American Comics Go with the Flow

What have you been writing about in these recent chapters? Has it been replaced or something? The character design completely collapsed. He actually had a big advantage and was crazy about water + BB. If the street gangster combination was killed, they would kill him and save his pussy for the Chinese New Year? Frank, who was about to die, exchanged his own life for two people who were bound to die. It was so stupid to talk about it for so long. You are a gang leader, a local emperor, what do you care about? Hulk can't come out, Jarvis doesn't dare to take action, the captain doesn't have a shield, and Spider is half-cowarded, so he shoots to settle the grudge. Then go negotiate with Pierce. What are you waiting for? Who else do you want to give face to? Do you still want to let him go? Are you chasing stars for your kids? Still threatened by Tony? TM give him a backhand slap or a shot in the thigh? A bunch of prisoners, who do you think is the oldest? Funny? How many layers of mental retardation halo is this?

... Sure enough, it is very flawed. Author, the descriptions in the first ten chapters are too bland. I can't recognize "anyone". You introduce each character with a verbal description, which is not reflected in the interaction at all. The most important part of communication and initiative, I can't feel the atmosphere of "alive". You said that the protagonist has integrated into this world, is it okay if you just say so? Write it to me!!! How did he go shopping, what did he see, and what opinions did he express! What kind of incident happened? In addition to the two parties involved in the activity, the family members chatted a lot. The whole description was like a running account. I just looked at you and said that the protagonist did these things, but I didn't see the psychological and state traces left by these things after the activities of both parties, so I just casually passed them by! Your score is not unfair at all. I don't dislike the Buddhist protagonist, but what you described doesn't even feel like a "living person". I can't even imagine the movements of the characters in your works with my eyes closed. It's just a rigid silhouette, taken from the narration of a comic.

I have just read this book and it seems boring. I have to endure the feeling of not wanting to read it and continue reading. It has foreshadowing and IQ, but it doesn't overwhelm you! This is simply the best human-written American comic I have ever seen. I think the author's writing is better than that of the American comics of the same period. I hope there won't be any Madonna behavior in the future.

It's a shame to write about Marvel and not have many female companions, especially when the male protagonist is a high school football player. Having a female companion does not necessarily mean writing pornographically. This generation of novel writers is so pathetic. I don't even know how to write it. !

It's like writing a running account, writing a novel, not an essay. Let's practice again.

If your child is taken advantage of by others, I think most of them in the novel will destroy that person now. In reality, most of us don't have that book and will definitely choose to sever ties and contacts. There are the most children in the world. If you have the ability, I will kill you if you say one more thing.

I really hate this kind of writing where the protagonist is a foreigner who has traveled through time in Marvel or an American TV series and transformed into another species. In reality, Chinese people are not welcome in the United States, and they are not welcome in novels either.

These two pieces directly persuade him to quit, just like the elf queen in the old novel Almighty Archmage tried to kill the protagonist. The purpose is to prevent the protagonist from killing the mercenaries who caught the elves as prostitutes. Although 90% of the elves in the empire were captured and used as slave prostitutes, I must maintain the peace agreement, so the protagonist who kills the mercenaries is a heinous crime and must die. The protagonist kept on guarding against killing the queen until his elf wife proposed to be the number one oiran in the human capital. She almost turned green. I was so sick back then that I met someone so disgusting again 12 years later.

It's very comfortable to read, and I don't feel embarrassed. The writing is good. If I don't jump after it is released, I will follow it.

It's a bit long-winded at the beginning, but becomes much more comfortable later on.

What kind of monsters are there in the comment section?

It would be nice if it could be written so that I can understand it. The plot is really good. It's just that the plot has no beginning or end.

The word is boring. The gold matter can be solved in one sentence, but it has to be opened in four or five chapters, and the negotiation failed. It is amazing. There is no main line, no plot, and it is as bland as water.

After looking at it, I was still given a mission. It's very annoying. The protagonist seems to have no brain.

The setting is really messy, the average person's attributes are 4, and the protagonist starts a fight with the green fat 55 at 10 o'clock! Is this fat green guy serious?

The last few chapters? ? ? ? ? It's so watery that my IQ has dropped into the Maria Trench! ! ! Feeling offended

Not bad! It's quite comfortable to watch. Come on update😁😁

While setting up a salty fish character for the protagonist, he also tried every means to draw events towards the protagonist. This is a common problem among more than 90% of authors from the starting point. Why? We, the readers, are being called fools because we can't write without the plot. It's so easy to follow the plot and you don't have to copy it in your head. One incident can easily fill dozens of chapters.

After reading a few chapters, it seems that the author is writing it for the first time. The logic is fine, but the writing tone is similar to that of a secondary school student. A novel should be like a prose, with scenes, plot, heart, and dialogue. You don't have to keep making assumptions in your mind.

The dialogue and thinking are too Chinese. Even foreigners think in Chinese terms? Isn't this nonsense?

It's well written and the plot is good and smooth.