The Story of Immortal Cultivation in the Far Mountains

Well, the author has some time to read the beginning. How should I put it? It's not that the plot is not well written, but that the writing style does seem immature. The tone of voice of the characters and the description of their expressions and movements are really embarrassing to watch (quietly ask how old is the author?)

A clown writes a book and does it in front of him! I'll make myself vomit after watching it~

The author writes well, writes carefully, and completes the book. Finishing the book shows that you have credibility and the next one will be better.