Starting from Picking up Sayu Who Ran Away from Home and Starting to Reborn in Tokyo

There are quite a lot of problems in this book, such as character creation. I will take the protagonist as an example. The protagonist was an ordinary senior student in his previous life, and he was not a killer. How did he develop a character that kills people without blinking an eye? The author always portrays the protagonist as a calm and calm character, but every time it is the protagonist who is the most impulsive and does things without considering the consequences. There is also a plot to reduce intelligence. Take the protagonist as an example. The protagonist's strength is only two points higher than that of ordinary people. He can jump to the second floor on flat ground, climb up to more than 20 floors along the pipe, and defeat the elites of various sports clubs. Also, the protagonist always says that he wants to repay the money lent to him by the villagers as soon as possible, but even if he doesn't know how to make money by drawing notebooks, he can still make more money by using his piano playing or other skills as a tutor instead of working in a convenience store. There is also the matter of beating up the convenience store manager. There are so many flaws that I don't even know where to complain. He is causing trouble for himself. After beating the person, he has to go to his sister's apartment and climb more than 20 floors through the pipes. Then the store manager's sister does not have a password for her computer or secret files, etc., And there are many more.

It's a taboo to establish relationships too early in light novels

Contains spoilers, please read with caution I just read the latest chapter. This wave of seniors finally came ashore. It can be said that after all the hardships, they finally got through it (unfortunately, I am Kato Megumi). Getting back to the topic, I feel that the possibility of writing a partisan story is very high (only represents my personal opinion). You must know that the current white-haired male protagonist suffered a lot after saving Sayu. Forgotten, the emptiness in my heart cannot be filled by anyone, but I can't resist my senior's offensive. But it is precisely because of my senior's persistence that the current male protagonist can temporarily step out of the shadows in my opinion. However, one uncomfortable thing is that the author mentioned foreshadowing that Sayu's memory should be restored soon. Then, after Sayu's memory is restored, he will definitely come back to find the male protagonist (Sayu found out that the male protagonist is about to recover) After doing so much for her, and then abandoning him [after adjusting the timeline], then this guilt and the previous love for him will definitely be superimposed , and then I think it will be staged, which everyone loves to see "The Crematorium of Chasing Husbands"?) In this way, I think there will be a wave of confrontation between Sayu and the senior, but how it will unfold and when will it unfold? Waiting for the author, this is a point that I am very curious about in the follow-up. Yes, it is the relationship between the former real girlfriend and the current real girlfriend. Of course, the most important point is that Kato Megumi has said before that even if she likes the other party very much, but the other party cannot completely like her, then she will give up decisively. So, when faced with such a situation as the male protagonist, I especially want to know how to deal with such a thing. Of course, I think the current saint Hui Zhenggu is calm, and I think Hui will definitely stand up in the confrontation between Sayu and the senior. But in general, it still depends on how the author writes, so please update the author quickly, your writing is very good.

I hope the protagonist will say: I can't go back, I personally killed my Sayu. 🐶🐶🐶

What should I say? It would be great if this book was changed to pure love. After all, the protagonist and Sayu are in love with their daily lives.

I think I got a monthly vote, so I'll vote for you by the way. After seeing more than 200 chapters, except for the treatment of Huang Mao, which is a bit poisonous, everything else is fine

Well, it is now 3:49 in the morning on June 25, 2023. I have just finished reading the latest chapter 377. Some of the words are really annoying I skipped reading this book because I personally get a stomachache from reading knives, so I skipped reading some uncomfortable chapters. But between the two accounts, I have read about three hundred chapters. , The more I read, the more I feel something is wrong. At the end, I have a very strange feeling. I feel that the later plots are not as well written as the previous ones, but I can't say what's wrong with it. This feeling started in the early 300th chapter, and it continues to this day. If I have to describe it, it is awkward. The later plots seem to be added temporarily. Did the author change the outline? This feeling is really awkward

First of all, I want to talk about my opinion about this book, because I only accepted the last twenty chapters. Don't ask why, because I have no money, the first 50 chapters are free. Now I think this feeling is a bit too daily, and overall it feels good to me.

By the way, is that Takada Shiori the protagonist's harem? She also had the protagonist's first kiss, 😃

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A note to the author.          ，？ I'm very grateful that you let me know about Sayu. I didn't even know who Sayu was at the beginning, but after I read your book without comment, I searched for Sayu's pictures. There was a saying that Sayu's appearance really impressed me. After seeing so many pictures of two-dimensional beautiful girls, Sayu fell in love with her at the first sight, although it was superficial. Then I accidentally learned about Sayu's treatment of girls and his past background in this chapter, and then I started to emo, which broke my defense at that time. The feeling of the beautiful things in my heart being tainted makes me feel uncomfortable. Why is this girl like this? Why can she not care about such things. So just like Yusuke said, "I want to save you" I came up with this idea. Fortunately, I know her because of your book, and you, the author, also want to do the same thing as me, "Redeem Sayu." Then as the plot progressed, you made me understand Sayu better, and the story between her and Yusuke moved me heartily, and I seemed to regard Yusuke as my alter ego in the book. I could bring him in easily, because Yusuke's character is very in line with my taste. In fact, in reality, I am also a relatively affectionate person. Although I only have unrequited love, I am not as lucky as Yusuke to meet a girl like Sayu. But once you are emotionally invested in someone and are willing to sacrifice for them, everyone should have experienced the sweetness and pain involved, and I am the kind of person who is easily trapped and unable to extricate myself, and it takes a long time to get out, so I can empathize with Matasuke's decadence after losing Sayu, because I will most likely be the same. So Yusuke is very similar to me. It should be said that he is the person I admire more in myself. So Sayu is not only Yusuke's Bai Yueguang, but also Bai Yueguang in my mind. Well, maybe it was you who made me really fall in love with her. But reality is reality after all, and the second dimension is still the second dimension. Even as some book friends said, Sayu in the original book is not as perfect as I imagined, but your book gave me a chance to put aside the original work and build the perfect Sayu in my mind. Therefore, I really hope that she can be happy. Although I was attracted by the label of your harem at first, after watching Sayu, she is the only girl in my eyes. 😭😭So you are really awesome. For the first time, you have the idea of ​​​​reading a harem novel and not wanting it to be a harem novel😢. As a side note, because of Sayu, I became a pure love warrior. Before, I was still jumping between pure love and NTR (laughs). Alas, I hope Sayu can think about it quickly and seize what she loves! Yusuke is like half of me. I want him to take my place and live a happy life with Sayu in a fantasy world that I cannot relate to. By the way, I used Sayu's words when he first escaped: "Sayu, please remember Yusuke." PS① I have only read more than a hundred chapters so far. Because I saw some comments in the comment area, I skipped to read the chapters about Sayu's amnesia and suffered a knife in advance. What's even more sad is that I have to re-read it from the front. With the plot foreshadowing, I'm afraid it will be more knife-like. A good guy is knifed twice. ②I will definitely order all of this book. I hope the author can fulfill my dreams and regrets. ③ As I was writing this, I felt inexplicably sad, and then I remembered that I was single. ④ After watching Sayu, I suddenly didn't have much interest in girls in real life, and I'm afraid it will take a long time to come back. ⑤No matter how many shortcomings you write, in my heart this book is really a sacred book. Every boy has a dream about pure love in his heart, and Yusuke and Sayu are what I think of... I wonder if the author can see the above?

If I don't trade in stocks, my head hurts just thinking about it. This book is written to make up for the regrets of the original work. If I can't write an ideal ending by myself... Then I will write one🔨 The male protagonist's personality: superficially herbivorous, essentially carnivorous, with emotional priority! ———————— Book Club: 739298512

I would like to add that there is no minotaur plot in this book. Everything mentioned in the comment area belongs to the plot of the original work. The timeline of this book is set earlier than the time of Niu in the original work, so there is no Niu. However, I still think the teacher should have a female protagonist. 😁😁😁 Who doesn't love a beautiful female teacher in her 20s!

Let me tell you what I think about this book: I accidentally saw this book in the recommendation section of the light novel category. I don't know why I clicked in, and then I saw the heroine Megumi Kato! ! ! Later I found out that it was suspected of being a harem novel. What can I say, emm? I am a pure lover of literature, but I still read it for the sake of Sage Hui. Then I felt that the protagonist, plot setting and the author's writing style were also very good, and the characters' lines were very appropriate. (Especially Kato Megumi's lines) Let's talk about the harem and pure love. As long as it's not a harem for the sake of a harem, and it's not like a brainless stallion, I can still accept it. I hope the author can write the emotional line better. Come on, author!

Sayu

Takada Shiori

If Sayu remembers her later, and then Yusuke completely lets go of her, this kind of ridiculous plot will immediately become a god. Uncle, I like this kind of stomachache plot the most.

She is gentle, considerate, diligent, and can cook Since she came to your home, you, who live alone, have noticed changes in your home. The kitchen can always smell the alluring aroma, your clothes have been neatly ironed, and the messy items have become more orderly... When you go to work, she will do the housework and wait for you to come back. Even if you may have worked overtime again today and come back very late... But as soon as you open the door, you will hear "I'm lucky today" and get a warm hug from the girl. This girl cares about you. When she is keenly aware of your negative emotions, she can always use her girlish tenderness to help you recover. You understand her previous experiences, but you also know that sex is not everything in life. You cannot deny this to such a young and ignorant girl. You will definitely save her like this, right? You will definitely teach her how to love herself better, how to love others correctly, and how to love the world correctly. And guide her to face the past and become a butterfly! You must be this kind of person... It's really great for Sayu to meet you!

In the original version, God of War shed tears after watching it, and the tauren knelt down after watching it.

Megumi Kato

Regardless of the broken shoes setting, I still like Sayu. Please don't mention the original broken shoes setting in the novel. I felt bad when the protagonist dreamed of Sayu's original experience. There is no need to write about these bad aspects. If it is like the original novel, I am afraid that I will be called a dog 😒. The original novel depicts Sayu as a good person, but I feel more heartbroken when I think about the fact that he is already a broken shoe. The love is deep and the hatred is deep. Maybe this is the reason why the original work was criticized as a dog. After all, Bus with Broken Shoes has touched the bottom line of the audience.

This is my first time posting and I just can't stand it anymore. At first, I just read this book for fun, but later on I felt more and more sorry for my senior sister. The male protagonist keeps saying that he shoulders the responsibilities of those around him, but all he gives to those around him is material compensation. It cannot be said that there is no spiritual care, but it is really very little. I want to give everyone a home, but because of my indecision I only focus on the present and not the future. He obviously has a new girlfriend, but he is always tied down by the past and gives up on himself, which makes people around him worry. He just accepts the good things from people around him, but he can't help but hurt the people around him. I always feel that the male protagonist takes the contributions of the people around him too much for granted, and even if he occasionally feels guilty, he doesn't take any practical actions to make up for it. He's just a scumbag who doesn't take the initiative or refuse. The ambiguity in the beginning of the harem novel is very interesting, but in the middle and late stages, I always start to feel stomachache.

The author looks here,

Don't forget about the single female lead, right? I'll come to the harem! ! ! A harem is a must! ! !

The harem transfer method is very hard, it makes my head hurt when I watch it. The relationship between the characters is a bit messy now. Now a single line is not very good. It would be an explosion if there were multiple lines interacting. It's really not possible to switch to a single female protagonist or two female protagonists. The author listened to everyone's advice, you can't control the harem story!

First paragraph "Huh." Kato Yusuke lowered his head to relieve the fatigue in his body. Looking back at the surroundings, he had already returned to Sayu's home. A ray of early morning sun brought a touch of warmth to my face, making it itch slightly. For the first time, Yusuke looked up. The familiar furniture and the familiar feeling from the second floor made him feel peaceful for a moment. An emotionless electronic sound came, but at this moment Yusuke felt that this sound sounded better than anything else (except Sayu). "Ding, congratulations to the host for completing the mission. It has completed the world-class mission [Ogiwara Sayu's Redemption (1/1)] Task reward: one million points, 10 billion yen in money" "Hehehe." Looking at the system prompts, a feeling of hard work and joy filled Yusuke's body, Yusuke raised one hand and smiled bitterly. Crunch. There was a faint knock on the door from the second floor. Sayu poked out her cute little head and seemed to be looking for something. Yusuke's eyes quickly met Sayu's. The girl seemed to have found her target. She ran and hung directly on Yusuke's body, tears streaming from her eyes. "Hey, Yusuke, I have had a long dream, Yusuke, do you want to hear it?" Watching Sayu crying and talking, Yusuke felt warm in his heart, as if a ghost ship that had been drifting for tens of thousands of years had found its own haven. "As long as it's Sayu, I want to hear anything." So in this early morning, the boy and the girl were immersed in this wonderful dream, and never wanted to leave.

The author is a novice, and it is not easy to write until now. The Sayu here is not the Sayu in the original work, and the heroines Megumi, Shiyu, and Eirili are not the original heroines. All the characters in this novel are characters given a new life by (author: Xiaoxiao), so don't impose your dissatisfaction with the original work on Sayu written by (author: Xiaoxiao). If you don't like it, don't read it or say it. If you want to say it, please say it after reading it. (Note: Each radish and cabbage has its own preferences, and each radish and cabbage has its own thoughts)

Golden Retriever

Let me express my humble opinion. Although, after all, this is a light novel, right? The pull between the male protagonist and the female protagonist is inevitable, and this book is clearly about the harem, so although Yusuke's behavior is more or less indecisive, it is already very straightforward (compared to similar genres). Some people may think that it is a bit too cruel to treat Kei or the senior sister, but in fact, this is the lesser of two powers. What if Yusuke started immediately after he had just "fallen out of love"? Maybe it won't change quickly, and at this time, it will be even more painful. As for Shinjoka, Yusuke's opinion is actually very clear, that is, some people's feelings are consumables and can be traded, but some people can't, so they look like scum, but in fact they are responsible behaviors. Of course, it is not the most perfect treatment after all, but this kind of imperfection can not only advance the plot, but more importantly, it makes Yusuke think about a person more. After all, only people can make mistakes, but the male protagonist of Long Ao Tianhou Palace will not 🤐

Now Yusuke. Let the world feel the pain!