The Keeper’s Program

​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​ Out of the blue, I felt amazing, the whole theme and technique. But the plot behind it feels a bit too compact, as if there is a lot to explain but it stops mid-sentence. The development speed of the world background cannot keep up with the progress of the plot, and the descriptions of characters and scenes are detailed but also sloppy. For example, if a person has a scar on his face, the audience will first have an impression - is this person's character surly? Do you usually get lost in thought? Do you speak calmly and powerfully, or do you speak impatiently? Do you touch her from time to time in normal times? After some background of the story unfolds, the audience will understand the original intention of his actions. It just feels like a sense of separation. It's okay to read it in one breath, but if you stop reading it again, it will be somewhat difficult to maintain. It didn't make a deep impression on people, but I felt a little moved. Some humble opinions. ——Chen Wuqing

If you keep it up, it will no doubt be the fairy grass The text in the first two chapters is a little over-sculpted, but it blends into one after that. I wonder if the author has been a keeper before, so he has developed this kind of description skills and rhythm control.

This is the level of writing writers. I'm so overwhelmed by those little white writings out there, like Douluo and Gambit xxx. Anyway, I don't read those things. I was digging for gold and finally found one that at least has good writing.

The Hound of the Divine Bureau

Edgar Waikolo

It can be seen that the author is writing seriously, but there are too many unnecessary descriptions. It feels like a middle school student trying to write a little bit about everything. After reading the first dozen pictures, almost every character needs a paragraph or even a few paragraphs of physical description. In fact, unimportant characters can be summarized in a few sentences. The characteristics and positioning, and the protagonist's aura seems to be too high, or the author does not have very rich social experience. The protagonist is an ordinary person who has been victimized. In the previous article, the protagonist feels that things are too coincidental, but later he finds out the truth inexplicably? Uh, a little sloppy. Not only did the official people completely believe it from the beginning, but they also responded with praise. The 😥 setting, which looked really embarrassing, is quite good. There is "big room for improvement" in terms of writing skills.

To be honest, the author saw you start writing in high school. Now in your junior year, you have only written more than 200 chapters. I can only say, keep going.

Personally, I feel it's much better than Lord of Mysteries I can't stand that book at all.

Ed

I have read 12 chapters of this book. So far, there is no clown-like exaggeration that is common in fantasy areas. Instead, it has traditional fantasy secret reasoning. I personally feel that it is very good. Blind exaggeration will only make people disgusted. On the contrary, this classic reasoning style is more interesting. I look forward to the author's future stories. Come on