I Am the World

I found that a common problem behind the scenes is that the small scenes in the early stage are wonderfully written, but the mid-stage scenes tend to be insufficiently written and unable to control, causing the entire plot to fall apart. The early "Misty World" is very interesting. Although I am used to seeing the behind-the-scenes scenes of creation, this book still shines in people's eyes. From the middle stage, the excitement of the entire plot plummeted. The magic modification of "The Swordsman" is a complete mess, seriously underestimating the country's capabilities. First of all, let's talk about "country", which is a big scene. The authors seem to have no imagination and completely ignore the powerful capabilities of the state apparatus. In my opinion, given the powerful capabilities of the modern motherland, it really shouldn't be too easy to crush "The Swordsman". It is entirely possible to send out a strong scientific research team to allow soldiers to reshape the entire modern industrial civilization in the world of "Swordsman". Even if the entire physical data is completely different from modern times, it will not greatly affect the capabilities of the state machine. There are also those top strategists, psychologists, doctors, etc., Who instigate rebellion against ancient people every minute. As a result, the author, you wrote about a group of soldiers holding long guns and short cannons to confront others head-on? Any large group with some power will not be so stupid. And I value the temptation of "fairies" too much. I can understand those old people who are dying. Who of the normal young people, who have had enough to eat and drink, and are free from disasters and diseases, still want to be gods? Don't think that the ancients were all fools, who only saw the temptation of "gods" and could not see the danger behind them. Most ordinary people have very low requirements, just enough to eat and drink, and no disaster or disease. It is simply easy to bribe these people with the capabilities of a modern country. The ancient Ming Dynasty was rotten at its roots, even if you see the firearms of modern civilization are powerful. They will not pay much attention to the craftsmen, but will only exploit them even more. In the case of favorable treatment in modern countries, they will definitely run away. It will only speed up the demise of the dynasty To be honest, no matter which direction you look at it, there is no reason for modern countries to lose to ancient civilizations. (Unless you are starting in the world of high martial arts) Especially when myths such as Tathagata and Heavenly Palace enter the world, I am even more speechless. This is a low-level world of martial arts. Why do you want to introduce mythology into it? And the three thousand martial arts people were wiped out, which makes me even more speechless. Just do a few secretly, but forcing a big kill is taboo behind the scenes. My sister's incident can completely draw my parents into a world of mist. After the parents are included, the state will take care of these matters. Where does the protagonist need to take action In my opinion, "The Swordsman" can be a novice transition to the village and let the country rule as much as possible. Only when there are benefits will the country invest heavily. The subsequent plot is also easy to unfold Develop the world of "The Swordsman" into a safe zone to allow novices to develop well What modern weapons should not be brought into the ancient low-military civilization of "The Swordsman", or the carrying of items can be gradually opened. For example, at the beginning, you can carry modern products that cannot affect the world of "Swordsman". Such as food, drink and clothing, non-destructive and revolutionary products. When the "Swordsman" world guide becomes higher and higher, higher carrying permissions will be opened every time a certain percentage is reached. Until it can be teleported to the entire modern civilization and products can enter at will, completely assimilating the entire world. Large-scale missions or core missions shall be determined by conquering the world or the Ming Dynasty. The protagonist should obtain energy from assimilating the world, rather than frantically consuming the player's small energy. You can set the protagonist to consume energy when sending equipment or sending people into the world. The higher the assimilation, the protagonist can absorb energy from the world and feed it back to himself. These worlds are oil fields, or oil fields that can sustain production. The better and more developed the civilization inside, the happier the people. Then the more energy the people generate, the more energy the protagonist gets. Upgrading players can take tasks from NPCs, similar to how you help characters in "Swordsman" complete tasks. The character identifies with the player = the world consciousness will identify with the player, and the world consciousness will share some of the energy generated by the task with the player. The more important the characters in the world are, the more energy the tasks can receive. Each character produces a certain amount of energy regularly, and these abilities are invisible and unknown to the characters. But players can see and know that world consciousness will help assign characters. For example, if a character recognizes the village, the country, and the world, the energy generated will be automatically allocated to these. When players help villages, countries, and the world complete tasks, they can obtain these energies. The more you get, the more it helps the protagonist to assimilate the world. And because the temperament of various characters, the quality of their relationships, their level of recognition, the right time, place and people will all affect the amount of rewards. For example, the butcher made a lot of money today and his business was good. He must be happy at this time and pleased to see you. The more I identify with you, the more rewards the world will distribute to you. For example, if the miser loses money today, you will be very unhappy. Even if you saved his life, he doesn't recognize you. Therefore, the rewards the world will allocate to you will be very few, maybe not even a dime. The big characters in "The Swordsman" are recognized by most characters, so they can be favored by God and prosper. In other words, players not only have to compete with their own people, but also compete with NPCs for energy. Know that players can see it, but NPCs can't. Of course you can also gain energy by killing, but this kind of robbery-like behavior is definitely the lowest profit. The energy gained must be very little. So war is only done by large organizations. Although the energy gained from killing is small, it can add up to a lot. On the other hand, lone rangers or small groups can complete tasks and maximize benefits. The two sides do not influence each other, but they influence each other. Everyone has his or her own path, and he will be number one in three hundred and sixty lines.

Maybe I've seen too much about the orphanage... I always feel that having a family member is a failure, and not handling it well is even more poisonous. I vomited when I saved my sister... You also need to tell me who you are. Although others can't do anything to you, won't the government investigate? So what if you use your family to threaten you? If you have the ability to kill them all, there will always be some who are not clear-headed and go back to touch your family. Overall, it's a bit uncomfortable to watch.

I am an author. If you have any suggestions, I will read them!

I beg you not to be a eunuch anymore. I beg you. Such a good writing style is such a pity.

Every book is good, every book is eunuch

The author's self-pleasure is too serious. Generally, some people comment that the author is enjoying himself because reading the article is interesting, and he hopes that the author can take me to enjoy it with him. The logic of the first three chapters is a bit jumpy. In other words, don't throw away the setting in a hurry. Write the story well first. It's too jumpy! The protagonist explores his own abilities and characteristics too quickly, and some necessary processes are simplified too much. To sum up, the details are not appropriate, and there are too many strange explorations and descriptions of reality (foreshadowing?). The foreshadowing needs to be "foreshadowed". If so many people know there is something wrong, not to mention the plot is not new. There are also too many scenes and environment descriptions by the author, but they are also too monotonous. This problem can be summarized as a lack of sense of picture. Not only is there no sense of immersion in the protagonist, but the world written by the author is also very vague. In the end, it is a flaw and an old routine. Must the creation story be written as a game? Must it be written as Lord God? The first book was about the fire of creation, not because the protagonist he wrote was so naughty, but because of the pure epic feeling, the epic feeling based on the grand scale of civilization. Countless science fiction films also excel in their sense of epicness. As far as this book is concerned, I can tolerate small errors in logic and the misuse of some scientific and technological concepts, but I cannot stand that creation-style novels have no real selling point of this kind of literature except the grandeur of creation and the numerous layouts.

Looking forward to the new book, another hundred free chapters

The first part is okay, but the second part is too petty to focus on the so-called seven deadly sins. It has been said before that the fog is expanding and foreigners have been running into the fog. Now not even a foreigner has come out. Even the Chinese player organization that appears is the seven deadly sins and positive and negative. You can write more about the actions of other distinctive player organizations, such as some player groups who joined the Ming Dynasty, and you can also write more about the protagonist's leek, such as turning some indigestible impurities into monsters and throwing them into a place called the training ground, so that players can use their spirit points to do hard work to destroy monsters.

It's not interesting. What does it say, like licking a dog, there are three, six or nine levels of human beings? Can people who are proud of the world of martial arts die casually? Will humans not die if players are like locusts in the real world?

Inexplicable and incomprehensible.

Poison! ! There is obviously a flow of players who left, but a large number of players died. Those who survived were left with the sequelae of semi-paralysis. The income and risks were completely out of balance, and there were still stupid people working for you. You are a fool as a player, I will die for you! !

It's so beautiful. Each book contains more than a hundred pictures. It's about to end. Is it finally starting again?

The subject matter and creativity are good, but the plot is written in a mess and is destined to be overlaid.

I haven't watched it yet, but I read the comments and it said that players can die, and I like that. Recently, I have been recruited as a believer by those Cheng Shenwen. If you fight against a god, his followers can be resurrected indefinitely, while followers of other gods will die as soon as you kill them, which is disgusting. Everyone is at the same level as God, and some are at a higher level than him.

I feel like I can learn a little bit about history, and I hope it can be more epic. Is there any new version of World Parasite?

. Based on what I have read so far, I think the first three chapters of your book are okay. This is based on your subject, and there are very few that can be considered to be okay with your subject. You read that right, I am just praising you I was actually a little excited at first because I wanted to praise you, but after thinking about it, I calmed down because I was afraid that you would get carried away. I won't talk about the mess, but the simplest and most core point is that the book you have written is more intelligent than most of the similar themes, and it is more interesting to read. Then I also read a lot of comments that badmouthed you, and I speak from my heart. If you really believe it Those people fart with their mouths, then your book is really cool. If you write it well, it is really good. In other words, most of them can't even write well. Although the threshold of online novels is low, it does not mean that everyone can come to make a living in it. But you, I think it is OK

I can't understand it at all. Although the author has many ideas and great imagination, he cannot write them out at all. The characters keep jumping around. One is the protagonist, the other is the descendant, and the other is Yang Guang. Maybe this novel is interesting, but it is only interesting to the author. To the readers, this book is just the ravings of the author's dream, with no sense of immersion at all.