It Began When I Saw People’s Lifespans

The author wants to tell you that the subject matter is good. The writing is also okay. But you should start writing without writing an overall outline. Your book has too many inconsistencies, and the protagonist's mentality is too capricious In the beginning, I had the ability to sell my time, so I chose to be cautious. I tried to hold on, but ended up writing on the plane and to Poland.

I once read a short story where the protagonist was the same. The numbers he saw represented his lifespan; if they suddenly decreased, it meant danger. So he went to a pharmaceutical research lab and developed a new injection. He would hover over his arm, and if the number decreased, it meant failure; if it increased, it meant success.

Is this book based on a movie? I think it was Korean, but I can't remember exactly. It was about a girl who could see other people's lifespans, and the timelines were all on their ankles.

The author's initial setup was a bit excessive, failing to create a fresh impression and feeling rather dull. The female lead seemed out of place. If you can't write romance, don't write it. It felt forced. However, the later parts did offer a refreshing change. So far, it's still a very good read. It's worth reading. In the future, you must improve the setup; that's how you attract more readers. Keep it up!

Copying from a book? 😡

It's a good book with a novel writing style, but unfortunately, the plot is too scattered. It would have been better if the author had described the protagonist's development and growth in more detail.

Under the wrath of the people, heaven and earth are enraged; who will be the savior in this crisis? The bond between parents and children cannot be severed; the pain of separation by death is unbearable. Those who abandon virtue will only engage in empty schemes, those who forsake righteousness will only conquer, and those who deceive and cheat will only succeed in doing so many times.

Several years ago, I also conceived of a similar cheat system based on time, or rather, lifespan. From an ordinary person's perspective, time is a cheap, wasteful, yet renewable resource. 6 Billion people (in the eyes of social elites and the wealthy, the vast majority of people in this world are useless, contributing negligibly to society—I believe you and I can feel this malice) multiplied by…

It's definitely toxic, with a chaotic logic. New readers might be able to stomach it, but those with some reading experience will probably find it hard to swallow.

The author has quite a few flaws, especially in the writing of pretentiousness and romance. If you can't write romance, don't include a female lead.