I Went to Another World

This is the first time I have written a long review, because Daddy is quite similar to me. I also struggled with my first novel writing. I made a lot of mistakes. I wrote a few books but abandoned them all. Recently, I picked up writing again. For no reason, just for the love and obsession with novels in my heart! I read a big book. To be honest, I only read two chapters, yes, two chapters, because I really couldn't stand it anymore. Don't blame me for being ugly. I hope I'll read it again after you improve it. There are a few mistakes that I would like to mention. It's just my personal opinion. Don't take offense. First point, there are too many typos. There are at least several typos in one chapter. Maybe it is an input method problem. However, I hope that after writing it, I can read it carefully several times and feel satisfied before posting it. After posting it, I can read it again as a reader, so that I can know what shortcomings there are. Because I am like this, after I finish writing a chapter, I have to check it at least ten times before sending it out. Then I read it two or three times. If I find any mistakes, I immediately correct them without delay. Of course, sometimes you can't see it, that's normal, but that way there will be a lot less mistakes. The second point is that the segmentation is too complicated. It is best to have one paragraph for the character. If one sentence is too long, then two paragraphs, but there must be a colon when segmenting! The third thing is to use the correct punctuation marks and use less exclamation points! Because when I read the sentence with the exclamation point, I couldn't help but yell out in my heart. If you end with a period, you must divide it into paragraphs. Try not to use periods in the paragraphs. This is just a small personal suggestion. I hope you will stick to it and encourage you! You can also read what I wrote. I hope you can learn something from it. Of course, I am not saying that mine is the best, but I have made all the mistakes you have made. After all, we all write novels to fulfill our dreams. Our works are our dreams and our children. Who doesn't want their children to be better! Come on! ! !

It's coming, it's coming Hey, the title of this novel makes me want to read it Come on

Open a post and ask for your recommendation. 😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍

I don't even want to complain about this kind of author. He writes fantasy novels, but the content he talks about is indeed Chinese. This situation of painting a tiger instead of a dog is really embarrassing. Either you just write about China directly, or you read more about Western literature without writing. Although it is false, please respect the facts.

I read the book well (there are too many chapters where the protagonist is flirting and flirting, and the plot is really dragging). The progress is too slow.

There are already 180,000 words, and there are still 20,000 words to go on the shelves. Friends who are reading, can you please leave a message? It's a little easier now.

The description of the war is too childish. It is very bland and not exciting at all. You have to write an article about having an affair with the heroine. It is worthy of the fantasy of a fat nerd. The main reason is that your ambiguous writing makes people have goosebumps all over.

From the first chapter to the seventy-three chapters, what I want to say as a reader is that the author of the writing is good and bad. The love story between the two heroic spirits and the protagonist is so embarrassing that I have cancer. This is a fantasy war story from another world. I read it like a romance novel. What's going on? There are so many foreshadowings to write in the book. It's obvious that the two people describing love slowed down the progress of the plot (maybe it was an illusion given to me by the audio reading). I mainly want to complain about this. I guess you will finish it after writing like this for five or six hundred years? ?

Can't make it? That's enough. If you're afraid of harmony, don't write about women. Can't you write about men?

Dear readers, newbies, if there is anything wrong with what I wrote, you can write a comment and let me know I will change it when I see it, because I hope you can give me some suggestions.

Flirting and flirting are not flattering, and I can't stand to watch them**😅😅

There's a kingdom and an empire, an emperor and a king. Brother, can't you tell the difference between an empire and a kingdom? Can't tell the difference between an emperor and a kingdom? The level of the empire is higher than that of the kingdom, and the level of the emperor is higher than that of the king. Alas, it looks so tiring.

The book is okay, but the reviews are missing 😰

In such a fantasy world, of course farming and climbing technology trees is a must! Otherwise, would the time travel be in vain? Use artillery to coax him!

There are more than 2,000 soldiers in the 5,000-person camp. I have organized it for me. There are also a lot of slaves in it. With the productivity of the Middle Ages, it is difficult for 10 people to raise one soldier.

It's not easy. Come on, author. Survival is not easy. You have to be strong. Even if you kneel down, you have to crawl to the end of your life.

The opening** and the two characters are basically not consistent with the aid, and they are all living in corruption to make up the word count.

How strong is the protagonist? Is he a weakling?

How can a knight write without a giant dragon? No matter what magician you are, ride on the dragon and destroy them all.

I don't feel like farming. It doesn't have the feeling of farming in the early stage and fighting for hegemony in the later stage like others. Moreover, the refreshing point that war is obviously so important has been brushed aside by you. Those who watch farming are looking forward to a hearty and hearty battle

Do you know why the lords in the Middle Ages all owned large areas of land but had very small populations? It was because the grain output was very low at that time, and one person had to start with several acres of land to feed themselves. This led to the lords having to wage wars for more land, because if they won the war, they could get more land, and if they lost, the population would just decrease. In this way, the food to feed the people would be reduced, and the lords themselves would get more food. , Which is why the lords in the Middle Ages were keen to attack each other. Anyway, they were all nobles loyal to the same king. The king would not allow one noble to completely eliminate another noble. If they lost, they would only pay a little gold coins or pay a little land. Unless they were fighting with another country, the nobles of the same country's camp would only win or lose but not be eliminated.

I feel like the protagonist is like a mama's boy... I can't tell that the protagonist has put in any effort on the way to becoming stronger. It's too easy to become stronger. Even if the energy is forced to make the protagonist stronger, you can also write this part carefully, write about how he was almost bursting, and then relied on willpower to hold on and become stronger, etc., Instead of just brushing it off.

The protagonist's own strength has been improved in various ways, but it is of no use (in my opinion). Instead of killing everyone, at least use some magic, right? It's okay to touch fish. Although it's normal for a lord to huddle in the back, it looks like a useless one.