The Zhang Family's Cultivation of Immortality

I feel like there should be a golden finger. Even if it's not too big, at least I have something to look forward to! Otherwise, we won't have good efforts, good qualifications, or good resources! How much can it grow? Not to mention leading a family!

Is this a family? Where is the family? Do you only remember that you have a family when you need help?

This is my first time writing a book, so don't scold me if it's not good. I have read a lot of novels about immortals and family cultivators. I want to write a family story from my heart. If something is not written well, please give me some pointers.

Seeing this, let me tell you my opinion. So far, the protagonist has not contributed anything to the family. It can be said that he has always been for himself. Even if he doesn't use it, he won't give it to the family. For example, if he gets a high-level pill, his parents won't give him one. If he practices high-level skills, he can hand-copy a copy and hand it over to the family. If not, his parents will not tell him. His ancestors spent their whole lives to grow their family and did not have the opportunity to practice to the late stage of Golden elixir. The protagonist got the elixir left from the Nascent Soul stage. Should you give it to your father and ask him to give one to your ancestor? Regardless of whether it is useful or not, at least the ancestor knows that everyone is working hard for his family!

After looking at the first three pictures, I feel that they have a bit of that flavor, but in any case, the segmentation is relatively poor. I think too much about what I want to write. It's better to go step by step. It gives me a headache to output so much at once.

I feel that the protagonist should give the harvest from the cave to his family. No matter how powerful you are alone, how can you be as powerful as your family? A person has to make elixirs, grow herbs, raise spiritual beasts, practice, and practice swordsmanship.

It's so shameful, I started plagiarizing from ordinary people just by writing.

Raised to death

Such vulgar plagiarism, the work of a primary school student.

The biggest problem in the early stage is that the family conspiracy is taken as the main plot, and the protagonist is marginalized. The biggest test of family flow is the balance between the family and the protagonist.

I still hope that the author can widen the gap between the big realms and turn it into an insurmountable gap. The protagonist can be invincible in an equally big realm, but it is best not to cross the big realm. Only in this way can the difference between the big realms be highlighted.

After reading seventy or eighty chapters, it is basically a running account, and all kinds of unreasonable and inconsistent details can be seen everywhere.

So far, the protagonist has appeared as a supporting character, and the protagonist's appearance has not been reflected at all. It is not good, and it has not made a big contribution to the family. It is not a good family novel! !

When the affiliated family develops well, can you just find a reason to kill them?

This book has the potential to be brainless. The second-level demon bird egg is given to the younger brother of Wulinggen. He himself is unwilling to practice and lacks resources. Not only is it a serious waste but it is also a drag on him⊙⊙ It has only been fourteen chapters and it shows the brainless side. Wouldn't it be nice to give him a spirit bee? He can fight and earn resources~

If spiritual veins can migrate, big forces gather all spiritual veins together, is there any way for other small forces to survive? Then spiritual veins are generally earth veins. Why can they migrate? Spiritual stone mines. I remember reading in a novel that spiritual veins are equal to spiritual stone mines. Spiritual stones are the spiritual veins that are infected into spiritual stones. Otherwise, how did the spiritual stone mines come from? The used spiritual stones are thrown into the spiritual veins. After a few hundred years, they become spiritual stones again. This is sustainable development. Otherwise, mining will continue. Where would there be so many spiritual stones?

I would like to make a suggestion and strongly urge the author to design a portable planting space for the protagonist! ! Coupled with the fact that time can be accelerated in space, this book will definitely become popular! ! It will have the potential to become a god! I like your book very much! ! Be sure to use more space when writing about the protagonist! ! This book wouldn't be good without space! ! If I had the space, this book would be wonderful! ! ! Why don't some books become popular? There is just no room for planting! If the author can adopt my suggestions, it will definitely become popular! ! !

Haoyu Zhenxian is good-looking, the next book is Mortal

Congratulations on entering the palace🔪

Let's all disperse, the author is dead

No! Died before being raised?

I'll just look at what the author writes later. Is it not good for you to do level 1 Qi training, level 2 foundation building, and level 3 golden elixir after Nascent Soul? I really don't know what you think.

Why is there no update in March? Very well written

I recommend the Sword Swordsman from Station B about online article writing skills. It explains many practical skills in detail.

It sucks? Suddenly it stopped updating, at least explain the reason.

The relationship between the characters in the whole novel is too messy. They call each other out and write randomly. One time they are uncle, another time they are uncles, one time they are called uncles by their elder sister, and the next time they are called uncle Wen. It's so confusing. If you put the characters in the Qi training period, it won't be so chaotic. You can understand it at a glance. Your settings were not good at the beginning, which resulted in the later titles and relationships being in a mess. A family only has a few foundation-building periods, that is, the Zhang family, which has millions of people, only has a few official clan members. Is it reasonable?

Want a eunuch? If anything happens, please let the author know.

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It's over before I even start! Do you want to continue watching this? The eunuch's book is so disgusting