Tianya Bingxin

Very interesting book! Standard romantic comedy feel. It seems to be in the form of a light novel, with elements of immortality added, without being radical or slow. Very nice. The author's writing skills are also not good. The foreshadowing at the beginning is very interesting, including the settings of various protagonists, which is very interesting, detailed but not delicate, fresh and refined. If you can survive over 500,000, you should be in the top 10 of the list. Disadvantages, very few flaws. I like it very much. Received and invested. Fixed scoring link. 8.9 A certain pen is left

The writing is quite good, and the details are well grasped. The subject matter is relatively new, and you will unconsciously follow the author's thinking. However, I still feel that the writing is a bit hasty in some places, as if the previous chapters have described ups and downs, but suddenly fell into dullness. Compared with the previous description, it is a bit bland, but the book is indeed not bad. I hope the author will become a god soon. Come on! ! Already collected! When you have time, take a look at my article "My System Might Be a Fake System". Thank you very much.

After reading the first chapter, it was good, the second chapter... Was okay, and the third chapter... Became ordinary. Why? The teasing methods between the two are too static. I feel like I've seen this kind of routine too much... Of course, it's really powerful to be able to combine easy love with cultivating immortality. I should take good care of it in the future to create good plots. Secondly, the writing style is actually not very good, but it is enough for those who are relaxed about cultivating immortals. There are no requirements. Of course, it would be best if the author could learn more about the writing style of great masters. Finally, there is the issue of the plot. As a light-hearted novel, the logic of the plot is still needed, but after reading these chapters, I have many questions, such as why the senior sister likes or has a crush on the male protagonist? Or it may be because of childhood sweethearts, but there is a saying that childhood sweethearts are no match for the sky, which means that the feelings of childhood sweethearts are not strong enough to last for a long time and need to be paid attention to. Secondly, why did the male protagonist agree to double cultivation just by recalling the past? Then why have you been reluctant before? The writing here is very vague, you can try to figure it out a little more. The rest is very good, it is easy to attract readers, come on.

I read the beginning of three chapters, skipped through the middle chapters, and the last chapter. The writing is not a big problem, and the emotional setting is also good. However, I think it is love when it is love, and I really don't want to abuse the readers too much. The problem is not a problem. Except for the beginning, the overall feeling is quite routine. It would be better if the follow-up feeling is a little different.

The mood changes were a bit sudden in some places. For example, the third senior sister's eyes became complicated and she immediately turned into a wicked smile. Although I have only read one chapter, the writing style is very good. Keep going. The overall feeling is very comfortable and interesting.

The book will be first published at 2pm on Sunday. This should be the first test this book faces. Welcome all tickets, investments and collections. After reading this book, you will be a great encouragement to the author. This time is related to the future of this book, I hope you can help me. Thanks.

"Tian Ya Bing Xin" has been signed. Two updates per day, at 10 a. M. And 4 p. M. You can say anything you want to say. In the new book period, seedlings need care. (Hurry and use your votes and investments to knock me out) The author is still a newbie, please give me some advice.

Yes, overall, it is more attractive and not toxic. As long as it is stable enough, it is not difficult to become a good book.

Ahem. Well, I found that the author writes in the relaxed category. Maybe my personal feeling may be a bit biased. I hope the author can take a look at this little suggestion. Is the introduction a little unattractive? Personally, I think, well, I feel like I want to go in without even watching it. All in all, it just doesn't feel attractive enough. This is the author's first book, so the introduction is very important. I'm not sure how other people find books, but I personally attach great importance to introductions. Or even read a book just for the introduction. In addition, the student party is said to be poor, with no money and no votes. 😌 can only support silently.

The author writes very well and has a great sense of humor. But the author, dual cultivation, dual cultivation, is it progressing so fast? Is the speed so high? Sorry I can't get on the bus! My goal of not having a female protagonist will not waver for ten thousand years! Come on! ! !

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After looking at it, it's still pretty good! Come on! Rush!

I have read the latest chapter. Overall it is good, but the description of the relationship between the two senior sisters is a bit confusing (maybe it is my problem)

Don't wait to update! One update a day is fine. The story has a beginning, but there must be an ending!

Congratulations on signing the contract, and I hope the author will continue to work hard.

Changing the title of the book to "The Story My Wife and I Have to Tell" will definitely become a hit. Believe me, author, you can do it! Come on! ! !

The writing is good. Would you like to support each other by giving a big reward? Come on

Okay, the combination between dirty and pure is very appropriate. This book, to be honest, is the first short story that attracted me to read. It has been put on the bookshelf. Let's work together and let's go together.

There is a story, good, like it!

The love theme setting is novel and gives people an eye-catching feeling, which is a big boost. Encourage each other✊

So far, there is no obvious poisonous point, except that "Ni Hao Sa" has appeared several times. Is this dialect slang from somewhere? It's weird to read. In short, I have collected investment recommendations, please keep going!

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~

Update soon, the blade is ready

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~

Hurry up and update, it will be more than seven days, I don't want the investment to fail, the author, please give me a boost😱

So disappointed, why is this...