Hogwarts: the Mightiest Wizard

Mess and nonsense. Dumbledore, who is possessed by three generations, and the Presbyterian Church behind the truth of the world, have the feeling of being a fairy tale novel and the supreme elders of various sects. Brother, the charm of the magical world is fantasy and imagination, not conspiracy theories. You are just a young and poor man wearing HP skin. What the hell? Also, please check your background carefully. Don't just follow Wikipedia and find out what happened to Luna's mother. Charlie graduated in 1989. Why, you want to check the encyclopedia, but if you don't want to, just write nonsense, right? When you write fan fiction, you should respect the basic settings of the original work, and you can also use the elf army. You know that more than 100 Hogwarts are the result of years of breeding. You think you are a cabbage. There is also Damocles, the inventor of the Wolfsbane potion, who has a fart relationship with Flint. His surname is Belby, how can he be a member of the Flint family? All kinds of nonsense, I have accepted it.

As a time-traveler, has the protagonist experienced college life before time-traveling? You can severely report those Death Eater families, and then study magic alone from the age of 2 to 9. After entering Hogwarts, you suddenly long for friendship, and feel that the friendship at Hogwarts will last a lifetime. Curious? Is the protagonist mentally mature? This looks very frustrating, let me sort it out. The protagonist is the current patriarch of Black's clan. Both his parents died. He inherited the legacy of the richest man (very rich), and no one in the clan can compete with you (because Black is the only protagonist). As a time traveler, there is a strongest wizard system. Seeing this, I thought that the protagonist can become the third generation Dark Lord. Even if you don't study black magic, you can be comparable to Dumbledore in the future. As a result, the protagonist is far inferior to the young Tom Riddle (who entered Slytherin as a Muggle wizard at that time, much worse than the protagonist, at least the protagonist is not short of money). The protagonist is a very rich and systematic time traveler (currently he has a group of not weak alchemists), but his behavior and habits are similar to those of ordinary natives. I need friendship, otherwise he will be lonely, and he has been isolated from the public. I have read many fan fictions about Slytherin for a period of time, and I felt uncomfortable in the early stages of this book. Friends, if you are a young man in your twenties and have been living in the wizarding world for almost ten years, and you have entered school and been isolated by a group of teenagers, what would you think and do?

"We have power, we fight alone, we love the dark arts, we are Azkaban"

There is something wrong with the logic. It can be said that the performance in admission is completely inconsistent with the previous one. In order to improve his isolation situation, he is crazy about adding points to his own college? ? ? To be honest, when I was 2 years old, I could think of someone who could relieve the pressure on my assets by reporting it. A person who stayed in an ancient house until he was 11 years old could not stand the loneliness when he got to school. It is outrageous. Do you play with others every day between the ages of 2 and 9? No, according to the book, he is studying magic by himself. Then why would such a person behave so unwisely after entering school?

If you write a tile, it will be tiled when you get to the branch It is normal for authors to have their own preferences when writing novels, but if a novel has a lot of subjective colors, it will be ruined, because there will be big problems with the logic I haven't said anything about family property before, but when talking about allies, They actually chose Weasley and Longbottom. This is really cool. In my opinion, the Malfoy family values family ties, has a rich family fortune, and is very close to each other. They have the same enemies and the same difficulties, and they are sympathizers with each other. They are far more reliable than the Weasley family. After all, why did Malfoy annex Black? Malfoy is not short of money, and has a bad reputation. On the contrary, Weasley needs the heritage of the Black family more to complete the family's revival. It is nonsense to exclude Malfoy and choose Weasley. Longbottom is even more nonsense. The protagonist's family has tortured the wife of the current head of the family crazy, can he still be considered? When it comes to the branch, the lack of applause is even more problematic. With the cultivation of the Slytherin nobles, even if this person is the person who killed his father, these people will not lose their dignity. This is the noble, otherwise the inheritance will be broken long ago. Do you know how writing this makes Lao Deng feel? The Slytherin force is finished. They are divided due to internal cowardice and can be squeezed a little harder. So at this time, Slytherin does not join the team for warmth, but still engages in this kind of plot. It is simply treating the Slytherins as fools The first 10 chapters set the tone, and there should not be these problems.

They say your butt determines your head. Since he is the head of the Black family, why would he want to be friends with the Longbottoms and Weasleys while alienating the Malfoys? This doesn't make sense no matter how you think about it. Longbottom and Weasley were originally frustrated in the wizarding world, so they supported Dumbledore's views and opposed the political ideology of pure-blood supremacy. On the other hand, the protagonist is a beneficiary of the idea of ​​pure blood supremacy, but he is doing things like eating his own food and ruining his own fortune. I have lived for more than 20 years and have never met a person like this in society. Even if it is a novel, it must follow the minimum logical thinking, otherwise the reader will feel uncomfortable.

Is this a magical world or a tadpole looking for its mother? A time traveler who is now powerful, is still afraid of being alone, afraid of being ostracized by his classmates, and longs to be friends with little kids? ? ? The troll must have sucked your brain dry.

I originally thought the setting was pretty good, but I was shocked by the setting of a time-traveling adult protagonist that requires the friendship of an 11-year-old child.

A strange novel, suspected of being a self-pleasure novel. Let's not talk about anything else. As mentioned before, the system draws three cards and then draws one card. The comments have been pointed out for you but they have not been changed. The second one is the transfiguration bug. I found it out by changing into a sniffer on the train. This is already poisonous enough. Then there is a list of magical creatures that cannot be transformed. Do you know it or not? You didn't copy and paste it from someone else's book, did you?

The author should consider going to an elementary school for a few years to see if you can play with a group of brats. An adult's desire to be friends with a group of elementary school students is really poisonous. A time traveler with no ambitions leads a system and ends up living like a elementary school student. It's poisonous.

I just want to ask, who is the heroine?

What a pity. Can you imagine how it would feel for a protagonist who has a powerful golden finger, is at least 30 years old in his heart, and can plan to save his family fortune at the age of 3, and after entering school at the age of 11, trying every means to please his classmates who isolate him? What do you want to please? The weak will always automatically surround the strong. Do the followers of Voldemort and Dumbledore follow them because they can please the people around them? It's because they are strong! Upon entering this school, the protagonist's IQ and EQ are only 11 years old, and he is not as sophisticated as previously described.

If there is no big problem, let's write the heroine Hermione. One is that the heroine Hermione really attracts readers. You seem to have a group of people in the bb who don't want Hermione. If you want to read it, you will not read it. But if you do a survey, you will know that the heroine Hermione is absolutely mainstream. Original heroine To be honest, I feel that the author is a little bit out of control. I will consider an original heroine for the next book. This one uses Hermione to practice.

Which brother is waiting for the heroine to be confirmed to kick me?

The poison has been tested, the building is unfinished, and the ending is very poisonous.

The setting of the Council of Elders is stupid. How could the insect-like pure blood in the original work be so powerful?

What's so lonely about being with a bunch of kids who are destined to be misfits? This gentleman is doing it for nothing. Live your life and care about what others think. They are just a group of family darlings who are naturally different from each other in terms of status. There is nothing lonely about it.

Aren't the Black families all named after stars? This has changed since the third child

He has written 5 books and is still a LV2 author. How can you expect him to write well? Looking at the comment area, sure enough ╮（╯＿╰）╭

It sucks, brothers. The further you go, the worse it gets.

Haha

How can adults make friends with children? 😅 The generation gap is simply unbridgeable. It feels very strange.

In the first few chapters, the protagonist arranged a lot of operations, and then flashed through the past nine years. The protagonist was eleven years old and it was time to go to school. So is he the master at the age of two?

Seriously, stop writing. You've written five books and it's still level two. If you have money, you can order one from a studio. If you want to make money, you're more suitable to join a factory. Writing books depends on talent.

The protagonist has been completely controlled by the system, and his life is really pitiful. If he wants to be strong, he can just practice magic spells and study more, but he is raised like a dog by the system. If there is a bone hanging in front of him, the protagonist will run forward in pain. Obviously the protagonist owns this bone. Knowledge and wisdom are what make the protagonist stronger, not other random things. The system is so damn poisonous. He completely treats the protagonist like a beast.

I suggest a sequel, the ending is too sad

Human potential is unlimited, but the system limits human potential and can only allow the protagonist to act under the rules of the system. The system is mostly a modern method used by the devil to seduce souls into corruption. It just turns the devil's contract into a system binding.

It's pretty bad, I watched it on Baidu. You've written all the damn stuff, it's so messed up, and yet you're still writing a crappy novel, hurry up and find a class.

It's well written. Keep up the good work, author. Just write according to your own ideas. Just don't make it a mess or a eunuch.

Poison penetration