Devil's Paradise Lost

Hahahahahaha, author, the devil you wrote is really funny. Do you want to write that the devil makes people laugh every day and finally makes them laugh to death to realize the restoration of the country?

Quickly browse to Chapter 20. . . The dialogue is still procrastinating. It cannot shorten the sentences to be concise and neat, and there is no intrigue and back-and-forth. There is not even a point of laughter that can be found. It is bland and tasteless. Although I am very curious about the relationship between angels and demons, the relationship between hell, heaven and the human world. But it's really hard to trust readers to read it. I don't know if the situation will get better later. Give the author some meager suggestions, streamline the sentences or use sentences to adjust the atmosphere of the whole book. The direct dialogue between the characters is not as plain as water, but a back and forth between you and me, or a sharp hit to the point that makes people feel heartbroken, or a gag and nonsense, or you can let yourself go and be amused. No matter which kind of character, it must reflect the character's personality. Because dialogue is the most intuitive way to understand a character's personality. The atmosphere and environment, the world with angels, has only developed to the level of the Middle Ages, and hell would have been destroyed if it were not the protagonist. No matter how you look at it, it is worthy of joy for people, but I didn't see it. The keynote of the entire book is to use the advanced civilization of another world to impact this backward world. The protagonist is a demon king, with only demons and devils under his command. How to impact this world with otherworldly entertainment under the supervision of angels and amid the doubts of humans is the core tone. I hope the above suggestions will be helpful to the author in his next writing. I won't interrupt you and take my leave.

Hmm... It's a slow-burning type. I don't have a good grasp of the rhythm. Although there is a sense of substitution, it is really not strong. The dialogue is draggy. Except for the main branch, which is unknown. But the writing is quite satisfactory, just like food. I'm currently reading Chapter 10. Leave a message while reading later