trivial and the characters are a bit thin. But it's not easy as a newbie. I hope that I will write better and better in the future. Come on.

The early writing is really good, but Chapter 144 is too poisonous. You can't see clearly in the wild at the foot of the mountain! After cultivating to this point, do you have no sense of crisis at all? There is no one who can send it directly to the door. Only when you enter the house can you find the evil spirit. How about proving that your level is a higher level than you? How about being threatened and he doesn't dare to go to so many levels above you? Do you have the confidence to do things? How could he escape with his whole body? What's more, the Tiangang Method Five Elements Great Escape, the golden light on the ground is dead? Can't run.

Haha, the introduction is what China and Korea said to Qin in Tianxing Jiuge! ! !

If you keep it, it will disappear...

I don't understand why this book is labeled as time travel. If it's not that time travel has no system, no golden finger, and you are so weak, why are you pretending to be indifferent?

The monetary system has collapsed in the previous chapters.

When I saw I was sorry, I almost scared the dog to take me away. .

Sorry to see that! ! Have I been addicted to books again? I originally planned to spend three hundred dollars and read them together for fun. They were originally two happy things... How could it be...

It should have been cut a long time ago, and its appeal dropped off a cliff after it was put on the shelves.

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~

The air is invincible every second, every second, every second, every second, every second is what readers want to see, not to keep in good health.

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