King's Game

Very well written. Very good, very unique charm and ideas, I really like the character setting of the protagonist. Come on, great author

Come on 👍👍

There are quite a lot of abilities that can be used, but how to let readers understand the subtleties of various abilities through text, it is likely that we can think more about it in the subsequent design (describe more fully? Actions, colors, dialogues, names, a little personal opinion)

I feel that the protagonist's ability is to pause time. Let me tell you my own feelings, there are too many characters with special abilities appearing in a short period of time. Come on, if you write well, there will always be people who will read it.

Come on, the revolution has not yet succeeded, comrades still need to work hard!

Well, this book mainly focuses on Li Wenhao, supernatural powers, and the game Seven Kings. Let me start with what I think are the advantages. The setting is very clear, and the positioning is accurate, and it is consistent with the world in the book. In addition, the characters' actions are described in detail and have a sense of picture. The protagonist's setting is obvious and gives readers a sense of involvement. The plot is not procrastinating and leaves a lot of suspense. For example, Zero One seems to know the protagonist, who is he? What is his purpose? Li Wenhao's encounters with girls when he was young can inspire readers to think for themselves. The following are some small questions and suggestions. I have a general understanding of the subject matter that the author wants to write about. The main plot should revolve around how Li Wenhao survives in the game, how he makes choices, and finally wins and becomes the king. But other characters should also have their own stories, not just appendages to the protagonist. Furthermore, although the plot is not procrastinating, some of the transitions in the plot are too fast-paced and there may be continuity problems. Maybe you can try to skip it in one go. As for the last suggestion, I hope the author can simplify the number of words in each paragraph. Sometimes, the sentences describing language and action can be separated into a separate paragraph, so that it will be more comfortable to read. The author's writing is good. If you stick to it, you will definitely be rewarded.

Coming from the post, the point about the protagonist's time (seems to be?) Power is very attractive. If it develops well, it will become a very powerful point. If you want to give me a little suggestion, the characterization of the character can be a little more fleshed out.