Konoha's Orochimaru Successor

Don't be systematic, just follow the path of a scientist and a master of learning. Don't take too big steps and get yourself into trouble🙂

If you are creative and become Orochimaru's disciple, when will you enter Ryūchi Cave🕳️

The more I write about it, the more outrageous it becomes. Good Naruto is written as a harem novel, Terumi Mei, Hayakura, Samui, Konan, etc. Are there really that many people who like harem novels?

First of all, I just started reading this novel. I am full of novelty and expectations. Although I haven't caught up with the latest yet, I have also seen the middle stage of the Kingdom of Water... It has been poisoned At the beginning, the protagonist did not know that the plot was slowly growing. It is normal to have no sense of urgency, and the conflict and response to the murder were also very good. I just thought that the protagonist, as a character not found in the original novel, would cause a series of butterfly effects, which would make some characters The color successfully rewrote fate (Lin). I can accept it as a plot revision, but it feels that it is quite obvious in order to not deviate from the direction of the original work in the follow-up. After all, the main line does not collapse... But! After arriving in the Kingdom of Water, he completely changed into a different person Not to mention the emotional drama, it was completely a stallion novel. Many plots were completely inconsistent with the character set up before, as if he was a different person. There were too many plots of doing YY for the sake of doing it. In the Kingdom of Water, when the protagonist repels the Raikage Village, he can be Mizukage is trying to win people's hearts later on, but I don't quite understand why there is a lot of intrigue. After all, the original novel Terumi Mei also directly found out that the manipulated Mizukage was beaten to the ground and immediately took over... I will continue to watch it in the future, hoping to get back to the early stage that I originally expected, sorry! Come on, author🥺

I will also share my own opinions 1. First of all, it is best not to suddenly become stronger in terms of the protagonist's strength. If he does become stronger, it is best to explain how he became stronger, such as practicing the immortal mode. 2. In terms of plot, don't jump too fast at the end, otherwise it will be boring if you go to the Fourth Ninja World War all at once, or if it ends quickly and no one has seen enough, it will be boring. The best thing is to write some branch plots surrounding the original work, such as the original story of protecting the 12 ninjas, Dragon Vein and other plots. 3. Although the protagonist has traveled through time, he is still a human being. As a human being, you should have goals. Therefore, the protagonist's goal should be stated, such as setting a goal to survive until the finale, or becoming the strongest ninja world, etc. 4. When the protagonist does something, he should check whether it will benefit his own goals or himself. If not, please don't do it blindly. 5. Although the plot is said to follow the original work, appropriate changes can also be made. For example, some regrettable things in the original work can be changed, such as preventing Jiraiya from going to the Land of Rain to investigate or saving him, or saving Shisui who had his eye stolen by Danzo. 6. As for the female protagonist, it is best to have a single female protagonist or no female protagonist. It's best not to write about two or more female protagonists. In the future, this kind of book will have a harem, and the book will definitely be scrapped. That's all I want to say. If the author can see it, you can refer to it. Although I have never written a novel, I have read a lot of Naruto stories. I have only read a few dozen chapters, and overall it is quite good. This is just my personal advice. If the author thinks it is advisable, you can refer to it. Finally, I wish the author this book will continue to be popular and not be a eunuch.

As an old bookworm, I haven't seen any obvious poisonous points so far. The author is a new author who likes to interact with comments in this chapter. If you look at it as a new work by a new author, it can even be said to be a high-quality work. Where is the advantage? First of all, in terms of plot, the title of the book is not actually written until Chapter 47, which shows that it is relatively slow to develop. And the protagonist is different from the common routine. He is an ordinary person who is not familiar with the plot and will feel uncomfortable after killing someone for the first time. And this ordinary person is getting stronger step by step through the author's careful conception. At least before the fifty chapters I saw, the author was careful. And the most important point is that the author should change the plot. It is a good fandom to not follow the original work. I have had enough of works like knowing the plot and being so grateful that I just sit back and watch the death of the fourth generation couple! Some people say that it will be bad if the writing fails, but you should not stop eating because of choking. Good works require the courage to innovate. Secondly, in terms of writing style, I can give it a passing mark or a good one for me, who is crazy about looking for books among young fans at Qidian. Of course, there are still gaps and flaws compared with the great masters, but there are no major mistakes in the writing and sentence fragmentation, and the author's grammatical ability is still acceptable. However, I still want to talk about the shortcomings. One is that although the writing style mentioned above is above the passing mark, there are occasionally one or two extremely "childish" descriptions. This can probably be avoided if you write more. In addition, the description of female characters is relatively poor. The heroines Kurenai, Tsunade, Lin, and Anko, who just appeared, are all described in the same style and look like the same person, without highlighting the character's personality. I see some people say that there are harem stories in the back. I personally like to read harem stories, but if it is a harem on the surface but has no connotation, it is really poisonous. This is my first long review of a book in so many years, because I think as a newcomer, I read this book well. However, there are few reviews and this chapter says that there are often stupid and stupid things in it. I am also very angry, so I write down my thoughts to give everyone a reference. Don't be paced by some people. After all, it is not easy for a newcomer to read this book. Of course, the last thing I want to mention is that I can't guarantee that I can continue to follow it, because I have experienced too many books that are good at the beginning and terrible at the end, but at least the first fifty chapters are of a good level. I hope that I can continue to see excellent articles, and that there will be another good author in the fandom! Above

As we all know, who becomes the fourth generation is a matter of just one sentence from the third generation! ! Of course not everyone can do it, you also have to have a certain amount of strength and be recognized by everyone! If it were purely fair competition, young Minato really wouldn't be enough to beat Orochimaru!

Why did you start a harem out of nowhere?

To be honest, I miss the legend of the eight colors of Konoha that a bunch of fan authors used to generate electricity with love😓. The later version of Naruto is not interesting at all.

It feels a bit like keeping a running account. The writing is not good.

How to put it, it's quite satisfactory, nothing outstanding or uncomfortable. If I had read this book six or seven years ago, I would probably have read it in one sitting, but now I really can't bring myself to read it. . Being an old bookworm is really sad. . 😒

Emmm, the author's writing is great, it's very interesting Okay, the above are my thoughts before reading Betrayal of Konoha. After Betrayal of Konoha, I really can't see what is written. It's uncomfortable to read and I don't know why. It's not very poisonous, but I think the back part is not good. I am not a divine farmer. The above is just my personal opinion, please don't disturb me!

By the way, why does the protagonist feel that his IQ is so low?

Not bad, not bad, just don't have a system, take your time, don't reach the sky in one step, everything will be bitter first and then sweet. Only practice step by step👣 is worth seeing. People who have a system will give credit to the system, not their own efforts, even if their practice 24 hours a day seems trivial.

To be honest, this book is too thick and too old. Uchiha Madara and Kaguya's strong character are not reflected. The complete body of Susanoo, the special pupil technique of the Rinnegan, the ninjutsu of the Blood Successor is ineffective, and the ninjutsu of time and space of the Qiu Dao Jade is reflected. Besides, the protagonist, first of all, is the will. I can't see that the protagonist has the will to become stronger, and I can't see that the protagonist has the frame of a strong man. Moreover, the protagonist's combat power is not enough to suppress the ninja world. There is no change in the next hundred or so chapters. At most, it is at the peak of the shadow level. It has not even reached the super shadow. It has not truly transformed the knowledge of Snake Spirit technology into power. It has not used the power of new knowledge to transform to stand alongside or even surpass the Six Paths level and the Blood Successor Snare. No matter how thick it is, it is meaningless. The Bloodstained Snare is compared to the Great Emperor of Heaven. The combat power of Snake Spirit Technology has not yet been developed. At most, no matter how many quasi-emperors there are in the early stage, it will not be qualified. In short, it is too thick, and there is no way to achieve the six paths of the key today.

The further you get to the back the more outrageous it becomes, I can't stand it anymore

What a shame of time travel, garbage and trash protagonist

It's so good, it ranks among the top three Naruto fics I've read.

The writing is quite poor, from basic punctuation errors to inexplicable titles that force people into drama. The most deadly story and character design are quite poor. I saw an old man saying it was very good, but it seems I have read too few novels.

The protagonist's dark nature is revealed later on.

What started as a joyful novel has become increasingly darker. Let's go.

Does this writer dare to write books and make money? It's so easy to make money now

This book is pretty good, but the ending is a bit off.