Konoha Soul Society Lottery System

Let me tell you my personal opinion. The writing is very messy. It can be seen that the author wants to write Naruto well, but there are many cases where the preface does not match the afterword, and it is a mess. There is also the protagonist who transforms into a dragon. Nowadays, writing about transforming into a dragon in the second dimension can basically be abandoned. You can add your own elements to the fan fiction, but it must be basically loyal to the original work. It would be very inconsistent to write about Death and Naruto (in my personal opinion, Death basically completely crushes Naruto in terms of mystery, and they are written together forcibly, so to speak) , according to the original work, Death's Binding Path 1 can kill most ninjas with a jounin level, including special jounin. After all, the ability of Death is basically aimed at the soul. Look at Uncle Snake, so Niu has nothing to do with the soul.) The power of two different systems is written together, so the most basic thing is to look at the mystery. Although this is fan fiction, the differences between the power systems are still huge. Then there is another point. The three ninjas graduated at the age of five or six, which does not mean that they can deal with the ninjas at the age of five or six, let alone fight. At what age can the protagonist fight against Namikaze Minato? How to write it in the later stage? Even though he couldn't defeat Namikaze Minato when he was five or six years old, shouldn't he be crushed when he was ten years old? After all, the protagonist has a system. He will be able to defeat Madara in two years, and he will be able to crush the ninja world before he is 15 years old. What about the timeline? Do celebrities no longer need to appear?

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It feels like the author is writing the novel as a comic. So it seems very confusing. My suggestion is that when describing a secondary character, try to stand from a God's perspective. Don't write down the character's thoughts. Instead, express his thoughts through the character's actions. Another point is that in comics, the subjects of all actions are intuitively reflected in each frame, and there is no question of "determining who did a certain action." But novels are completely different. You must clearly explain the subject, object, and result of each behavior in words, otherwise it will easily lead to confusion.

The author's book is called Konoha. Why is the protagonist reborn in Kirigakure?

I haven't read this book in at least half a year and yet it's still ranked first, my God

After reading a few chapters, the reason why I couldn't stand it was that the title didn't match and it was about Konoha. But when I clicked on it, it was indeed in Kirigakure Village. Now I don't really remember the plot. But the reason why I clicked in to say a few words is because every time I search for the God of Death, this novel always comes up. Putting aside this, the most important thing I saw when I saw him was a quick glance. All I could see was the introduction: What do you think of life and death? Oh my god, my head hurts.

I was drunk, I wrote well, and suddenly I said that I could save Naruto's mother. I was so blunt that it was so poisonous that I might as well just run away. You are a Kirigakure ninja.

The subject matter is very good, but the writing is so confusing that I am confused and blind.

Personally, please forgive me. The writing is a bit messy. Maybe my radio wave is not up to par with the author's. I can't always understand what I'm writing. The setting is a bit confusing.

I want to say, your title is Konoha, but it turns out it's not from Konoha?

The knife can't be extended that long, nor that fast, but it will turn into dust for a moment during the expansion and contraction process, which contains deadly toxins that can dissolve cells. This is the true ability of the magic gun. Shikaku is already cold, right? Why isn't it cold yet?