The Legend of Iron-Blooded Immortal Cultivation

The writing is smooth and the plot is delicate. It has been collected. Please come back!

Come on, little cutie, here is a small suggestion. Well, that's the beginning of Chapter 2. Some of the words are inappropriate. It should be three cars, but I haven't heard of three cars. Then, there is a place where a paragraph is divided from the middle of the sentence. Then there is the Blood River Ancestor... There are a bit too many, basically every sentence starts with these four words. I took a look, and basically every paragraph and every sentence on the two pages contained Blood River Patriarch... Well, it feels a bit strange. As for the writing style, I personally think it's okay. Please pay more attention to these minor issues.

It can be seen that the author wrote with great care. But I am not writing comments to praise the author or to comfort the author, but I hope that my comments will help improve the author's work. Back to business. To be honest, I only read the first page, but there are a lot of things wrong with it. First, others have also said that the segmentation is not reasonable and affects the reading experience. No further details will be given here. Second, there are traces of deliberate show. Chapter 1, the second sentence of the first paragraph, "All kinds of creatures have regained their vitality." Why not just use the word "recovery of all things"? Isn't this more concise? It is more in line with the text characteristics of online novels Thirdly, the detailed description of the environment in the second paragraph of the first chapter is really unnecessary. The writing method of online novels is different from that of middle school narratives, and there is no need for so many descriptions to reflect the writing skills. Fourthly, there is a language problem in the third paragraph at the beginning of the novel. "When the deer lowers his head to drink water, he will raise his head to be alert~", the language problem is too obvious, and it appears at the beginning of the text. There are still some issues that are not listed here. I write this long review not to criticize the author (to be honest, I don't need to spend time criticizing new authors), but to hope that the author can gain something and make continuous progress. I also hope that the author can continue to persevere and not give up writing because of some of my unintentional remarks. Come on~

Very well written! It's just that some paragraphs are too long, which dazzled me hehe:-D

Is it difficult to write about themes that combine science fiction with cultivating immortality? Come on~

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I came to support, the writing is okay, let's cheer each other up, I hope the author can also go to my place to have a look and give me some opinions. Other interested book friends can also take a look. The mystery genre is a bit similar to the Hell Apartment.

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The title of the book "Iron Blood" and "Cultivation" is so strange

Chapter 1 has been revised. If you point out any typos or errors, I will correct them. If you find any errors, please point them out so I can correct them, thank you.

The first chapter goes straight to the topic. It gets colder after a slow start. Now it's the golden chapter.

Collected it. The protagonists of this book and my book both wanted to hunt in the beginning. It was fate.

It sounds like there are a lot of systems, and it seems a bit like the Dragon Qi system. If you don't follow the laws of the country, you can't practice Taoism. If you don't respect the laws, you can't achieve cultivation. The protagonist cooperates with the people to conquer the mountains and destroy the temples. With the military strength of an army of thousands of people, a mortal soldier under his command can also suppress the full power of cultivators who have been cultivating for hundreds of years. No, the law does not add nobles, the fifth-level officer relies on the dragon energy attracted by the imperial edict. As long as the immortal cultivator's spell hits his body, the dragon energy will bite back on the immortal cultivator. Even the Nascent Soul cultivator cannot bear it. Immediately, he will be punished by heaven, his body will be destroyed, and his spirit will be destroyed. It will not be a good end. As long as an official holds a certain official position, he will be blessed by destiny, destiny, and luck. It is truly invulnerable to all evils and inaccessible to all dharma! Among many sects, cultivators do not even want to see cultivators bullied by mortals and become slaves. But in the end, I can only lament, "This is what my fate is", and I can only moan, "My magical power is not as good as the sky, what can I do, what can I do". The hearts of millions of common people were touched, and the Holy Emperor issued an order to the world. All it took was a special edict, which was enough to crush the ancient gods into ashes countless times. All spiritual spirits were brought under the law and nationalized. No matter how good they were in cultivating immortals, they were not allowed to practice immortality without the permission of the court.

Name: Lin Dong Gender: Male Remainder: Author's discretion (Come on) (Received)

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