General, Please Come to the Altar

Here comes Jiangjiang, a bench in the front row, melon seeds, soda, and small puff pastry.

The only writing style is that the origin and system of the pig's feet are blurred in the first three chapters, which is not enjoyable to read. It would be better to try to explain the origins and background of the two in three chapters and one or two sentences.

Fantasy and reality are often unclear. Contradictions are not so prominent, and you can add some opposition and conflict appropriately. In an illusory copy, I guess it is a basic pillar of your book and it is not easy to modify or change. You can appropriately mention points in the fantasy to let readers know where the pig's feet are. Many times the writing style is too soothing, causing the fantasy to become as real as the real world. As a result, readers don't know whether you are writing about the real world or whether you are in a dream. It means that your writing is very good, but it is very bad for readers. Therefore, it is still necessary to clearly remind readers whether the space where the pig's feet is located is in a dream or reality, so that readers can have a sense of involvement! As for the issue of dreams and illusions, I think the author should spend less time describing it and focus on the real world! The author is relatively good at writing prose. But other novels still want readers to know where the pig's feet are; especially online novels. . . . . . .

Big brother, here's a little suggestion, don't accept a disciple. You want to be the emperor of heaven. Accepting a disciple will be very troublesome.

The writing is a bit messy, the reading is not smooth, and it feels a bit mysterious.

I don't understand it at all, it's so confusing and the top and bottom are not connected.

It makes my head hurt to watch. Brother. Can you please make it simpler? I can't understand

He looked confused and couldn't understand it at all.

Isn't Jiang Ling too powerful? I'm afraid that the other ancestral spirits combined won't be able to defeat him, but...

Contribute to the signing of the contract and take the past to the next level!

Chapter 79: The Conferring of Gods is in progress, and we look forward to the Conferring of Gods to usher in the prosperous age of Shinto!

The writing is good, but it has too many loopholes and Goldfinger is too bloated. Let's learn from the settings of other Shinto novels. For example, Ji Tianyi and Wen Chaogong's Shinto novels. Very comfortable to watch

Dude, I'll give you a vote, it's very well written.

So what, dear friends, if you have any criticisms, you can comment here. It has been too quiet recently. I think there are mistakes and omissions in the writing. Everyone is panicking if they don't say anything 🥺

The setting is to combine several priesthoods into a god position. You can leave whatever priesthood you want here, such as protecting the home and house, exorcising evil and avoiding ghosts, etc. It's a headache (´;;`)