The Heaven-Defying Gun God System

This book is pretty good (≧∇≦*), the lots of data are really satisfying, I quite like this kind of thing.

The "running account" style of bookkeeping feels a bit dry.

The plot moves too fast; it feels more like an outline than a novel. Writing only the ending without detailing the process is too rushed. Your 200,000-word novel could easily reach a million words if you didn't pad it out. There's very little dialogue, almost none. There's no mention of dates, weather, characters' tone of voice, or character descriptions, let alone scene descriptions. Other people's novels are a world, your novel is a diary. You only wrote an outline, not a detailed one.

My god, I've read eight chapters, and it's just the same thing: killing a few zombies, getting a few points, exchanging for a few items, then killing a few more zombies. There's no plot, no dialogue at all.

I always mishear the main character's name as "Teddy." Also, I suspect you're writing a diary.

Actually, it's not badly written, and the initial concept was quite good. Starting with a single-player mode is fine, but overall there's no main plot; it's just about leveling up, exploiting players in different worlds, and leveling up. I couldn't continue reading after entering the game; I have no expectations for the plot. It's just about exploiting players and leveling up.

In this single-player game, the NPCs are basically zombies, constantly entertaining themselves. They'll probably be invincible in less than ten chapters. The premise was good, but the writing is terrible.

It's a bit unconventional, with not much unnecessary chatter. The first three dungeons were probably for building up the story. Hopefully, the main plot will be described in more detail later on.

I thought it would be a typical modern system-based game, but it turns out it's already running three different versions of the system 😅. It's great in every way, keep it up!

Congratulations to the author for hitting the bullseye with a single shot, instantly captivating countless readers and becoming a lone wolf.