Recast the Fairyland

I was shopping in Longkong today and saw a post about the author. With a gossip heart, I read it carefully. Of course, I am not a person involved and am not qualified to make any comments, but I still came here to take a look out of curiosity. Why come? Mainly, the author and I are almost the same age and have the same dream. Of course, I may be in a better situation than the author, and my living conditions are just fine, but my love for online articles is no different. Is it wrong to have dreams? I think it's right! Dare to give up everything and fight for your dreams. Whether you succeed or not, it is your own choice, and others are not qualified to comment. Talking about the article, the author's writing style and narrative fluency are excellent, and the story structure is also well advanced. Although the subject matter is a bit old, you can still find some new ideas in it, and it is generally above the standard. The post said that you have been writing since 2008. Some people joked that you have been writing for ten years and you are still a loser at such an old age. But what happened to your forties? If you live to be eighty, you still have forty years, and your life is just over halfway. If you write for another ten years, with such a writing foundation, who says it is impossible to transform from a street fighter to a minor god, and from a minor god to a great one? Come on, brothers, if you can achieve something in ten years, let's get together then! A small reward is not a sign of respect, I hope this can stick! 🌹

It is still necessary to strengthen logic and readability. Keep up the good work, come on

Well, I know it's probably useless. It's still the 100th chapter. The previous post talked about the first two paragraphs, and this time I'll talk about the subsequent plot. As usual, I'll start with the original text, then my personal opinions. Just when he was about to step forward to investigate, a rainbow light suddenly rushed out from the rubble, accompanied by Bai Yishan's angry shout: "Boy, I remember your breath! Next time we meet, I will kill you!" Bai Yishan glared at Fang Yun fiercely, and used some magic method to turn into light and escape. Looking up at the extremely fast speed of the escaping light, it only flashed for a few times before it flew out of the huge pit and disappeared into the horizon. Fang Yun couldn't help but blinked in surprise. It seemed that he knew too little about cultivating immortals. At least he didn't know what Bai Yishan's method of escaping was? But then I thought about it, Bai Yishan tried to escape with such means, which meant that he was afraid and did not dare to fight with him anymore. In this way, his strength should not be underestimated, at least he was very strong below the foundation building stage. Seeing the enemy flee, a normal person's reaction would definitely be to chase him! The main character in the article has no action at all and is simply an idiot. Even if you know you can't catch up, you should at least make a move to catch up! The protagonist may not be wise and wise, but there is no need to be as stupid as a pig! I think as a reader, no one wants to read a protagonist who looks like an idiot. Now that I'm done venting, let's talk about how I would write it. First, let's describe the tragic situation of the enemy after they came out of the rubble. The protagonist put in so much effort, but in the end the enemy was not dead and looked a little miserable, but that's not too much! Then, the enemy either fights for a while and escapes, or simply escapes as you wrote, and the protagonist must take action to stop it. Here, the protagonist just needs to resort to other means to make it not easy for the enemy no matter what choice he makes. Even if he escapes in the end, the enemy must have been severely damaged and must have managed to survive, causing heavy and irreparable losses. Finally, how does the protagonist feel after the enemy escapes. You must feel frustrated, realize your shortcomings, and then decide to work harder in practice. Okay, this little plot ends here. I'm done saying that, that's it.

I have been following my friend for several years, and this book is quite to my liking. Whether it is the writing, the plot, or the miters between paragraphs, it is unmatched by the previous books. If you stick to it, you will definitely become a god in this book. Leave the post as a note.

I don't know why I didn't stick with it after signing the contract and started a new book instead. I haven't signed mine either. Although I write very little every day, I have been persisting. I always like to look at the data at the beginning. As a result, I spent 200,000 yuan before I knew it, and I became much calmer. I felt that writing was just a personal hobby, and I wanted to tell stories to everyone. I might not write well, but I would not give up easily. I didn't sign mine, so I saw other bookmarks but didn't stick to them, which felt a bit regretful. Don't blame me, I sincerely wish you the best. The Sword-making Mountain is so hot that I can be highly recommended. I suggest you not to change your name. This name is quite good!