Martial Arts Novice Enters the Jianghu

[Protagonist]: I don't care if this protagonist likes to say shit, shit, shit, but this protagonist has a lot of problems. There are too many questions in one sentence of dialogue? "Who am I? Where am I? Where is this? What am I doing?" Can be deleted appropriately. [Character Design]: Except for the protagonist and the system, the other characters are not three-dimensional enough, that is, the portrayal of other characters is not enough. [Rhythm]: The pace of the article is okay, not a procrastinating article. You can keep this rhythm

I feel like the writing is not very good_(:з∠)_

O(^▽^)oI give you 9.5 Points.... After reading the comment area, many people don't like the way of asking yourself... But I want to explain... This way of asking yourself is a way of writing... A kind of laughter that breaks out after being addicted... Cough cough cough...