Harry Potter: Dark Alchemy

I really don't understand the heroine's character, and the writing style that starts to get weirded out as soon as she enters school. Personally, I think the heroine is really a failure, and the title of the book is inconsistent with the writing style. It's a pity that I kept it for so long😐

This book is based on Harry Potter as a youth/fantasy movie universe. This writing method is actually very good, but unfortunately the author's handling is indeed flawed in some aspects. The heroine Chang Chu is both the author's second translation and the author's second creation. Because she borrowed from famous youth love movies, the emotional scenes give people a particularly sweet feeling. Generally speaking, the creation of this character is three-dimensional and relatively successful. But after reading it now, especially when the French plot ends and the basilisk copy begins, the full text seems a bit illogical. The main focus is that what appears now is probably the number one female supporting character in the full text: French girl Villita. This beautiful girl is also a miserable person. In the prototype movie, she was forced by her mother's twisted love and finally destroyed herself. Of course, since this is a magical world, the girl Obscurus exploded and destroyed Paris. Finally, she was picked up by a pig's feet and forced to start a life of "depending on each other (funny)". In fact, I sympathize with her experience very much, but it is a pity that the second female lead will inevitably conflict with the first female lead. The behavior of the male protagonist in the conflict is very strange, which is the source of the sense of dissonance throughout the text. Under normal circumstances, when you bring an unrelated woman to the scene where your real girlfriend appears, you must give an explanation, and the male protagonist has at least three methods (including but not limited to explaining in Chinese, explaining when Villita leaves by boat, explaining when the girlfriend enters the boys' dormitory) to explain the reason. It has now progressed to the point where the Defense Against the Dark Arts class has been at least 3 days, and the male protagonist has actually made no move. According to common sense, this is almost impossible. This is the aspect that readers are most skeptical about at present. I hope the author can fill in the pit in time. As for the role of Villita, as a girl with no relatives in the UK, it is natural for her to rely on the male protagonist as her only support. Viata is a mentally precocious girl, and her family environment also makes her taciturn and rarely express emotions. Different from Chang Chu's fiery situation, the interaction between the male protagonist and Villita from the time they met in France to the present is very warm. Her current position should be similar to GG's French beauty subordinates (followers and admirers). As for the rest, it will test the author's wisdom and writing skills. Since Obscurus is too powerful, it is difficult for me to see that anyone except pig feet can control her in all aspects (funny). Overall, this book is a readable work with a unique language style. I hope the author will continue to work hard.

To summarize. The author wrote an emotional line. The prototype should be based on the beating of the heart. As far as the results are concerned, I personally feel that it is very good. But there was a little problem before, that is, the impact of the pounding heart on the author was too deep. It always brings Wright into the role of a heart-pounding male protagonist. But as a time traveler, the male protagonist is different from the heart-beating male protagonist in setting. This also leads to what some readers call poisonous points. Secondly, about Chang Chu. Personally, I feel okay about this character. The design is quite vivid, with both love and hate. But unfortunately, in the past two years at Qidian, HP fandoms, no, or most of the male videos, have cultivated a bunch of fans of mindless male protagonists who enjoy cool stories. The relationship between men and women that should be devoted to each other is twisted into unilateral devotion by women. If a woman disobeys the male protagonist even a little bit, she will be scolded, as if the female protagonist has done something unjust. The protagonist has become wise or something like that. Serious ones are even like Long Aotian. The female character has to fall desperately in love with him if he hooks his fingers. Love is life and death. Then the male protagonist opens up his harem and doesn't even care. They are the ones who obviously sprayed poisonous weeds in the article and said what they said was untrue and too false. It is they who pursue extreme reality. As a result, I really stopped working on this aspect. In short, I hope the author will not be influenced by those "extremists". Go with your own ideas. Don't listen to what they say, think carefully about who you are writing it for, it's too watery and so on (of course you still have to take a look at some of the good ideas in the book review section). If you are scolded so fiercely, you have the ability to write it yourself. So go ahead and write according to your own ideas. Awesome!

At first I thought it was quite good, but around Chapter 90 I just couldn't help but give up. The subject matter is good, but I really don't like the direction of the writing. I can even say that I hate it to the extreme. However, I still want to encourage the author. Although this book really disgusts me, it is because of my personal reasons. I believe there will be many other people who will like your book.

. . . Because some people don't like it, the heroine's role is cut? Then have you ever considered what the people you like think?

There is a big loophole at the beginning. It is impossible for a teacher to let an 11-year-old child go to Diagon Alley to buy various things on her own. This is an irresponsible move, not to mention that the other party is Minerva. Even if she has something to do, she will ask other teachers to accompany her.

After traveling through time, my mind has become that of a child.

No wonder no one saw the random addition of characters!

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The protagonist wants to learn Occlumency while writing the fact that he is a time traveler in a notebook. Isn't this funny? The protagonist in the article has read most of Harry Potter, and his memory is very clear, which means that the protagonist was at least a teenager before time travel. Plus the experience in the orphanage, is it not enough to make the protagonist mature? The protagonist often thinks and behaves like a child, doing things without considering the consequences. I really can't stand it.

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As title. Solicit extensive advice and refer to it appropriately.

The length of a novel is limited, and it needs to be divided into priorities. If you focus too much on love, there will be no room for other content. In addition, the existence of supporting characters is to set off the protagonist and make the protagonist more flesh and blood. However, the story you wrote about Chang Chu not only did not help to improve and highlight the protagonist's thoughts and character, but also seriously weakened the protagonist's expressiveness. The supporting characters can be described as flesh-and-blood, but that should be considered after the protagonist's character and thoughts are perfected, otherwise the lack of priority will appear chaotic and disorderly. Group dramas can also be written, but the way you write, the author, is not at all a group drama. You can refer to things like Growing Pains. In addition, Qiong Yao's love dramas are not written by you. Go and read more love novels written by Qiong Yao. They require emotional conflict, dramatic performance, rhythm, etc., Which you don't have. In the first three chapters, the heroine chases the hero. The characters of both parties are extremely blurred. Then you refuse to give up the love you described. The plot, and there is no emotional conflict for emotional advancement and extension, can only be reread, and it takes up a lot of article space, but the plot structure has almost collapsed at this time. When writing a novel, you have to express the content and theme you most want to express before you consider adding other things. Blindly grasping will only catch nothing.

Alas, the original heroine was forced to leave. Come on, author. I can only say that the development of the original heroine is really too poisonous. . . It feels like you are enjoying yourself

If you don't want to watch it, please leave peacefully, and don't go too far with your opinions, because it's very simple, if you don't want to watch it, don't watch it. By the way, this is the first time I've encountered such an annoying female protagonist (facepalm).

I just finished reading the free chapter. What can I say? Weird, very weird. When I think about it carefully, is my sister reading a romance novel 😵 or an 11-year-old underage kid 😰? I vomited. It's not that the writing is not good, but I really feel bad. No way😱The author is really tired of me, but when I think back to the fact that before the time travel, the protagonist was an otaku in his twenties and now in his thirties, he will definitely fall in love with an 11-year-old loli 🔪 Tell me if you are a pervert (▼ plate ▼#)

In this book, I think the 82nd chapter is a hurdle. If you can resist it, you can basically keep pursuing the rest. If you can't resist it, you can only persuade it to quit.

Did you do this on purpose, author? ! It starts with the pig's feet lying in an orphanage for three years (meeting a saint, who is a fortune teller who survives), and then it is the original childhood sweetheart of the official partner. It must be said that the description of the emotional drama is weak; then there is the college admission letter without an owl (I tolerated it, I can still justify it); to the most unreasonable chapter 44, a human body falling from the sky can actually break the speed of sound, and there is a sound barrier. Are you a human cannon fired by the palm of the Tathagata? ! ! ! ... This is not a bug anymore! Okay! ! Don't show up again later? ? ? ? Very low-level error...

I want to complain about the emotional drama in this book, because when I first read it, I only saw the part where Lao Deng accepted his disciples, so don't use the rest of the discussion to discuss it. From what I saw of the plot, I felt that the author wrote the emotional drama too hastily. Many people complain that the male protagonist is an adult and the female protagonist is young, but I don't think this is the main problem. The male protagonist is an adult, but no one stipulates that adults must have very mature views and thinking. In fact, there is not much difference between a newly graduated college student and an underage middle school student; the female protagonist is young, but it does not mean that she is immature, let alone copper smelting - the male protagonist is not greedy for other people's bodies! Why do you think the emotional scenes between the male and female protagonists are weird? Because there is actually a lot that could be written but was not written - there is no writing about the regret and sadness of the heroine after she gave up her relationship (not love) with the hero for her dream; there is no writing about the hero expressing his feelings to the heroine, it makes it seem like the heroine has been touching herself from her own perspective, and then the hero suddenly turns into a licking dog; nothing is written about it. There are stories about their relationship development and conflicts. I have read a lot of HP fanfics, and there are pornographic ones similar to this one, but those books are at least sweet in the early stages, and this book has almost no sweetness. You have to stay together for two or three years and then describe the heroine's change in mentality through details before breaking up. It can be seen that the heroine is an independent, self-reliant and insecure character, but the emotional scene is indeed not handled well. The heroine has been moved by herself, and the hero has been unilaterally acting as a licker. Normally the emotional drama and the main plot go hand in hand and are intertwined with each other, but in this book the emotional drama and the main plot are like two dragons competing for the pearl. When one is interrupted, the other begins to develop rapidly. That's it for now, let's put it on the bookshelf and read it slowly.

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If the heroine is removed... I can order all of this article! Can't we just run the main line of exploring magic? Make a heroine with this kind of personality... And the interaction is so exciting ヽ(;▽;)ノ Do male authors like to write heroines with this kind of personality? 😥 I have come across several articles in which the personality of the female character is beyond words...

As title. Readers can express their thoughts about the characters here. The general plot is similar to the previous one.

To be honest, the writing in the HP fanfic is indeed good, but I don't accept bad endings, so I'll excuse you!

It feels so nonsensical. It has something to do with dark alchemy.

How is this book written? A lot of big names in the book review section have talked about it. In this case, the author can write more than one million words, 🐮🍺. Therefore, I am going to pay attention to the author's next book 🤓

The heroine wants to fuck Lily, please do it well and don't make trouble with the hero again

If you want to read good HP novels, the protagonist should be dark enough, not a virgin.

The alchemy setting of this novel was probably copied from "The Gods"! The Alchemy War, the Banner of the Sixteen Kings, the Four Powers, and the Demon Destroyer are all settings in God's Family.

I found a new book with no author mentioned. Is it on another website?

What can I say, I really didn't like the heroine when I first started watching it. Although the description is very suitable for a little girl, this kind of character is really unlikable. But after the male and female protagonists established a relationship, I no longer dislike the heroine. Slowly, I felt that it became more and more interesting, but it was a bit unfinished. The ending was too fast.