Summit of the Rift

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I don't know why this book is so exciting. The more I read, the more I want to gain weight. I'm not looking forward to following up on the book anymore. Because it seems that the author is also troubled and aware of the problem, but can't find a way to think about it recently, so I will tell you my opinion. This is mainly to help the author realize the problem, not to be a condescending writing guide. First of all, I have read the previous book, and I personally think it is better written. Probably the most exciting LOL article I have ever read. It's definitely not good to compare with other authors' books, so I'll use the author's own two books for comparison. In contrast, this book actually has a lot less poisonous points than the previous book, and has corrected many of the flaws that appeared in the previous book. But again, it is not as attractive as the previous book. At least I didn't get tired of following the last book chapter by chapter, but I lost the energy to follow this book as I read it. The reason is that I think character creation is a very important factor. On the one hand, the protagonist is not charming enough. The protagonist of the last book has a very charming personality. Not only the fans of the book like him, but we readers also like him. The main character of this book is not that charming. The author can only repeatedly use the word "calm" as a joke to ridicule the protagonist. In contrast, the protagonist of the previous book has more characteristics, the absolute pursuit of victory, the seriousness of the game, the humble character shown to the outside world, and the occasional flirtatious words... The author has created a very perfect character. Even readers outside the book will have a sense of admiration for this non-existent virtual character. (This can be seen in the labels of the protagonists in the two books. Almost every label of the protagonist in the previous book is different, representing different characteristics. Most of the labels of the protagonist in this book are filled in around the word "steady". This shows that readers have no other impressions of the protagonist.) Making readers like the protagonist is the greatest success of the work. Even if it occasionally writes some daily plot details, readers can still enjoy it. Because, it's the same boring thing. If you watch a stranger doing it, you will find it very boring. If you watch your own male god or goddess doing it, you will find it interesting even if you watch it 24 hours a day. So, as long as the protagonist is well shaped. Even if you occasionally write about insignificant daily life, readers will feel as if they have seen the other side of their own heroes and goddesses in their daily lives, which is very interesting and novel. If the reader is not that interested in the protagonist, he or she will not bother to read his daily life. It's very simple. I don't know if it's because there is a huge personality charm gap between the protagonists of the two books in reality. All in all, the protagonist of the previous book was made more charming. In fact, I hope that the author will not shape the protagonist based on the real prototype. If the prototype is not suave enough or charming enough, the author must learn to add admirable features to the protagonist. On the other hand, the supporting characters are too thin. The previous book actually entered the main line of e-sports very slowly. In the early stage, the protagonist has been practicing and getting to know his teammates. But looking back now, you will find that it was necessary. Because the author used a lot of space to create a relatively full supporting character. Even though it has been a long time, we still have a deep impression when we think about it now. For the sake of victory, Chang Hao is willing to be a green leaf and always help. Twins who work hard for money. Xie Ming'an retired and came back. Even the characters other than the protagonist's teammates are very impressive. Lin Shen, Yasha, team boss Lin Zhengrong,many characters still leave an impression on me. Because the author spent a lot of space describing the supporting characters besides the game. In this book, the protagonist almost immediately starts the main line of e-sports. Victory after victory. As far as the main plot is concerned, it is actually more enjoyable than the previous book. Because the protagonist of the previous book initially led the weak team to continuously defeat the strong, and there were also a lot of daily routines interspersed in the middle, so the fun was not so intensive and frequent. But I just think that the last book is more worth recalling. Because this book has nothing but victory after victory. It's too dense and refreshing, just like eating hot pot every day. By the end of the meal, you no longer feel the spiciness. I'm also numb to the excitement. Seeing it now, except for the protagonist, I basically have no impression of other characters. I can't even remember the names of the protagonist's teammates. Not to mention people from other teams. I was impressed that this book only had one main character. Of course, I won't talk about the protagonist's parents who provide the most toxic point of the book. Thinking of them makes me lower my opinion of this book. I have to say that the supporting characters in this book were extremely failed. The protagonist has also completely become a tool for continuous victory. The protagonist of the previous book is obviously controlled by the system, but he can still let people see his own unique character. In the constant victory, from the beginning just to complete the task, to later he truly fell in love with e-sports. His charisma is also becoming more and more apparent and he is becoming more and more likable. The protagonist of this book is obviously not controlled by the system and is very free, but he behaves like a tool man controlled by the system. Nothing but victory is victory. So far, I haven't seen his own thoughts, such as why he plays games, what he thinks of his teammates, whether he really loves e-sports... Because I can't see his thoughts, I can't be impressed by his personality charm. So even if he wins again and again, as a reader, I will only: "Oh, the protagonist wins again." Or: "The team configuration is so average, why should the protagonist win?" I don't know what other people think. Personally, because I like the protagonist of the last book very much, even though I know that the protagonist will win in the end, I am full of expectations while reading the book, and I will be happy when I see him win the game. Especially when the protagonist defeats a strong team, I will be ecstatic. It's like a fan cheering for their idol. And I didn't feel much about the protagonist of this book. After seeing him win, I just thought: "Oh, I won." The mood was very dull. When I see him defeat a strong team, I just think: "Is the author cheating? Why can he win?" It's like a passerby seeing a popular star. These two stark contrasts are just like the filters fans have for their idols and the way passers-by feel about their idols. I heard that the idol has accomplished something incredible and his fans are proud of him. But the first reaction of passers-by who is indifferent to him will be to question cheating or deception. This is too real. To summarize, the characterization in this book is very thin. None of the supporting characters leave a lasting impression, and the protagonist's charisma isn't strong enough either. I think the author can strengthen the characterization in the later chapters. I won't talk about the plot. The author definitely knows how to write the plot better than me, the reader. But as a reader, I can still judge whether a protagonist is attractive and whether the supporting characters in the book are fleshed out enough, so I will share my thoughts with the author for his reference. It is rare to write such a long comment, I hope the author can read it. I still like this book very much, and I hope the author can write better.

I have an idea, hasn't the protagonist just finished the high school entrance examination? If Chen Mu debuts when he is in high school, and then goes to college after three consecutive championships, exactly three years later the protagonist completes the college entrance examination and then debuts. After making a name for himself, Chen Mu comes back for the final retirement battle. The old and new protagonists fight, the new protagonist's team VS the old team that won three consecutive championships How about it?

Waiting for the update. Who is still waiting until 12 o'clock like me? Please be more careful and I'll see how many people there are.

One day in 2017, I was playing Swordsman of the Wind, and everyone on the other side typed: "Yasuo, your record is so ugly, let me teach you, take out the QWR key, and then change the proficiency sign to a space." I didn't really believe it, but the other side was all master level, so I did it. I changed from the embarrassment of 3/5, and in the subsequent games, I gradually targeted 0/10. I kept working hard, and finally, I achieved myself 0/11 0/12 0/13 0/14 0/20 I conquered the peaks of happiness one after another The question mark that my teammates can't keep up with is the end of my honor. Good proof Later, I gradually discovered that happiness is never-ending Level 1 Dolan Shield Naked Cloth Armor Shoes Black Cut Plate Armor Blue Shield Big Anti-armor My teammates were scared off by my superb record at the beginning When they were 15 I said : "It doesn't matter, we can do it" They were very supportive of me and couldn't even say normal words I could only type symbols like "****" I silently clicked and refused to surrender Later, when we were in a group, I could always E up to attract the enemy The enemy chased me from my highland tower to His high ground But all my teammates were growing silently Later My teammates lost the team battle I was alone with E The minions were suppressed by my superb E They all stopped moving where I went to and from E My teammates were resurrected But I haven't fallen yet But the opponent was 5V1 Finally I collapsed I took out the Chun Gejia The enemy was waiting next to me I looked at the E key on my keyboard The "E" on it had been worn away The space bar also had cracks in the middle I started to think about what all this was for I thought of Riven She She told me: "Choose my own way!" I have been wandering for so long Just like my name The wind is not a breeze but a strong wind It tells me I am a happy wind Blowing all over this canyon! Even though my body is covered with wounds from the enemy Even though the opponent keeps typing and harassing me But I will never forget my original intention Keep my mission in mind! I was born to be happy! And I was born with only one weapon! It's E! Thinking of this I am no longer confused My eyes are focused I put my middle finger firmly on the E key Start—— The next peak of happiness 0/30 asaki!

It's amazing. The last book was based on Brother Li. After writing the book, Brother Li's condition declined. This book is based on Theshy. After writing the book, Theshy's condition also declined. I remember that there was a Chen Yifa in the last book. I would like to call you Qidian Guan Zeyuan.

After reading the current chapter, I have to say that this is the best one among the lol articles I have read. I finished one chapter while looking at how many chapters were left. The author's previous books were not to my liking, but this one is to my liking, and it feels very immersive! !

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"Okay, we can see that today the Royal Family also sent out their new AD player, the young player Uzi, who is currently the king of Ionia" "He still alive !" "Team-breaking maniac, family slave with four surnames" "Jian proudly holds the cup!" "That smile, smile to S9" "Uzi, forever awesome~" Goodbye, Jane proudly

I really can't stand the roles of parents and uncles, they're too toxic. The author probably imitated Losing Money to Become a Rich Man starting from the game, but did not understand the essence. I don't want to succeed, I just want to fail. I have no choice but in the end I always succeed by some combination of circumstances. ——Isn't it great? The villain didn't want me to succeed, so he set a trap, but it helped me succeed every time. ——Isn't it great? My most trusted relatives/parents openly supported me, but secretly they didn't want me to succeed and kept stumbling over me. However, due to my own hard work and talent, I finally succeeded. ——Is this really cool? If the parents were villains, they would always fail by mistake every time they tried to cause harm, and it would also give readers a sense of slap in the face, but they are not. The reason why the protagonist works so hard to play the game is to let them live a good life. It's as if there is always a traitor around you who is wreaking havoc, hoping that you will fail, but you always succeed every time without knowing anything about it. In the end, you let him share the glory of success with you - although you have nothing to lose, don't you really feel uncomfortable in your heart? I'm not happy about being the main character.