Ten Rings World

This is the first new book, and it must have a lot of bad points, but the only good thing is that the original is not plagiarized, and it is okay to collect it naked every day. Of course, it is very good for a newcomer like me, and it is also the reason for me to keep writing. There must be progress every day. If there is anything wrong with the writing, please leave a message. I will adopt it if it makes sense and try not to appear in future chapters. Thank you, my friends.

It can be regarded as creating a new cultivation system. However, a new system is not so easy for people to understand. In addition, it has always been a rookie pecking each other. It is not satisfying. I feel that this system is wasted.

The setting is good, but the Goblin Ripper card has no sense of immersion at all. In my impression, it seems to be an advanced wood-sliding robot in the ordinary World of Warcraft PVP map. It looks heavy and slow. I don't know what other people are like. It's hard for me to feel immersed in it.

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Even the introduction has a typo: "Have you passed the extreme enhancement qualification?"

Come on! If the book can be completed, the foundation of the author will be established!

Come on

Come on

Come on, the author, the original system is very good, but it is a bit incoherent, and there are many missing words or typos in some places, such as Chapter 45 "Let's continue chasing and definitely let Chi You run away" 🤭

To be honest, as soon as I saw the name of the protagonist, I had no idea of ​​clicking in to read it. When readers read a book, they usually put themselves into the role of the protagonist to immerse themselves in the story. However, if the protagonist's name is too weird, this sense of substitution will be greatly reduced. After all, no one wants their name to be Xiao Ming, Xiao Ji, etc.

The creativity is pretty good. But writing still needs practice. Many of the dialogues between plot characters do not feel very coherent, and the plot arrangements are rather abrupt. Like the centipede, the appearance of the spider has no foreshadowing at all, and then the blackening of Dongfang Ling is a bit inexplicable. There is no psychological description at all, and it suddenly turns dark.

The writing is quite good, but it feels like the order of the world view is completely lost. It makes people wonder why the society where you kill me and I kill you hasn't collapsed yet.

The author wrote well, but he didn't explain the world system clearly at the beginning, and it seemed to have a vague feeling.

Are spiritual tablets useless? Isn't there any improvement to the body? Can you only improve your body by defeating your inner demons?

The writing is still good, better than most of the ones in the starting point. Why are there so few comments on this article?

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What's the use of that first-level spirit card? I haven't used it since reaching the second level, and I won't upgrade it.

Isn't there a full-source level extreme cultivation in front of you? It means that each of the 4 basic characteristics of the characteristics is fully cultivated, and the maximum is 4. How come there is no such thing?

How should I put it? The transition in some places is too abrupt.

Since there is no guarantee of updates, why bother writing a book?

It's so good that the author who did it can't stop writing.

It seems that this month is quite busy, and the 1,500 full attendance is gone. Then save more manuscripts and publish less this month, and try to get the last perfect attendance next month. Does the author still plan to write after the 3-month full attendance period?

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Come on, watch silently. 🙂