Time Travel: Cultivation of Immortality Among Mortals

It took more than two hours to read the eighty chapters. The reason why I was interested in reading it was because I have never seen a fan of Mortal. I have read Mortal a few times. The mortal world, especially the human world, is really huge and delicate. With this as a background, even a fan has a lot of room for development. It is another kind of spiritual sustenance for us mortal fans. But after reading it, I was a little disappointed. I originally wanted to say these things when I was reading about Chapter 20. I read Chapter 60 with the idea of ​​​​seeing whether it would improve in the future, but unfortunately, it did not. The first is the content. Most of the important plots are excerpted from the original text of Mortal, and the plot development is basically written according to Han Li's experience. Even though the recent plots of seizing the island and the Sixth Palace have been modified, the shadow of the original work can still be clearly seen in it, making people feel like they are reading the original work again. The system was also mentioned in the first few chapters of this book. This is a huge world, and Han Li has only experienced a very small part of it. So why should we follow Han Li's path? And the system also said that Han Li couldn't be robbed of his opportunities, so why couldn't he go to other parts of this huge world to experience it. The protagonist in the book sometimes remembers the details of some scenes very clearly and sometimes turns a blind eye to some plots. The main places where Han Li was active were Tiannan, Luanxinghai, and Dajin. Tiannan and Luan Xinghai are small in scope, small in power and relatively simple in relationship. They are almost explained in the original work, so they can use less abbreviations. The Jin Dynasty is not only huge and has many forces (Ten Righteous Paths, Ten Demonic Paths, etc.), But the original work also explains less and has a lot of room for development. Moreover, Han Li mentioned before his ascension that there are several other continents that can be used by the author. Although he is a fan of mortals, I think many readers are like me. They don't want to read a new biography of mortals living in the shadow of Wangyu, but some new and exciting stories in this wonderful world. In addition, regarding the protagonist's character, I feel that there is no sense of existence in my mind. The protagonist of this book is still Han Li. The description from Han Li's perspective (basically a reproduction of the original work) is almost the same as the description from the protagonist's perspective. Moreover, the protagonist has no personality characteristics of his own, and the relationship network is extremely simple. One master, and the other uncles. The senior brothers are dispensable, and the rest of the original characters are almost zero. Although Han Li in the original work also has this simple relationship network, there are still two senior brothers from the Luoyun Sect, as well as confidantes such as Nangong Wan, Zi Ling, Yuan Yao, and Bing Feng (of course, it is still too early for more than ninety chapters, but there is no sign of it). So I hope to see the protagonist as a real protagonist, rather than a witness to Han Li. Third, the relationship with Han Li also feels very inconsistent. The two do not have a deep friendship, but the protagonist seems to have always thought that he has a good relationship with Han Li. If he went by Han Li's personality, he would have suspected that you have some secrets. I don't quite understand the last system, it's inconsistent, or the protagonist has too many adventures to handle.        ，，， My writing style is not good and I can't write much, but I still hope that the author can write a mortal fanfic with his own style. When we read the mortal fanfic, we don't want to pay homage to Han Li's footsteps, but we want to relive the feeling of exploring and fighting in the unknown fantasy world. If I said something bad or wrong, please forgive me!

Keep it up, updates are too slow

Go read good books, read Jin Yong's martial arts, and read ancient martial arts such as Seven Heroes and Five Righteousnesses. See more and imitate more. Don't read two third-rate online novels and start writing nonsense. Otherwise, if you write it down, no one will read it. First-rate online novels imitate first-rate martial arts masterpieces, and third-rate online novels imitate first-rate online novels. So guess which novel imitates third-rate novels?

The segmentation should be clear (narration and what is said) Don't talk to yourself and talk a lot of nonsense (such as your random thoughts.) There are many poisonous points in settings that I will not list them all. Come on

Come on! It's the first time I've seen a mortal fan.

Another graduate from the starting point eunuch class.

Eunuch? Author, speak up

I've gained weight, I feel uncomfortable waiting for your update! You have to hold on and don't let yourself die.

😭, your update.

Are you finally unable to continue copying? You even changed the name at the beginning, but copied large sections of the original text later, with almost no branching plots. Is this really good?

Can't live without licking? The protagonist has everything. An invincible golden finger has copied a small green bottle for you. There is also a high-quality cauldron and a lot of treasures that reach the sky. After slowly practicing, Taozu is nothing. He keeps licking the protagonist and even actively asks him to become a brother of the opposite sex. It really disgusts me. Stop being disgusting.

Alas, you entered the palace anyway, ignoring my high expectations for you.

Good guy, the protagonist's chance treasure is many times that of Old Devil Han, but he ends up being almost as good as the protagonist? ? ? ? I had to fight back and forth for a long time to kill a mini-boss. I didn't practice the techniques that can be directly cultivated to form a body. I had to use the Qingyuan Sword Technique. I had all the magic weapons on my body. As a result, all kinds of sword energy flew around during the fight. I didn't use the magic weapons. The promised cultivation was many times deeper than those of the same class. As a result, the supporting characters still had their true energy, but the protagonist almost ran out of all his true energy and was also drunk.

I feel sick when I see the chaotic plot behind it! Doesn't match the front

🙄🙄🙄A eunuch? Entering the palace?

Group chairman? Is this the nature of your mind?

I don't need to read this novel. Ever since the Mortal Immortal Realm chapter was completed, it has become difficult for mortals to write fan stories. Han Li is the predecessor of the Lord of the Reincarnation Hall. He has the law of time to penetrate through it. There is no interaction with Han Li at all.

Some Taoist friends said that Silver Moon can be accepted. I thought about it and thought it was feasible. Now I want to ask all readers for their opinions. If you think it is okay or not, you can leave a message. I will write it soon (*^▽^)/★*☆Thank you for your participation.

After ten chapters, I feel like I need to continue to support it. Come out and show your face, lest the author think I'm missing.

Updated seven years ago🙂

It feels like reading a piece of writing. It's not about whether the writing is good or not, but it feels like the words are all piled together.