Lin Yin Must Die

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In my opinion, the author can refer to the following. The prologue is useless. It is recommended not to use it. There are too many dialogues in the previous chapters. It seems long-winded, and the background of the story is not very clear. At least I can't simulate the scene when I close my eyes. The characteristics of the protagonist are not deep enough. I feel like a protagonist with a mosaic face. It looks a bit dozing. The dialogue between passers-by makes readers understand that it is the revival of spiritual energy. The first three chapters make people understand that it is a modern immortal cultivator with plug-ins. The second chapter talks about the city lord turning into a cow to feed Qin Mu. The third chapter makes people know that the protagonist is following the villain. Later, the world view of the pros and cons is different. I won't explain it. In a word, just close your eyes. I can imagine what the background is. Now that I have just finished reading the first three chapters of other people's character settings, I can't even tell whether it is ancient or modern.

The writing style is acceptable, but I personally think the effect would be better if the prologue was removed. After reading the prologue, I kept looking for Ye Wuhen in the text. After flipping through a few pages, I found that it was not there, and then I didn't want to continue reading. You may want to set up suspense, but the prologue is the finishing touch if it is written well, and it is superfluous if it is not written well. It is recommended that you divide it into volumes. When readers discover the connection between Ye Wuhen and Lin Yin, put this prologue at the beginning of the new volume. Vote for support and keep going! 👍👍👍

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This work is really beautiful, the writing style is beautiful, the plot is thrilling, the battle scenes are vividly written, the love and hate are love and hatred, and the character portrayal is also very good. All in all, in short, I am determined to read this book. At night, there is a moon in the sky! Waiting for the day when the author will be listed on the list.