Reaching the Pinnacle

It's really not possible in the early stage, so don't come up with all kinds of jokes. It looks embarrassing. It's very poisonous to have both legs disabled. It's very poisonous to let such a garbage monster enter the city. It's very poisonous to force two people to meet in this paragraph. Don't do it for any reason. Such a garbage monster can kill people. Humanity is over. , The people stationed in a building can't be too strong. Really, I suggest rewriting it and building up the world view. There are too many inner dramas in the protagonist's mind, and there are many more that I won't go into. It's not easy for the author, so just change it if you can.

The system flow, high martial arts, the plot is boring, the key depends on the writing style, anyway, I can't stand it, alas!

First of all, I have been reading books at Qidian for ten years, and I have watched different genres of novels from Qidian become popular step by step. The first book I read was Law of the Devil, and then I read Dou Po, Douluo, Immortal Ni, Reincarnation of Thieves, Coiling Dragon, Star Transformation, Swallowing the Starry Sky, and all of Tomato's novels. The ones that impressed me most were the unique Sword Dao Sovereign, Squid's Arcane God's Throne, and later Confucianism and Taoism's Supreme Sage (these authors were at that time) None of them are great gods, and they don't have their own fans. The novels rely entirely on their own settings to attract readers. There is my favorite Gu Zhenren... Basically I have read all the famous novels in recent years, and even if I haven't read them, I have heard of them (for example, I haven't read any of Chen Dong's novels, but I basically know what the content is, and I don't want to read any plots about abusing the protagonist, so I don't read his articles). There are also hot articles in the past two years, The Black Technology System of the Academic Master, Qin Li, The Spy Shadow, Fox in the Forbidden Zone, Global Martial Arts, Tribulation of All Races, Lord of Mysteries, Super Mechanic, Reincarnation Paradise, House of Horror, Becoming a Richest Man from the Game, Shao Song, Full-time Artist... There are many more examples. In short, my personal reading hobbies are very broad. I read basically every category including science fiction, games, entertainment, history, sports, fantasy, fairy tales, horror, and two-dimensional horror. The only thing I don't read is business articles about rebirth and starting a company. So I think I have a good grasp of the popular trends in Qidian. I also know very well what types of articles most readers like to read, and what is popular and what is toxic. When I first read your Demon King System, I liked it very much. It was also the first LOL e-sports article I read. After that, I read many similar articles, but none of them were as good as this one. Including looking at the top of the canyon later, it is not as good as the Demon King system. I have finished reading Demon King System and Top of the Canyon. I only watched part of it and stopped reading because I couldn't stand it anymore. My love for the Demon King System has always made me have a certain fondness for you, the author. Seeing you stumbling and groping for transformation, I really can't help but want to say - Personally, I think the biggest problem why you failed is not transformation. It is not that there are no other authors trying new genres like you. Squid is a typical example. Tomato's novels often switched to different channels back then, and Eagle changed directly from urban to fantasy, so changing genres is not the reason for failure. The biggest reason for failure is that your understanding of Qidian Shuangwen is still from many years ago, and you are completely unable to distinguish between what is popular and what is poisonous. I have not read this book. When I saw the introduction to the novel, I expected that my grades would not be good, because I thought you were not good at writing this type of essay. Unexpectedly, I accidentally clicked in after a while, and it turned out to be a eunuch. The reason why I don't think you can write exciting articles other than e-sports is mainly because I have read three of your books. The first one is the urban novel Contract with the Devil. I accidentally clicked on that book because the setting is still relatively new. There are not too many poisonous points in that book. In my opinion, many of them were only written ten years ago. The popular pretentious and slap-in-the-face plot, with various poisonous points that make people speechless, makes people doubt that the author has no Internet connection, but I happened to read that book. On the one hand, the character of the protagonist is more likable and interesting. I think this is your advantage. You are very good at creating likable protagonists. On the other hand, the e-sports part is well written. ——As the e-sports section accounts for a very small proportion of urban articles, I think it is the most exciting part. At that time, I had not seen the Demon King system, I had not read any LOL articles, and I had never even played League of Legends in real life. In other words, this game was completely unfamiliar to me. It's like watching the virtual game Glory in Ace Master. I'm in a state where I don't have any cognition. But when I read your novel, I was able to immerse myself in it. Watching the protagonist control a hero that I didn't know at all, using skills that I didn't understand at all, and competing against e-sports players that I didn't know at all. It was actually very passionate and exciting. ——At that time, I thought: This author should write about e-sports! Probably a long time later, I accidentally clicked on the Demon King system, and unexpectedly discovered that this was the author I had read before. I found out that he actually wrote about e-sports, so I couldn't help but read it, and then I couldn't get out. The Demon King system is probably because it has a prototype in reality. In addition to e-sports, the creation of supporting characters and daily plots are actually quite interesting. I originally thought that the author had made progress and no longer wrote those poisonous points that made people vomit blood. But when I got to the top of the canyon, I found that the e-sports part was the best. The daily plot was a mess, especially the parents who were really super poisonous (probably it was popular during the time when losing money to become the richest man, so the author followed the trend and set up such parents, but you must know that following the trend must also be adapted to local conditions. The protagonist himself does not want to succeed but is... It's interesting to see other people succeed in backstabbing. The protagonist wants to succeed in front, but his parents don't want him to succeed. He backstabs in the back, and the protagonist knows nothing about it. This is not interesting at all.) Teammates also began to become very tool-like, and then a female teammate came inexplicably. I haven't watched it since then, and I have a premonition that the author is going to keep poisoning. ——At this time, I have realized that the author is still the same author who is good at writing about e-sports, but very bad at writing other content. There are a lot of inexplicable poisonous points that really make people vomit blood, and the pretentious and slap-in-the-face content is extremely cliched. As a reader who has read three of your books, I have to suggest here that whether you go back to writing about e-sports or continue to transform, the most important thing is to grasp the poisonous and refreshing points of today's online writing. It is recommended that during the break, you read all the most popular cool articles today, see how other authors write cool articles, and guess which plots you feel happy when you read them, and which plots you find unpleasant. I think only in this way can this article be successful. To give you the simplest example, Eagle's Global Martial Arts is said to be a cool novel for novices, but there are so many cool novels for novices, why is this one the most popular? Many people say that it is due to the large number of updates, but not all readers follow it when it is updated. For example, I read it after it is finished. So what does it matter if she updates a lot or not when serializing? No matter how many updates there are, after reading this book, I think it's pretty good. I won't talk about the bad points in the early stage. I will only talk about the places and cool points that I think are different from other novice novels. The simplest example is that everyone has a sister. But many novels like to set up the sister who has an affair with the brother, or the genius sister and the useless brother, or the sister who idolizes the brother without brains, or the drag sister whose sister is sick and needs the brother to work hard to earn money to treat the disease... This is really poisonous. How many years ago is this old routine? The sister in this book is very real, with advantages and disadvantages, and the kind of pure family love between them. Let's talk about the heroine. Some authors don't know how to write heroines and insist on writing all kinds of weird and bloody plots. They often provoke the rich second generation because of the heroine. Or the heroine's family is very rich and the protagonist works hard for the heroine. Or the heroine is just a drag that slows down the progress of the protagonist. It is better to write a background heroine who does not hinder the protagonist. Let's talk about other female characters. The female characters in many novels have the same stereotypes, such as Bingshan Royal Sister, Tsundere Lolita, and Obedient and Cute Girl, which are very false. The female characters in the world feel more real to me, and not all of them are related to the protagonist. Many of them are even very tomboyish, with their own personalities and goals. In my opinion, his novels don't have any novel plots. Invasion from another world and saving the world are already very cliche settings, but I can understand them. Because many of the slap-in-the-face plots are not cliched and in line with my current taste. Old bottles put new wine. The best among them is the character design, and the different characters are all wonderful, so this is not a reason for the popularity that can be explained by a large number of updates. Thinking about it carefully has its merits. Especially the cool places are particularly cool. And that's what you often don't have the means to do. You always mistake the poisonous points for the fun points. In the final analysis, you don't know the readers' preferences and you can't grasp what kind of fun plot the readers like best. ——The reason why I took Global High Martial Arts as an example has no other meaning, because it is a very typical novel written by a novice, and it was not finished long ago, and it is not out of date yet. Personally, I think it's the kind of author you can learn from. If I take a novel like Lord of Mysteries as an example, the difficulty of learning is too high for you, and Lord of Mysteries is not a cool text. As for the cool articles like Dou Po in the past, I can only say that times have changed. If I write according to that routine, it is already toxic. In short, it is recommended that authors should not rush to open a new book, but first learn how to write the most popular novels, grasp what readers like to read, and then open a new book to get twice the result with half the effort. Of course, it would be better if the author is willing to write e-sports articles again. After all, I still like to read the author's e-sports articles.

Shit, I was so angry that I installed an author assistant. If someone says that to me again, I will open the book directly. Don't mess with me. I'm only a freshman in high school. I haven't taken the college entrance examination yet. I don't want to write an online article, and I don't want to have a second dream in order to slap my face.

To be honest, it's a pity that this is the first time I'm following a book, but the author can't keep going. I give him a thumbs up for the Golden Wheel every day. I wonder if he will remember it in the future. I understand Xigua's feelings very well. The pressure in society is definitely not comparable to the pressure we had when we were young. As a full-time author with a senior and a junior, Xigua will not and cannot stubbornly stick to his dream. Transformation can be regarded as a small dream, but reality is reality. I think reaching the peak is very good, but the first order is indeed too low for Xigua. Understandable. But it's a good story, isn't it? What Xigua wanted to express and what he didn't express completely made this story a good story, but was it just that the story was born at the wrong time? I don't think so. Maybe it's because only some people can understand this story. I was just browsing the book circle and said that Xigua was a bad joke. They all said that Dafeng was a good person, but I felt that driving too much was difficult to reconcile, and there was really no way. Since Xigua broke his wrist early, it means that his mind has been made up. In addition to supporting him and waiting for him to come up with a better work that is more suitable for the public, we can also use less insults and more suggestions. Don't you think it is a different kind of achievement for an author to make a novel better and better under his own suggestions? After all, a watermelon is just a watermelon, not a north-south melon, right? So I would like to ask everyone to leave their comments about this novel or the direction of future novels. I believe Xigua will notice it.

Still want to connect with League of Legends characters?

Originally, Xigua opened a new book and planned to put it on the bookshelf to have dozens of chapters. But today I clicked on it and found that the character I wanted appeared in the character list, which was Yu Yuyu 😃. It clicked. It was so fast. I finished reading it immediately. So far, the description is quite in line with my character setting. I won't say it anymore. It's quite a surprise. Today is my birthday. I'm very happy. Just think of it as Xigua's birthday gift to me. 🎁 I gave you the only remaining ticket this month. I will definitely book all of them 🤓

As I write this, I have already rewarded 1,000 points. Although I don't like it now and I may not watch it again in the future, I paid. Don't tell me I'm capable of writing it myself. I paid and I am qualified to comment. The author himself said, let any questions be asked. You said it yourself. You are married now, and you don't want to generate energy for love, then you must first understand that you want this novel that at least everyone can accept. Otherwise, if you want to write your own ideas, just persist, and maybe more people will like your current ideas. However, I have been reading books for so long. Whether they are from hawks, newspaper sellers, or elbows, they all have one characteristic in writing books, which is that they are enjoyable. Life is already very hard, and no one wants to read a novel when the protagonist feels uncomfortable. You can write about how poor the protagonist is, and you can write about how difficult it was for the protagonist before. However, you can't write it so that your readers will follow the protagonist and suffer again. I have read more than a dozen chapters. Let's break down how much the protagonist suffered. First, his legs were interrupted. Then the victim showed no regrets. I think within this short period of time, the protagonist was able to take revenge. Then he met a female teacher. Okay, he barely started learning martial arts. Let's ignore the question of licking or not. It finally started to grow, and then he met a master, a master who could levitate. As you said before, warriors are generally not short of money, but this one was a master who could levitate. I think there is no shortage of money. If he is a liar, then aren't you also an abuser? Okay, let's take a step back and say that this so-called master is not a liar. He is really a good person, but I don't understand your motivation for writing about this mother buying fruit to treat her son's illness. Is it to write about the mother's love for her son? Show maternal love? The character doesn't know that the protagonist's leg is healed, doesn't the reader know? In order to express a mother's love, you gave up the only money in the family. What's the point? Then there is what you said in a single chapter. You said that you hope to write a novel in which the protagonist works hard. So can I understand the meaning of this sentence? The protagonist's combat power won't be that fast? So, how much hardship will the protagonist have to endure later? To feel better? Counting all the great masters, few of them made their fortune by writing about torture. Even if you are yourself, the few game articles you wrote earlier are all enjoyable articles. Why do you have to write such abusive articles after you have transformed? Have you made too much money and don't want to make more money? Also, the protagonist game you wrote earlier is so powerful. It has been more than ten chapters, but I haven't seen any benefits in it. So what's the point of writing this? Is it just to add a background to the main character? Therefore, I hope that the author can really understand his audience before writing. If it's not suitable for people like me. Please tell me, I won't watch it.

It's garbage, it's secular! To write the protagonist so useless that he needs to rely on a woman, he should approach it as a cook. Very poisonous.

Why don't you start a new book with 50 chapters? 😁😁😁

When I saw that pigeon, I gave up immediately. Even if it was just foreshadowing, at least I didn't write it like an idiot. You can just experiment with it. A super academic would make such a low-level mistake and I would be stupid.

Ma Jinlun

The bug is quite big! The world view is that humans are at a disadvantage, which is almost a joke! First, spiritual energy revives, and animals and humans begin to evolve! You say that animals evolve quickly and humans evolve slowly, which is fine, but the advantage of humans as the top of the food chain is never in the body, but in the brain! Animals have advantages, but it also takes time. Humans are not fools. Technology is still very strong. Potential is always potential! Now that animals have passed the most difficult initial stage, can humans catch up? Isn't this a joke? Evolution is not as fast as animals, why are we still catching up? The consequences for humans will only get worse! Can that Mu still catch up? Still better than animals in the end? So the spiritual energy recovery is not suitable for this article. It is worse than the wasteland. Then the spiritual energy recovers, and technology declines. Humans have about the same potential as animals, and their brains are stronger than animals. The next step is for humans to slowly regain the situation. I've read more than a dozen chapters now, and that's it! I have never read the author's book before. The author said that he writes games and wants to make a transition. I don't know if this can help the author! I hope your transformation is successful

The first version, some people say it is poisonous. I can't say anything because I really didn't handle it well. (Gugu took advantage of Chen Xuan's inattention and ate it secretly) The second version, some people still say it is poisonous, and some people think it is not poisonous. I don't want to say anything because there is room for improvement. (Chen Xuan picked the first fruit and found that the second fruit was growing, deducing that the fruit was renewable. So he did an experiment with Gugu and fed the fruit to it) My own improved Third version : Chen Xuan picked the first fruit and found that the second fruit was growing. Keep the first fruit first to be sure. The next day, I found that Gugu had always wanted to eat fruit. At the same time, the second fruit matured. When I picked it off, I found that it was giving birth to a third fruit. Then, take another fruit to do the experiment... (It is more stable, and retains the specialness of Gu Gu) (Gu Gu is a foreshadowing here) The second version, I personally think: After Chen Xuan saw the second fruit sprouting, he took out the first fruit to do the experiment, which shows that he is stable and will experiment with unknown things first. But it didn't wait until the second fruit matured, and it seemed not stable enough (It was stable, but not stable enough, and it would still be criticized) What I want to say is that in the direction of a small number of people, the Nth version may not be useful. They feel that the system must be right, and the things in the system must be good for the protagonist. Oh, some books are anti-routine, and the system deceives the protagonist! Those are some books, but this book of yours is not... Only the protagonist takes advantage of others, and cannot let others take advantage of the protagonist's adventure. What, the protagonist's pet is also part of the protagonist's strength? How can it be the same? Pets work for the protagonist and are good at taking care of food. How can we share the benefits and require early investment...

Changing the category all of a sudden will lose a lot of readers who like to read lol types. If you like the author, I will wait for your next return lol novel.

The simplest evaluation: This book has nothing poisonous, but it also has no selling points, hey.

Go on, this is an opportunity that you don't even need to support. It's too arbitrary to give up. The author himself is in transformation. There is nothing wrong with the sudden decrease in subscriptions. After all, the audience is different. You, who writes about e-sports, suddenly jumped into the fantasy area without even publicity. You just wrote the beginning and just put it on the shelf for a day or two, and you feel that your subscription will suddenly be awesome. This is too fantasy.

It's worthy of being published in a hurry with only 110,000 words. This is called a heart as high as the sky and a life as thin as paper. It's beautiful to have little ability to think too much.

In fact, this book is still good. You should persist a little longer and then check the results. If it doesn't work, it's not impossible to give up. It's still too early.

When I saw this summary today, I couldn't help but think of this book! It's really hard to calm down! I obviously read a book and thought it was pretty good! As a result, on the day it was put on the shelves, it was a eunuch...

What the hell is this about raising yourself to death? (ﾉ○Д○)ﾉ (Turning the table) It didn't take long. I thought the outline was going to stop halfway, but it turned out to be the end.

I am forced to have no choice but to make little money. I have completed a book of 130,000 words. Author, come hang with me! Guaranteed to make you popular in fantasy and science fiction. I really cherish my talent and don't want to see the author go back to work on games.

Authors who write e-sports novels should write assistants or ADs. In fact, the most important thing in e-sports novels is the sense of immersion, just like sports novels. You have been reading the two previous books. The first one of yours has Faker. He was strong before and could still be read, and there really weren't any good e-sports novels at that time. Theshy was in the second book, but at that time theshy was sick. He was violent and sick. He was calm and violent, killing more and more powerful and invincible. It was too early and there was no sense of substitution. In fact, if you fail appropriately, it's not fun to keep killing randomly.

I will post it first and update it every 50 chapters to record the growth of the new book and the attempt of Xigua's transformation. In this form, I briefly list my support I didn't expect it to be rejected, so I wrote an article in advance, for reference only. (The version I saw may be different from that of new readers. The author often goes back to revise and improve it after someone makes comments) The first 3 chapters clearly explain the background and world framework before and after the time travel, but they are not attractive "minus points" PS: I saw the version before the modification... The subsequent development has a slow pace and the main line is unclear. It was vaguely revealed that there are Grandmaster and King ranks among the warrior levels, which may be related to the League of Legends, but it has never been made explicit. In Xigua's usual writing, there are also many League of Legends elements, so I boldly guess that this is an e-sports + fantasy novel. In terms of the overall rhythm of the plot, the master of e-sports writing is struggling on the fantasy side; but in the details, it does not lose its characteristics. 1. In Golden Finger, insist on saying "no!" To getting something for nothing. The growth of the protagonist is the result of hard work + talent. 2. A master of jokes, his writing closely follows current events and is full of "watermelon flavor". 3. Pay attention to the logic and rationality of the plot. In general, this book still has a lot of room for improvement. The good news is that the author listens to readers' opinions and constantly improves it. Readers who like this book can read it and support it. Readers who like this kind of subject matter but feel that this book is not good enough can put it on the bookshelf first. Maybe there will be surprises in the future.

Personally, I feel that it is a pity that this book entered the palace 🤫. The writing is just okay. Anyway, it is much better than what some people have written. You can take your time. It is too early to enter the palace.

The main character said: "I am already number one in the world, what else do I need from the system?" The world upgrades from small world to medium world and then to big world. You must know that what you are writing is fantasy, and you still use the perspective of the small world in the city to write. If you don't attack the street, who will? You see when people write about immortals, they ascend from the mortal world to the spirit world, the spiritual world ascends to the fairy world, and the fairy world ascends to the divine world. You need to know how to upgrade and change maps. This is the only way to write a passionate and exciting fantasy fairy tale. From the beginning of the introduction, you start to dissuade a large number of fantasy readers.

I would like to ask the author when he will publish a new book. Must support.

The author should continue writing e-sports articles. I really don't like reading this type of book.

As a writer who only had one order a day, I cried to death in the toilet. 😓

Let's take a look at it, author, and you say: "I am already number one in the world, what else do I need from the system?" The world upgrades from the small world to the medium world and then to the big world. You must know that what you are writing is fantasy, and you still use the perspective of the small world in the city to write. If you don't attack the street, who will? You see when people write about immortals, they ascend from the mortal world to the spirit world, the spiritual world ascends to the fairy world, and the fairy world ascends to the divine world. You need to know how to upgrade and change maps. This is the only way to write a passionate and exciting fantasy fairy tale. From the beginning of the introduction, you start to dissuade a large number of fantasy readers. In the past, the Internet literary world was in a slump, but then the king of Internet literature "I Eat Tomatoes" invented the method of upgrading and changing maps, and the Internet literary world began to develop vigorously. Practitioners all followed this set of rules. Upgrading and changing maps is also the biggest difference from traditional novels. If you write an urban game, the protagonist is always jumping around on the earth, but the game still follows this set of rules. You are the first to write a fantasy novel, and you can't connect it all at once. I hope you work hard next time and remember the bloody lesson.