The Wizard Supreme in Hogwarts

The most important thing is that the character is really unlikable, the dialogue description is too awkward, and the character's psychological portrayal is too deliberate. It always creates a look that I am an adult and disdain, but I also like to tease little girls.

The author added a lot of elements that are not Harry Potter and it feels weird.

I haven't read Harry Potter, so I'll just speak from the novel itself. The writing style is very smooth But the plot pace is a bit slow. Because I have read a lot of foreign novels in the past, the tone of this book feels somewhere between Chinese and foreign, but the dialogue between the characters seems to be a bit lacking. (personal opinion)

Ah, how should I put it? You really need to practice your writing. Some of the words and sentences were quite embarrassing to me, so I was immediately told to quit.

When it comes to religion, I have no desire to read anymore.

All HP fan protagonists will meet the heroine on the train before school starts

I would like to ask if the author is writing about the Sorcerer Supreme from Marvel? Personally, I think that's better!

It's too late to refuel. Now, I can't hold on anymore, go to sleep! Chase investment tomorrow

It feels like the author is laying a big hole, even religious laws have come out 🤫🤫🤫🤫🤫🤫

As far as the novel is concerned, I think it's pretty good. However, the setting feels a little inappropriate. Maybe it's because Hogwarts itself is a novel for young children, so it's not easy to write. The writing is great, but sometimes the language may have some awkward spots, so please work hard.

I don't dare to say anything if I haven't read Harry Potter T_T... Judging from the author's writing style alone, it is very good. What you need to pay attention to is to guard against tricks.

Very interesting work! Collected! Take your time and watch! Come on update! Welcome to visit us again!

The writing and narration are above the standard, and the writing is meticulous. It can be seen that the author is very careful. Although there are still some places where it is not sophisticated and natural enough, the flaws are not hidden. The real problem is that there is a lack of conflict in the opening chapter and even the whole text design, which is too bland and unattractive. Compare the original work, because I have only seen the movie, so I will take the movie as an example. In the beginning, Harry's background, two suspenses - will Voldemort take revenge? What talent does Harry have? Then there is the dilemma of the family, which makes people worry about whether they can escape, the supernatural events in the zoo, which makes people curious, and so on. For another example, if I were to write a Harry fanfic, I might write a story about a scumbag male protagonist who deceives Harry about his feelings and is then hunted down by Voldemort, his father, and Harry who traveled from other world lines - it would all be more interesting. Or the story of a madman boldly using magic to increase productivity, fighting against the conservative magic alliance and real world forces, and creating a new era where the people are the masters of the country (ಡωಡ) Above.

Holy Mother of Nc, it makes me sick to see it

Who is the heroine

Who is the heroine? (Hermione)

Two updates a day are very stable 🤫

Good writing, keep it up, author, cheers

The protagonist's strength has been severely suppressed by the author. He obviously has the ability to defeat Voldemort, but the author deliberately let go of the protagonist's enemies many times in order to save Harry Potter. Anyone with a discerning eye can see it at a glance.

Can the author have time to finish this book? I really like it. Even if the writing is not good, it's okay. I just really like the plot. Or is there anyone who can help me to complete it according to the outline? It's such a pity. It's rare to meet the type of HP I like. Alas

Why is your professor of Ancient Magic Literature also a Babuling, and so is a certain magical Hogwarts? Has the author seen it?

I envy the big ideas and brainstorming 🙂

A pretty good HP fanfic, with a lot of ideas of its own, unlike most HP fanfics that come and go with just a few plots

In fact, the writing is pretty good, at least above the standard.

Come on, author! I still like this story, it's quite novel. While watching it, I also found the explanation of magic quite interesting. It's not easy to write a book for the first time, come on!

I really like the author's writing style. I hope I can regain the confidence and inspiration to complete this work. I will finish it in a place where I am looking forward to the follow-up (crying)

What setting, garbage 10 years old can dry wool?