Rebirth in the Second Dimension

One Piece World is really poorly written.

The protagonist always said that there is no weakest fruit, so as Goldfinger, I gave the protagonist a chili fruit, and he died in the third chapter with a confused look on his face.

Author, to be honest, your talent for writing books is very good, but your preliminary research is very poor. Simply put, your writing is good but your setting skills are poor. So I completely understand your original intention of writing fan fiction, but I want to say that the setting is the only thing that saves more effort in fan creation than original creation. However, your setting skills are not flattering and you can only score 59 points to barely pass. You have a certain understanding of fan works. I made some changes of my own to facilitate your creation, but they are obviously superficial. For casual readers, it doesn't matter because your writing style is really good. But for someone who truly understands the essence of fan fiction, it will be obvious that you are perfunctory in setting. You may have made a lot of efforts and think you have given your best, but I would say that you really haven't worked hard enough or you really have no settings. You need to find a way to overcome the talent on your own. The setting of Sea of Death is actually very friendly. Anyone who has read most of the original works can have his own ideas and it will be accepted by others. However, Xingyue is very difficult to set up because his original work is still updating itself and has become a mature system similar to Marvel. It may be very confusing but you really can't write it with a little knowledge. Your story It's okay, but it really doesn't match Xingyue. All the book reviews are applauding, but as someone who knows a little bit, I can responsibly say that your writing of Xingyue is the worst. It's not that the story is bad, but it's not the world of Xingyue at all. Unless you can add a big environment and reconstruct the world based on the protagonist himself, your book will be completely black history by Xingyue. Why do so many people write about Sea of Death? Just because it is so well written, why are there so few good works in Xingyue? It's just because it's very difficult to write. I don't know if the author can understand what I mean. At least the book is not bad. If there are more skip-shaped moons, I will continue reading.

To be honest, I really didn't understand those who said the author's writing style is good.

The author has written so many worlds, and I think fate is the best one.

Good-looking (｡･ω･｡)ﾉ♡, non-toxic, non-stalling, all orders supported.

It feels very good, except for the beginning. But the progress is great. Starting from Naruto Hayate, this novel is so good!

Kushina turned out not to be the heroine, so she left. Naruto likes her

I started reading it from the Death Chapter. The author didn't clearly explain the strength of the male protagonist, but it was all in place. The system of one world will not be transferred to other worlds or cleared. Instead, the male protagonist will be asked to understand it first, change the way of using it, and then bring it back. In this way, when you gradually enter the world of high martial arts, you will not suddenly become stronger or feel inconsistent. In addition, in the fate chapter, he fought hard against Archer and Rider with his domineering look, which was super cool.

I'm afraid you're not kidding me. I've only read twenty chapters and there are so many mistakes and omissions. Using Devil Fruit consumes chakra. How can you let a Devil Fruit user with no chakra in One Piece survive? Doflamingo is afraid he will cry when he sees the protagonist's weak string fruit. There is a Yin Seal but he always runs out of chakra from time to time. Is this Yin Seal fake? The most important thing is that in the novel, the protagonist loses chakra after being hit twice. Is a person like Doflamingo who has no chakra but can use the Thread Fruit for such a long time a real man?

It feels pretty good. Let's continue and take a look.

Why do you guys like to write comics about the three major migrant workers so much? The plot has been repeated over and over without any major changes.

Did the author write Date Live?

Very well written, why is the excitement so bad?

Finished spreading flowers! Looking forward to the author's new work. Psychological words: It's a pity that the writing is a bit short. It would be great if there were more anime worlds. 🤔

Dead Fire Sea Type Moon Nowadays, anime fans basically cannot do without these, they are all tired of watching them.

The Naruto chapter is pretty good, but the Pirates chapter is really average. First of all, the mission is to end the era of great pirates. The first thing the protagonist thinks of is to kill the four emperors and clean up the new world. This does not exist. As long as the Tianlong World Government is still ruling, pirates will not be eliminated. The second is to find one piece, which is more reliable, but to achieve this, we still need to confront the world government. Secondly, it is enough to grab Luffy's crew and get Robin to interpret the historical text. Nami is also good as a genius navigator. There is really no need to pull Zoro. Although the potential is unlimited, it still takes time to grow. When the protagonist first arrives in the pirate world, his strength is comparable to that of the Shichibukai. Only by finding famous and strong men as crew members can he better keep up with him.

I haven't watched it yet, but I just want to know if it's good or not.

It felt a bit childish at first, but now it's quite interesting. . . My writing has improved a lot

How is Shennong here poisonous?😰

I only watched Naruto: One Piece and One Piece, but not the other two. Generally speaking, it was okay. Maybe it wasn't specifically about Naruto. The pace was a bit fast, and the protagonist's IQ was also online.

The writing is very good, but the timeline feels messy

Recently, there is a book shortage, and I found a 50k+ comprehensive comic. Let's take a look at it first.

The author should change the first chapter. There are too many bugs and change it to a simpler story.

The author is great, who is the heroine? One or more?

After taking a look at it, although Kaido's Dragon Fruit was changed to the Kirin Beast Fruit, after all, it was written before Oda announced the fruit's power, and the estimation error is excusable, but the plot of One Piece is indeed a bit worse.

It's too descriptive. I suggest the author describe more about the human race's language, behavior, demeanor, and psychology. Especially language and behavior. Overwriting many places in one stroke will make the plot incomplete. Wouldn't it be better to write more carefully to improve the word count? There are also some dialogues that are silly and don't feel like normal people's logical thinking. It is recommended that the author pay attention when designing the plot and writing dialogue.

Aren't only women able to practice the Yin Seal? When will men also be able to practice 🤔

Sure enough, Naruto is a muddy work. Once the darkness is added, it can't be stopped.

Why should we follow the plot? You are so strong, why don't you become Hokage yourself? It's pointless to forcefully follow the plot