I Have to Capture My Girlfriend

The overall evaluation is that it is a relatively good new book recently. It cannot be said to be very popular, but it is enough to put some distance between other books. However, there are still some areas that need improvement. The writing style is okay and the reading is smooth. The plot design is a fatal injury. Even if it is just a show-off, it still needs to be in-depth. The article also needs to comply with some basic logic. It is recommended that the author works harder and polishes the article carefully. Here is an example from the article. The villain made a phone call, and several security guards quickly came to surround the protagonist. The seemingly smooth plot turns out to be very dramatic in one paragraph. How far away is the security guard before you need to call? If you are very close, why don't you shout directly? If he was far away, the protagonist would just wait half a minute for the security guards to surround him? Even if you really want to write this plot, you should insert some dialogue and description in the middle to supplement the article. Secondly, it was also the plot at that time. After being scolded by the protagonist a few times, a playboy decided to use music to decide the outcome. I understand that this is the direction needed to advance the plot, but since that dude's character obviously doesn't have such a high level of self-cultivation, such a description will only make people laugh. If we want to force this trend forward, a person with high authority should propose the plan, rather than a few people A, B and C who are watching. Thirdly, it's the same plot. Why can't the dude just outside the door hear the piano music that is heard by people on the other side of the building so far away? This is not logical at all. Even if you are pretending to be a slap in the face, you should take this into consideration. For example, if you don't understand it at all and think that the protagonist is playing blindly, or you are trying to buy the track with coercion and inducement (it only provides ideas, the specific details need to be worked out) Fourth, since you are not writing about primitive society or before the Renaissance, don't propose a setting where the piano music that was very good in that world is full of loopholes in the protagonist's ears. First of all, the protagonist himself is not a piano master, just like ordinary people who have studied music cannot tell the difference between Beethoven and Richard Clayderman. Secondly, no one is a fool. There may be no Van Gogh in this world, but there may be Van Gogh, Van Gogh, and Van Gogh. There may be some gaps in the details of artistic development, but if you propose that there is a huge and obvious gap between the two worlds, it will only appear that everyone except the protagonist is a fool, which is very detrimental to shaping a complete world view. Finally, the routine of pretending to be a pig to eat the tiger and looking for Cinderella is no longer popular. I suggest the author make more efforts to promote the plot in the future.

You're welcome, my name is Lei Feng. Plant a picture today and harvest countless pictures tomorrow

What should I say? It feels a bit old-fashioned, and the plot is also very urgent and lacks good control over the plot.

I feel that the subject matter is good, but I feel that I have read similar subjects. The author can look for more books of the same type, and the progress is indeed a bit fast, especially when it is discovered that this is a supernatural world. It is better to directly let the protagonist participate in a supernatural event and then naturally discover that this is a supernatural world, and then confess. It is too fast. Confessing before long, not only makes the protagonist attract enemies, but also seems reckless. Everything else is pretty good.

It's pretty good-looking, most of it is good-looking, but it's a bit poisonous to force a Tang Monk's physique, and good reward options are linked to the degree of danger. This is okay, but author, what is the focus of this book? Is it the monster recovery and monster-fighting upgrade flow or the Wenchao Gong's daily life flow? At present, it seems that you have written both the monster recovery flow and the daily life flow, but the physique of Tang Monk is really a very, very poor setting. Tang Monk himself is the reincarnation of Jin Chanzi, and he needs 3 bodyguards and a bunch of fairy backgrounds to succeed. The protagonist is too difficult to achieve, immortality, ghosts, this alone is worth turning the world upside down.

I think it's quite to my liking, come on