The Words of the Luo Network in Qin

Author! I'm really speechless at the way you wrote it. First of all, you introduce that the protagonist mother and daughter have been on the run for 6 years and found a farmhouse for shelter. Then after the protagonist knows the situation, he still waits for what happened to happen again? What's the point? And the one who was forced to join the snare. . . . Can't you write that the main character got caught up in the trap for some reason? Controlled the snare? You have traded so many things, don't you? Why are you dragging it? If Qin Shihuang knew about it, wouldn't he reuse you? Do you have to hide it? There are too many poisonous points. . . It's still acceptable to be a woman who traveled through time. The mother's family can also accept it. The mother was deposed. . . Fuck! Forced to join the snare. . . . I. . . . . . ! Now that we know the plot and set it up, nothing has changed at all! This is too poisonous! Can't you write that after the protagonist travels through time, he develops through the system and secretly controls the farmhouse? Received the favor of the First Emperor? What is the use of your system? Oh my God! I guess you haven't published or revised this book. I hope you will make great progress as the author of your next book.

Will the author keep writing? If I knew this book, I would read it

Let me make it clear that I usually don't delete posts that I normally make. After all, everyone has their own preferences. But I won't show mercy to those who are ignorant.

The protagonist's current cultivation level can be said to be above the first level of Tianzi, but compared with the real master of decision-making, it is still lacking. Now if the protagonist is alone, he can withdraw from the trap, but with the factors of the farmer, mother, and her brother, the protagonist still cannot There is a way to protect everyone, so if you want to be on an equal footing with the snare and protect your own people, the protagonist needs to be close to the center of power in Da Qin. If you are from a peasant family, you can do your old job, grain, water conservancy, etc., Which is the symbol represented by Liutang

First of all, thank you all for your company. Every comment you make is the motivation for me to move forward. Someone commented: My book is actually not much different from the original work. The protagonist is the same as if he is not here. I feel like the protagonist is stupid and has a lot of cards in his hand, but he is constantly being abused. As far as it goes, your assessment is very pertinent and so right. (ಡωಡ)Hiahiahia In a dark era like the end of the Warring States Period, especially in a cruel world like "Qin Shi Mingyue", what really determines whether you can leave your name in history is not how many golden fingers or trump cards you have, but your strength. The strong show off their magical powers, and the weak are reduced to pawns. Being able to decide and change everything from the very beginning makes me an invincible writer... I still can't fool my "relatives" into thinking they are Japanese like Gazi did. (ಡωಡ)Hiahiahia I won't spoil the future plot, but I will try my best to give you the best story I can. Again, there is a long way to go, and I have only written more than forty chapters, so don't rush to draw conclusions about me. Thank you everyone (*°∀°)=3 muaヽ(*´з｀*)ﾉI love you all(ɔˆ ³(ˆ⌣ˆc) Thank you all for your company for the last time. Only when you read my book can I have meaning as an author. Zeng Xumi Mountain Hidden

Poisonous Point 1: Didn't change Jingni's ending Poisonous Point 2: Make a good system Poisonous Point 3: Knowing that Tian Meng wanted to harm Jingni, he didn't take her away from the farmhouse, but instead went out on his own

Abuse, this novel perfectly demonstrates the word abuse. I have a golden finger but I can't use it. My mother was slept with for seven years, and she did nothing and then had her muscles crippled. . . . . . That's it. Who of you are awesome? Just watch it for yourself. I'll watch Douyin to relax my mood. Don't those long legs smell good? (I persisted for 11 chapters)

After watching it for so long, I didn't know what you were going to do. Now that the protagonist has traveled through time and has a golden finger, Tian Yan still doesn't follow the plot, so what's the use of you? The fanfic is not cheating all the way, it is also very abused, what is it written about, as the protagonist can't do anything, bows his head and kneels to everyone he sees, and many people say this is reality, if you are weak, you have to bow your head, you have already written a fanfic, is it still realistic?

Detoxification is not a fun article, and I was always frustrated in the early stages. Knowing the plot, she kept saying she would protect her mother, but in the end, she even forgot that her mother was born prematurely. I was very depressed for a long time in the early stage, so don't watch this if you are addicted to it.

It should have been cut a long time ago. A time traveler still has a system and can't change her mother's ending. Then you still write a hammer and read the fandom just for fun.