Pirates of the Sea Wind God

Brother, are you writing an essay? Or an essay? Oh my god, it's boring, it's really cowhide. I really couldn't bear it anymore, so I came here to comment.

I'm sick of seeing the wind developing spiritual intelligence.

I feel like the tone is so childish and makes me feel uncomfortable.

I personally think that the protagonist Feng Feng Fruit is too magically modified and makes people dislike it. Feng Feng Fruit can be called the strongest natural type without any magic modification, and it is no worse than Thunder. 1. Completely ignore physical attacks 2. The elementalization is completely invisible, and combined with the sight and color, the enemy cannot be found at all 3. The attack is also invisible and will not reveal the location. 4. Seeing, hearing, color, and predicting the future cannot capture the intangible 5. You can fly and attack at the same time, which other fruits cannot do 6. The whole world is like wind, it is easy to borrow power, consume very little, and have long lasting power. 7. Seaspout, nemesis of devil fruit users 8. It can form a wind shield in a spiral manner. Only a few natural systems can do this, and even domineering energy cannot break through it. 9. The flying and slashing wind blade is comparable to the world's greatest swordsman and is easy to use.

The author of the Wind Fruit really didn't understand it. You must know that wind is colorless, but you have to make it cyan. You must have read too many novels. Visible and invisible are two types of combat power. There are also moves that are easy to develop. Don't mention wind, just tornado, wind blade and the like.

The protagonist is so useless, the fruit is really poorly developed.

A move suddenly turned into a magic weapon and I was also drunk.

Matthew is exhausted, Matthew is very sad, and the way he writes is like writing in a primary school textbook... It's really poisonous

There are a lot of typos, please pay attention.

There is no such thing as a Devil Fruit. Devil Fruit consumes physical strength.

Not only is your introduction weak, but it's still the same with more than 300,000 yuan.

Let's practice on other writing platforms first.

This. . . . . What is it? Why do I always feel like watching One Piece from a third perspective?

I'm a little confused about this. Also, it is recommended that the author strengthen training in sentence segmentation and how to use symbols, especially commas! "Although Matthew has changed, Nami's fate" does not require a comma at all. Having this comma can easily lead to misunderstandings. There are many other books written by this author, and I hope they can be corrected.

Once you see Nami, there is no need to look at it. It's a routine.

In fact, the author, you can refer to the poisonous milk powder method!

It's all about plot, what about your fight scenes? What about the plot of the protagonist you wrote? ? ? Are you a fan or something? Do you want to be a feature-length documentary? ? ?

When I see the wind, I think of Hasaygei

Why didn't anyone say anything?

How should I put it? The writing is a bit embarrassing to watch and it's always small.