My Giant Kingdom

Also, let's talk about the advantages and disadvantages of this book! The advantage is. The writing is excellent. There is no big problem with grasping the plot and related basic writing skills. It can even be called excellent in many online articles. Disadvantages. Beware of glass. First. Starting point is a common problem shared by most authors. Three Golden Chapters. Law. Why do you have to integrate a big burning point within three cards? That's the whole plot. A thunderous beginning. The subsequent emotional development is also relatively blunt. There is no foreshadowing. It can only be described as fast food. Second. The relevant supporting roles are insufficiently prepared, and the characters are not three-dimensional enough. The description of the protagonist's thinking is unclear. Don't know what he wants to do. Once he doesn't pay attention, he forgets what he is going to do. Third, the issue of women's clothing. In fact, I have been very concerned about this issue for a while. But then I realized that I am actually a beauty control person, and as long as I am beautiful, it is enough to make me happy, regardless of whether I am a man or a woman. Now I am more concerned about the conflict caused by women's clothing and the thinking problems caused by the protagonist. Peripheral awareness. This involves clothing and the environment. Detailed description. Actually, I can see that you want to write hardcore articles. It's just the environment of the starting point that makes you ignore most of the hard-core details. Passed by in one stroke. Yes. It's great for ordinary people! It just depends on how the protagonist pretends to be, but for people of a certain reading age, I started reading novels when I could barely read. Nowadays, you probably read online articles from physical books. About ten years. Although I have ordered all the current chapters of your book. But your lack of details now makes it difficult for me to have the motivation to subscribe to your book. Why? My writing skills are not bad. But the plot is pretty dry. Ignore the details throughout the whole process, and ignore the flaws in the plot caused by those details after watching it. It feels like a running account. This way you will not be able to please both sides. Really cool ones. I really want to enjoy those. Even looking at the hard-core setbacks. He gives up easily. Those old bookworms who don't just want to enjoy themselves, but want to find some gold from the channels they are accustomed to reading. Every time I see the details of the plot, I am very surprised. Let me tell you about the flaws in the plot. First. The male protagonist is in an environment at the beginning. It itself is a mentality that has been polished by barbarians for ten years. But readers have no empathy. If your writing is not good enough. Probably these two books of yours. Practice it. With this lack of easy-to-accept substitution at the beginning, I usually go straight. The background of the protagonist is not explained either. So the character of the protagonist is currently a black box for us. True. The author in the early and middle period is easy to write. But in the later stages. Very prone to bleeding. Second. At the beginning, you borrowed it to a certain extent. A kind of panic and tension similar to the West, when elves enter the human world. It is a very good combination. With the cooperation, the whole clan almost died just now. The old leader died. Facing the unknown world. Indeed, it inspires a certain sense of immersion in people. Or it's like watching a third-person adventure story. The protagonist is reincarnated from a human society. Very familiar with modern human society. Also give. This life adds a little golden finger. There won't be a thunderstorm at the beginning. Then your power system begins to unfold. At the current mid-to-late stage, you can explain to yourself that your own power system has no obvious levels. Actually I don't really care. With the development step by step, when the dog-licking king started to put on a show for the precious bones in his eyes, he was finally exposed and fell into a state of madness. What you wrote was sudden and distant. Of course it's from the perspective of the protagonist. Moreover. I saw no clear earth. Magic Bear. The lady mentioned that once you have faith, you will definitely not betray. Idea. The protagonist's behavior is indeed very risky. It can even be said that he is stupid. In the world of villains, the protagonist is often considered a savage who does not look like a savage. But here comes the problem, this and its behavior in human society. Especially when dealing with a being equivalent to the size of a Godzilla. 's recklessness became a sharp contrast. Indeed. I can find many explanations for the above shortcomings. But just the explanation in my head. There is one more. About the setting of gods. A serious statement, this is just a discussion, not an argument. If there is anything incomprehensible, please forgive me. At present, the author keeps repeating one thing. The question of the almighty power of belief in gods. In the Lilliputian country, and even in the world similar to the earth. The power of faith exists. It can even be said that as long as anyone is a little ambitious, any entire sect can obtain supernatural powers. Things like this that are extremely easy to obtain and have no side effects and extend one's lifespan include not only lifespan, but also various strengths, um, agility and various hardware. Super easy to fix. Judging from the current situation, this disordered wilderness and human alliance can still form a balanced situation. It's just weird. This kind of belief looks more like a legend or a story. Merit. Feedback on the impact it has on people's minds. In other words, this is an objective idealistic universe. In terms of science fiction, that's it. A world with strong observer effects. Any behavioral observation of all things can affect changes in reality. The rest is to talk about the protagonist's mentality. And details of women's clothing. Faulty injury. First point. The salted fish among barbarians. Simply to live longer. And walked towards the path of gods. Women's clothing, for example, your female-style spider silk neural network, will it really not affect the original male body? Add a pair of crab claws. Leg muscle transformation. And your interest in the fruit of the female wisteria. It makes me feel a little creepy. In the middle and later period, there was a lot less description of this. Maybe you find that a lot of people are not interested in women's clothing. It's still a problem. Your description in the early stage was too explicit. The later, middle and later stages are too understated. As a result, I endured the temptation to read it in women's clothing. Or maybe it's just that women's clothing is exciting. What about the back? It felt bland. Another large number of people left. And this setting of women's clothing is another way to strengthen the protagonist. It feels like a relatively distinctive feature. In the later stage, it was eliminated instead. At least not that stark. Let's use an analogy. At present, there are several ways to strengthen women's clothing. The first type. Completely perverted. The more it intensifies, both the mind and the body undergo a complete metamorphosis. It's the kind of pervert that deviates from the norm. Give an example. Three evil books. That's it. Second type. Not completely perverted. Completely mentally transformed. I am already a woman at heart. The body undergoes an incomplete metamorphosis. The reason why the three evil books are evil is because they happened to do the opposite in the early stage. Come to the mid-term card, I'll give you another break. Well, give me an example. The famous ones include Hedgehog Cat's cross-dressing and his Alice stuff. There is also a book called Alice in Another World's Broken Shoes. And the kind that is suspected to be made from sex dolls. It's just that the body is not completely transformed. But mentally he was completely destroyed. The third type. Skewed form. Mentally, I was affected by the surrounding environment to a certain extent, but I did not abandon the bottom line. Physically transformed by one's own environment. Changes have occurred. To be honest, the main thing for women's clothing is to look at the third type, struggling repeatedly in this process of bias. The struggles you wrote about in the early stage. But in the middle to late stages you start to blur. How to say it? Women's clothing. It cannot support a book to proceed in depth. He can only make an early breakthrough. We should write in depth in the middle and later stages. Or fall. Or get rid of it. Repeated deflections are nauseating. Of course there are those who pretend to be struggling, but are actually not completely abnormal. I am completely a woman at heart. The body still has a handle. A lot of the problems are that if you stimulate them in the early stage, you will become intimidated as soon as someone else becomes clever. Then your book starts to become confusing and unclear. So far, in the middle and later stages of the first 300,000 words, I can't tell which one you mainly write about? Farming. You only mentioned a few things about farming. Faith. I don't care much about you as the main character. Women's clothing. Your protagonist seems to be wearing white silk women's underwear to negotiate with people everywhere, and there is no trace of shame? Also. Fighting. You insist on mentioning the side effects caused by cross-dressing, so a very passionate battle becomes a bit embarrassing. Obviously it is survival and struggle. The taste of blood changes in your mouth. Daily life is supposed to be a time of tangle, but you, the protagonist, are so carefree that you don't feel anything. If it is said to be influenced by barbarians. His personality in his previous life was a black box. No explanation at all. It makes people bald. Also. Many times you don't describe the protagonist. What is he wearing? And then get the white silk outfit. After. A relatively muscular young man was wearing a sexy white silk dress for women. And a muscular adult wearing sexy black stockings. When I think about it, I feel like my brain has been hit hard. And regarding the issue of clothes, there is no clear suggestion that after making the slime armor, he wore these armors to the dwarf city. So the thought of that epic sword master showdown opened my eyes. My brain. I need to wash up. 😭 And you didn't say how to integrate. It is the kind of outer welding type that is formed directly on the skin and fused together. It is still the kind of internal welding that is integrated into the body. But according to the rules, teach the dog-licking king the skills. When undergoing hand modification. Obviously it describes an external welding state. This creates a contradiction. The protagonist in the previous article has great resistance to women's clothing. But I wore it for strength. On the contrary, after wearing it. Don't really care. It stands to reason that it should be integrated into the body. The question, women's lace gloves emerged later. This is said to be women's clothing. Rather, it's the chaos of your system. At present, people below the gods are just useless people. Nothing. Gods and mortals. Just these two classes. Very easy to cross. Magicians, sword masters, etc. Are all evil. Currently, it seems that the barbarians' system is to transform their own bodies. It seems that this transformation is a sacrifice from both spiritual and physical aspects. Constantly transforming one's own body. But there is rarely a transformation of spiritual design. As for the Path of God, its early performance is more similar to that of the physical body. The current spiritual consciousness is from. Taking medicine and eating it should increase the soul or something like that. Of course, if you insist on setting this to have no sequelae, I won't say anything. After all, you are the omniscient and omnipotent God there. As a person who has received a complete modern education, shouldn't the first thing you should think about is how to establish a senior system? Without a system, how can I judge whether I can get a person? As a dependent of the Earth Goddess, Ms. Mo Xiong is undoubtedly the best database. Unfortunately, the protagonist has very few conversations with her, and most of them are general talks. We haven't seen any ambitions of the protagonist yet. Exist simply for the sake of existing. Exist for a better existence. The only remaining sense of crisis is also caused by being threatened to exist. Related actions. It's not that existence is bad, it's just that a protagonist doing everything for existence is too rubbish. In reality, I have tried my best to survive. Why do I still have to worry about my existence in the novel? Just one is. Hell version. Add one life to pass the level. The other is to open n number of modifiers. There is also the kind of second life. In short, I hope you can write better. Thank you too. See this, see this long article written by a stupid guy like me

Two chapters a day is not enough. How about this? If you add another chapter in the future, I will give you a reward of 200. If you think it is missing, I can add more if you don't agree. If you agree, just treat it as if I didn't say anything.

There are no good pictures, so I chose this one. I asked if it has the ferocious temperament of a barbarian😂😂

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I originally wanted to see how to use the earth's material to magically transform a different world, but as soon as it was released, it became a fantasy world of mutants, and the protagonist was forcibly reduced to intelligence. Can't read

How tall is the protagonist? When I read Chapter 13, it was said that the protagonist is a little taller than a cigarette holder. In Chapter 14, the protagonist's brother posted a one-yuan coin on the front and back. He couldn't see him. Can he roll up if he pushed it from the side?