Qingyun Fairy Record

It's pretty good to watch, but the story-telling ability is not strong. The scenes and characters jump around repeatedly within a chapter, and the characters that appear are many and complex, and they are not explained clearly. Very tired to watch.

It's so confusing. I feel tired when I look at it like this. I don't know what the focus is.

It's a little difficult to remember people's names just a few chapters in. I want to describe it in multiple lines, but it's not appropriate to have parallel lines at the beginning. Even a group portrait needs to be prioritized first, just like a tree needs to grow branches before branching. The frequent jumps are not suitable for the initial understanding and confusion of the character's memory.

How to switch between the two sides, which one is the heroine?

It's pretty good-looking, but what's the connection between the heroine Fu Yu and Mu Qingyun? They're not really separated sisters. →_→

Who is the protagonist? I really don't understand the beginning of this kind of description. Once you misidentify the protagonist, even in the first few chapters, and find out later that he is not the same, you will immediately stop reading. Some books must not include the protagonist first.

The writing is pretty good, better than most, but the story is really not that good. The author probably wanted to write a group portrait type? In fact, it is quite difficult to write. The biggest problem at the beginning of this article is "repeated jumps". Why do you feel this way? Because the transitions are disconnected and stiff, it makes people feel "messy" and the reading experience is not good. But this problem can be improved as the story unfolds. Moreover, the author has good writing skills, so you can still look forward to the author's growth.

I have to say, this is too jumpy and the connection is not good at all. It's the kind of sudden change of scenes that is inexplicable and gives me a headache.

There are so many messy clues that I'm tired of reading them.

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It's really confusing. I keep jumping around. I often write several chapters in one chapter, which makes me dizzy.

The primary and secondary lines are a bit messy at the front, but it improves at the back. It's worth a look.

I haven't read such a wonderful article in a long time! ! ! Big cheers for the author! ! !

I haven't read it yet. I just found this book. No matter what, it's good to keep writing.

You write this story frequently, and the person who writes it is not dizzy, and the person who reads it is dizzy.