The Result of Tracing the Cause

I have read about 20 chapters, and I have some small feelings. First of all, I really like the writing style. It is always very cute, and the updates are super diligent. It is a cute and conscientious thing. It is worth collecting and eating seriously. The writing is quite delicate, anyway, it is much better than the previous one (pu , after a closer look, I still think it is quite interesting qwq, the plot is also quite fresh, and there are all kinds of complaints along the way. In short, it is highly recommended to put it in the bookcase and read it slowly. For example, if you are tired of looking at some messy things, you can come and take a look at it. You can also keep it first, it is so fat. Soon... The next is a small opinion, well... Firstly, the development of the plot is a bit... Not big enough. To put it bluntly, there is nothing that can attract readers to read. It does not describe a grand world, bizarre scenes, no conspiracy and boss, and it is easy for readers to leave. Secondly, the heroine Luo Xi, you have to know. Said, if the gap between the male and female protagonists is too big, we won't have the fun of watching the CP make sweets (even if they don't get together later...) And I feel that Luo Xi is too perfect, so that it loses a little color. The third is a bit slow to warm up, in fact, it is almost the same as the first. It is difficult to ask others to read the gold in your book later, because Many people can't stand it at the beginning... At least it has to make everyone have confidence in the protagonists, right? As for the writing, it's okay. As a newbie who doesn't read a lot, it's okay, maybe better than me (because I haven't written it, but I kind of want to write balabala), but I still have to work hard 😂, because with the above problems, I can't rely on writing to add points. It's very dangerous qwq I watched her grow up in the last book, but I only read a few chapters (Blood Squirting). I hope I can continue to follow this book. The above is my little opinion, you can criticize it, but please be gentle...

Although... Emmmm... It's still... Quite... Exciting... Right? (Don't cry This is a fantasy writer who has been practicing writing for two and a half years (more than)... Fantasy... I like writing, drawing, and persecuting the group leader, m... Ahem. Writing and painting have blossomed, I hope everyone can... Support... Um... Ahem, say something happy! Although it is not lively, it still needs to be exciting! Click in and you are destined! I hope you can be happy in this story! kira☆! Then it's time to persecute the leader ( The following quotes are from the famous scene in the 48th episode of Iron-Blooded Gundam ( ( Audiences who don't know can try to understand...? To Come Power (Background: Streets engraved in DNA Ailei: It feels like the comment area is really quiet, and there aren't many clicks. It's really different from other places. Oleka: Ah, maybe everyone can just read in peace. Ailea: But it has nothing to do with us! Ailei: Of course you are in such a good recommendation position, and Huanmeng is working so hard, so I will work harder! Oleka: Ah. (Heart: Yes, the hard work of the official and Huan Meng are not all in vain; from now on, as long as Huan Meng continues to code, the road will continue to extend—— (No need to dub the sound of brakes (Assassins who come out of nowhere (Da da da da da da da da da (Captain Oleka who takes the shot for Airey on the spot) Ailei: Captain, what are you doing, Captain! Oleka: Huh, uh, ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh ah NOT NOT NOT having having having having having having having having having coming and, and and in the commander, commander, a shooting, there is no gun in this book! Where did the gun come from! Mysterious voice: Persecution is necessary, don't care ( (The assassin runs away) Oleka: What, my marksmanship is quite accurate (Where did you learn the marksmanship? Ailei: Regiment... Captain... Ah... Oleka: Why is your voice trembling, Alien! ( Ailee: Because... Because -! Oleka: I am the leader of the Iron Fang Regiment. Oleka, this small injury is insignificant. Ailee: Why, to protect me... Oleka: Protecting the members is my mission! (Ai Lei: But I am not from the Iron Fang Group at all! Oleka: Okay, let's go, Fantasy is waiting for you to catch up on the next plot! (Ai Lei: But the pov I am writing has nothing to do with me! Oleka: (Inner) Huanmeng, I finally understand that the grade of the book is not important at all, as long as you keep writing; as long as you don't stop coding, the length of the word will continue to extend—— (Huanmeng: If it is done so early, Huanmeng cannot continue to persecute you. (Oleka, yes, I understand. (Flower of Hope) Oleka: I will not stop. As long as you don't stop, I will be waiting for you in front! (falling to the ground Oleka: So, don't stop (referring to collection, recommendation, follow-up - (The author of Double Persecution Canvassing is the best among crumbs))

Other additions are welcome🤭

1. Opening In fact, starting from the first chapter, the male protagonist (really ×) woke up and found himself watching a battle. This familiar scene suddenly reminded me of Nashasha and the Sword of Amber in Six Dynasties. Of course, the intentions of these three books are completely different. The purpose of Six Dynasties is to highlight the peak situation of the six dynasties in Chinese history, the collision when the Six Dynasties appeared at the same time, and the impact of the concept of the modern protagonist. Therefore, the protagonist is an observer fighting the decisive battle between Zuo Wujun and the Roman Legion; the plot of Amber Sword is that a max-level boss opens a trumpet to participate in the game (now The history in reality and the changes caused by himself as a time traveler, so it starts out as a small-scale conflict in which the protagonist pretends to be a corpse and fights against the undead empire; and from the current point of view of this book, the main theme of Airei's line is the growth of the boy and the consequences of causes, so what Airei saw was naturally the battle before his "death" (I don't believe that Huanmeng will write a plot in which the protagonist dies suddenly). 2. Protagonist character 1) Airei, I am so moved that Huanmeng finally has a male protagonist! Wang Dao's parents are both dead (of course it's quite normal to cheat). He has a grandfather who is a mercenary and has a very special magic talent. Well, speaking of it, most of the foreign fantasy protagonists are in their prime of life, while in China, most of them are young people. It's important to save the world as early as possible (fake gibberish). 2) Roxy. Thinking about it, if it weren't for the fact that Luo Xi is a flat-chested lolita like Huan Meng, I would have suspected that she was the fantasy heroine next door who traveled through time. What should I say about this character design? I feel like Huanmeng is a bit over-exerted, so I would like to show it in more space. 3) Tal. Look, I don't like it very much. I've already made some well-founded comments on the forums (laughs), and I don't have as many exclusive chapters as the supporting character Ward (Tea). 4) Princess of the Core tribe. Feel free to take a sip of milk from the No. 4 Protagonist. In fact, Ward, who has three consecutive chapters of exclusive plots, is not treated as a protagonist. I am quite surprised, because I am afraid that he will not survive for a few chapters. 3. Plot progress: In fact, the plot is quite ups and downs (probably) when stripped down, but it always feels like something is missing. I don't know how to describe this shortcoming, such as the male protagonist's first battle, the forest as a scene, what its main color and atmosphere should be like, these should be expressed with the help of environmental description, rather than simply describing a scene. 4. Shortcomings to be improved Ahem, after praising Huanmeng (Hundan, are you sure I am praising Huanmeng above), it's time to talk about the shortcomings (with a serious face). Let's talk about an issue that no one seems to have mentioned (at least I haven't seen it). Your writing style is very mixed. Although it is said that the writing style has a different artistic conception in the hands of a master, and although few people care about the style of writing online due to the pace of updating, it is still very embarrassing sometimes. For example, the description after the real protagonist (Elei:???) In Chapter 9 actually doesn't match well in terms of painting style or writing style and context. I speculate that the reasons may be the following two. One is that after you drew the material for Fantasy, your writing style is still lacking, and the other is that you have revised this description many times after you finished writing the inspiration (I'm crying, please return the white stockings to me). Solution, please summarize after reading ×

The drifter will definitely have a destination                                                          Well, the invincible Luo Xi has already been a master of all collections in the clearing branch. Maybe the clues about the destination will be related to other protagonists? Those who are confused will definitely hold on to their goals From the prologue, I guess that Airei will definitely join the Tekkadan, and then don't stop, ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh But what exactly is the goal of the Tekkadan? Hey, at a young age, of course he must pursue girls firmly! Don't go astray! Don't be Tiehanhan! The Avengers will definitely take revenge There is no sign of Tarr meeting the other protagonists for the time being. He will probably meet Airei on the battlefield or in a small-scale battle, right? Then rely on the protagonist's halo to kill you to death, emmmm. Currently, he is the one with the most determined direction among the protagonists, so there is nothing to guess. Those who suffer will be relieved There are no signs of such pain yet, but as soon as they appear, they are partners, trustworthy and flame blades. No matter how you look at it, Fran has been appointed to stab Airei in the back in the prologue. So guess the pain is a betrayal of Airey? Relief sounds overwhelming, but in short it is Fran's self-salvation. (Return to the bright side of the force... Cross out) I am ready to complain again, what is that unknown white object? It must have grown up eating cuteness, how can it be so cute! I'm dead (pounce

Come on! Coming from the author's previous book, I believe in the author's perseverance and writing power! 👍

I didn't expect, I didn't expect, the author, you would do such a cruel thing to a wild boar. Tell me, when did you go to Konoha to learn the Millennium Killing 🤭🤭🤭

So... So excited... Thank you very much QWQ... This should be the first reward besides original acquaintances and fans... So excited... Thank you so much...

Well. . Although he is a first-class person, right? [Looking at the sky] Let's take a look again

It feels pretty good, come on, stop being a eunuch 😂

The weather is too hot, Suitable: read The Fruit of Cause and Effect in an air-conditioned place Taboo: write test papers in the sun

I wonder if this fantasy has been on the top of the page since ancient times and no one sees it (

Come on! Work hard and encourage each other!

Well, after seeing more than a hundred pictures, I feel that it looks much better than the beginning ( A little suggestion - make it bigger. If the opening is not big enough, you always feel that something is missing (it may also be because I have read some other excellent works recently and my taste has changed)

It can only be said that people's hearts are not as old as they used to be, and those who read books are all prostitutes for free. Of course, that includes me. After all, everyone likes free money. But, authors also have to eat. Occasionally, if you have the ability, you should at least support your favorite authors as much as you can. I believe every author will thank from the bottom of his heart the readers who have supported him along the way...

Well, I don't know how to speak, but it's pretty good-looking. Good luck to the author. . .

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Good guy, I saw this book by the author while listening to books.

Learn a lot about perseverance from the author👍 Come on! Salute!

Come on, author, I love you😘