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How can I put it, the author's plot and setting are quite powerful, but the lack of description of the battle process and environment makes it look like a running account. The character creation is also greatly affected by the description in this aspect. For example, when the back row of the Paladin team was wiped out, how exactly did they die? What kind of reaction was not written at all? They just talk about the causes and consequences in a straightforward manner and then mention "being wiped out". For another example, when the Queen's Mercenary Corps abandoned those male back rows, there are only the causes and consequences. How those male back rows were abandoned and how they died are not mentioned at all. It is like a gust of wind blowing past, dull and without traces. It's as if they were abandoned in the army without any despair or sadness. This is not a weakness for reality, but a disregard for reality. The above are just the most prominent examples. We will also find this when we look at other main characters. Writing a novel cannot only consist of plot and setting. Detailed description and shaping are equally important, because emotions are often hidden in details, and one of the most indispensable things in written works is emotion, even for short stories. The current writing method of the author will greatly dilute the tension and shock of the plot, and will also make the characters in the novel pale and weak, making it difficult to be three-dimensional. It is difficult for such a novel to go far. All in all, I hope the author can work harder and practice strengthening the description methods of characters, environment, psychology, expressions, details, etc. As for the subsequent contrast and foil, etc., It depends on the actual situation. What middle school Chinese teachers teach is not useless, but don't give it all back to others. At least when it comes to writing novels.

The setting and plot are quite interesting, but the shortcoming is that the author's writing is not strong enough. Collect it

Nowadays, chasing investment is just like gambling.... The books written by great masters are all about eunuchs. I can only rely on my own book to recover blood. I can't be an eunuch for my 11,000 pursuit investment.

After reading Chapter 17, I really can't stand it anymore. The author is completely addicted to his own imagination. And it's getting less and less interesting. I can't say how I feel, anyway, it just feels like the more I look at it, the more I can't stand it anymore. The following chapters don't feel like reading a novel at all. The forced jokes are endless. The supporting characters are forced to reduce their intelligence, and the brain supplements them wirelessly. Not for me.

After reading nine chapters, I feel that the protagonist is very nervous, afraid that the player will die, afraid that the player will be scared, afraid of this, afraid of that, and if he is sure that he will not die, he should give him some crazy death missions. Don't be afraid of scaring people. Most of the people who play this kind of monster game like horror games. Life-style players will not enter this kind of dark style game. They should be as scary as possible to improve the gameplay. .

Why is no one talking about this book in the comment section? I'll give it a try first.

Is the comment area so quiet? I'm a little scared. Try poison first.

Let me give you a suggestion. I don't know why you want to create the two female characters Pika Bing and Shui Shui, but the current effect looks like these two selfish women are very annoying.

I don't know how you can handle the first 16 chapters, maybe it's my problem.

Character setting Name: Feng Ji crazy Gender: Male Character: Nervous, crazy from time to time Style: black hair with a few white hairs, blood-colored eyes Possession of the ancient god's relic: "Self-cultivation of a cultist" (useless, makes you closer to a cultist, erosion rate 90%, some spells are recorded on it) Future direction: cultist Skills: bewitchment, disguise, raving, sacrifice, sliding shovel

It feels a bit silly to see the protagonist using ancient coins given by the gods as currency for players. The game system is set by you. Even if the conditions are insufficient and you cannot cast coins yourself, you can just use the system to set a few stones as currency. If it is not enough, just set a few more. Unless this ancient currency has other functions in the future, it is really good.

The rulers of the old days still talked about morality and retreated. Otherwise, you should stay in the city and don't write the gist.

. . . I don't want to read anymore after reading Chapter 16. Are there many virtual reality games in real life? The protagonist summoned those players, but their reactions were mediocre. If there are many such games in reality, the protagonist's summoning game is really not that good. Isn't reality the only selling point of this type of otherworldly game? I don't know what happens next, but at the beginning, the protagonist, as a planner and the person who wants to lead the players, was madly criticized by the person named Oliver Twist when he called the players over. That Oliver Twist was really bad. I thought it was good when I wrote it before, but this Oliver Twist really persuaded them to quit. You can completely deduct your favorability, prohibit logging in or ban your account for a period of time, but you want to let such a person dance in front of you...

There is no big poisonous point in the plot, but there is no climax and no excitement There are many small poisonous points in the setting The level and strength are unclear, the western fantasy world is mixed with the evil elements, and the Chinese classical Chinese is neither earthy nor foreign,

MatthewWeird Mask - Dance of Shadows Sir, the dance is over... The Soul Reaper - Words of the Dead Soon... It won't hurt anymore... Each attack increases the speed\Each successful dodge of an enemy attack has a chance of killing the enemy instantly\The wearer will lose vision. A gray robe with dots of flame patterns all over it, and the gray color is like burned ashes... Weird personality, moody, no one knows what kind of person he is in the real world, maybe a mental patient or a mercenary. Excellent skills, good at playing with the enemy's line of sight, staying out of sight to deliver a fatal blow.

Seeing 150, I don't understand the meaning of Oliver Twist's existence. I deserve to be ostracized. I don't even have any AC points. The novel was originally good, so I added such a poisonous point to ruin the perception, and also provided all kinds of adventures and benefits. If such a character is treated as a biological son, will he kill all the protagonist's subordinates later, and even make a fool of the protagonist, and then the protagonist will ask for forgiveness from the Holy Mother.

I haven't read it yet, but your introduction is too unconfident. Readers' votes will not change because of the author's begging, but will only be based on the quality of the work.

Interested readers can post their desired character nicknames, preferences, looks, and even skills and background in the comment area. The top 100 authors will be given a cutscene if they see it. If the author likes it, he may be given a supporting role. Readers, please use your imagination!

Em... This book doesn't quite suit my taste. The Oliver Twist in it is really too annoying and I can't accept it.

Name: Alien's Road to Salvation (hereinafter referred to as Alien Road) Gender: Male Character: Furious, silent, twisted, serious, evil, orderly Characteristics: The body is embedded with a large number of eyes of different creatures, the eyes can automatically close or observe, and the palms have sharp-toothed mouths Clothes: Dressed as a cultist, Dress according to your heart Characteristics: Extremely keen observation, don't like irritable scenes, like to be alone Relics: The devil's last justice/kindness (necklace): The darker the heart, the person gains power from the completely lost human (sensibility). The smaller the light of humanity, the greater the strength in exchange. The longer it is used, the longer it takes to recover (there is a pure land in the heart of the devil) Side effects: Complete loss of justice and kindness Death/King's weapon backpack (backpack): A weapon that exists in historical theory (not necessarily the current universe) can be randomly selected from it. The probability of picking a suitable weapon is determined based on the user's fitness. The stronger the user, the better the weapon will be. The stronger the power Side effects: being affected by the will of the weapon (corrosion is constant at 50%) Skills: victim (increased resistance), the last moment (the closer to death, the harder it is to approach death), the final persistence (even if the body is riddled with holes, it will never stop until the will is lost)... You must have awareness to use it. Without awareness, it cannot be used. It is quite idealistic.

Name: Diverse Clown Gender: Male Character: Changeable, chaotic, extremely self-centered Characteristics: Always laughing, able to make manic laughter, too pale skin, red hair Clothing: Black or burgundy trench coat (because there is no suit) Characteristics: Telling jokes that are not funny at all, no one wants to team up with him, Fear of Allies Relic: False Reality (right glove): can cover the essence of reality with a layer of 'reality'. The affected person has difficulty discovering the inner reality in the 'reality', and only believes in his own 'reality' and rejects reality Side effects: memory confuses reality and 'reality', making it difficult to distinguish Infinite Bomb Control (left glove): consumes energy The objects touched can be transformed into bombs, and the skulls on the gloves can pop out and turn into tracking bombs Side effects: hand fetish, may not be able to control themselves to chop off the hands of beautiful girls The coat of a nightmare patient: can change color and deformation at will, and can temporarily turn into a monster that appears in nightmares, and the fighting ability is determined by mental strength Side effects: only nightmares accompany you, and you will be affected by nightmares Dream Monster Will Pollution Skills: Laughing Curse (can infect the curse of temporary madness), Abyss Advance (constant sanity), Hive Mind (uses the spirit to devour other people's personalities to split the corresponding personalities, and can use the personality to seize others), Blood Hymn (burns the personality as fuel, temporarily greatly increases the lower and upper limits of the spirit, and assumes the will and consciousness of other personalities)

As expected, you are very suitable for writing this kind of subject, group portraits, but maybe you can arrange a female protagonist, such as pointing at the black cat and saying that she will become a girl, or arrange a female character with personality in this world, or even a blue star girl. But hanging a black cat mascot will do. I feel that this book is quite boring. In theory, this book should be able to gain some popularity, and its quality in all aspects is adequate.

Come on, author, although I haven't seen the paid chapter yet, I think the writing is quite good. I'd like to give you a reward of 1,500 points to support it. But doesn't it say that I'll give you a monthly pass by giving a reward of 1,500 points? I wanted to submit it to the author by the way but it didn't show up.

Character setting Name: Puppet Master Gender: Male Character: Gentle, likes to manipulate puppets to perform murderous and bloody dances Body: Bald head, through the adjustment of muscles, it has strong explosive power. The fingers of both hands can extend ten meters of linear tissue that can be split. It is controlled by inserting it into the gap in the spine at the back of the head to proliferate the nerves. The silk thread is extremely thin and tough, and can cut hostile targets and cause damage. (Due to the high precision required for control, the sensitivity must not be lower than 94%) Holy Relic: Rating: 3 stars Name: "Biological Structure Identification Manual" Introduction: A book that records various biological structures, if stones are also counted..."Carrara" When using it, there is always a feeling of seeing through the opponent..."Hey hehe..." "He oh~" Erosion degree: 168%

Hello, hello, is the author still here?

The skeleton - gender male - is a skeleton with a metal skeleton. The vital signs are hidden in the skull. The bone joints are driven by gears. The skull is bonded to the spine, and the pelvis is bonded to the bone joints at the thigh joint. When walking, he often bounces around because he cannot walk. From time to time, he will pop up a few pieces of knowledge about the human body. He is a doctor. Ancient Relics: Twisted bones, a sixth finger growing on the palm - better driving bones, bone hyperplasia