Necronomicon

Starting from Panlong more than ten years ago, the so-called Western fantasy themes have evolved into Eastern fantasy themes, which is also the beginning of fantasy~ Just listen to what the family says! I read the first three chapters of this book carefully. Some of them were puzzled and some of them were sighing. First of all, there are some problems in the first chapter, and I will point them out first. In the first sentence of the opening chapter, the three paragraphs are divided by exclamation points, which is a wrong timing. The 25-year-old young master of the earth speaks vulgar language in the middle. Even if his family is ruined in the later stage, he still has the necessary qualities, which slightly lowers the rating. But the good thing is that a preliminary world view has been constructed. At least I know that the elves and the Karas are eyeing each other, and the dragons and the undead are fighting endlessly against the five empires, which instantly describes the dangerous state of the world. This is commendable. Secondly, there are a lot of characters appearing in the beginning, which I can think of as foreshadowing, but some of them are bad because they fail to grasp the core. One-eyed mentor? Faye who seems to like drinking? These two characters can only be described as embellishments. The only person who plays a leading role is probably the author's subordinate, the black magician called Grandpa. Chapter 2, the core point, glory is my life. This point is gay to me. It does not need much foreshadowing. Unfortunately, the author has made a large-scale expansion of the environment and situation with the wooden box of the soul state. I didn't know why. It wasn't until the finishing touch of this article came out that I subconsciously asked: "Is it to promote the spirit of chivalry?" To be honest: the sentences are too heavy-handed and need to be streamlined. But that sentence, I can irresponsibly tell the author, is indeed a good word, but unfortunately... It was not used on the steel blade! When it comes to the third chapter, I have to talk in detail about the senses that the three golden chapters brought to me. It is suitable for slow-paced and careful reading, and the author needs to be concise and the text and sentences need to be modified. If you watch it at a fast pace, you may be a little confused. In addition, I would like to give some opinions. I read the whole story very carefully. The suspense and foreshadowing of the world view are basically completed. The only biggest disadvantage is that it puts the cart before the horse. Why put the cart before the horse? There is too little personal trust in the protagonist Gesa, and there is no clear expression on how the protagonist will move forward in this dangerous world. It is also commonly known as the sense of introduction, which is not very strong. Repeat the above words: Don't listen to what the family says. There may be too much criticism, but the flaws are not covered up. There are still many bright spots. I hope the author will work hard.