Douluo Dalu: The Demon Lord

Support, the heroine must be added, otherwise it will be too boring. The heroine must be Zhu Zhuqing. Let Dai Mubai die! He is not worthy of Zhu Zhuqing

Write a fanfic. If you don't split the cp and still call it a fanfic, make one.

Well, Shrek's character design is basically fixed. Can you change the heroine? I'll write a passerby who is in the original novel. …

Make a heroine, a single heroine would be great, or make an accident with Zhu Zhuqing, I feel she is the most pitiful, not having a heroine would be bad, right?

I couldn't stand it after reading hundreds of chapters, so I summarized these poisonous points.

Brothers, please quit! I'm not saying this book is indeed poisonous. The protagonist must be a dog if he wants to be alone. I was quite speechless about having to lick Tang San. In addition, I suddenly felt that the three views of the protagonist in this book were not very correct. It's almost the same as Tang San in the original work, and it's also very double-standard.

This book is actually the author forcibly adding a person of his own imagination to the original work, and it remains almost unchanged. A person who can threaten Titled Douluo is still there to maintain the original plot. I saw the story about eating fairy grass and felt that the author's writing was very strange.

A lot of people are poisoned. I said it was not a good thing about Wuhun Palace and Tang San, but some of them ran to Shrek and said they looked down on the master, but they still ran to lick them. 😤😤

After reading more than twenty chapters, the pace is too fast. In order to be a dog for the protagonist group, the Soul Saint level body can't even carry 250 kilograms. After a while, I said that I need to be low-key. How low-key is it to the sky? Is taking the initiative to cause trouble also called not causing trouble?

What a running account. Who did what, who wanted to do what. After one chapter, the protagonist develops (some) new skills, the heroine (strength/combat experience) grows, Shrek wins (the game), and then the next chapter continues. I burst into tears... The description, characterization, and storytelling are there, but they are insufficient, very insufficient. This is what is commonly referred to as writing style. (But I still read it because it's free) Action description is a very useful thing, you can try to add more. Example: Xiao Wu pulled Tang San away. [As usual, Xiao Wu only had eyes for her third brother. She skillfully wrapped around Tang San's arm and pulled him forward. Tang San originally wanted to say hello to Zhou Ming, but without checking, he was staggered. He had no choice but to wave his hand to say goodbye. ] This example may not be very good, because the author's main description should be on the protagonist Zhou Ming. It may be out of this consideration that he took away one thing in just one sentence. However, this also has a negative impact, that is, it will make the supporting character eclipse, and it will be over once the action is completed, and it will not let the reader feel that the character is a person. Especially when the protagonist is a cold and ruthless character, the supporting character will be eclipsed, which will have a devastating impact on the interest of the article. Fortunately, there is an original work, so everyone knows more or less what the supporting characters are like. The breath of life is not enough. This is a pity, as the description skills still need to be improved. Although readers mostly assume the role of the protagonist, the interaction in the spiritual world does not really need to be clearly expressed (name the cat). Meow asked if he could add some details when dinner was ready. Luo Xin'er replied that he could add details if he hadn't yet. The protagonist who was watching from the side could also add details. Where? Why not add details?